phyco

[CaptainNemo]

the red becomes from a vibrant flow
to a suttle sacrifice of all life
finaly resting as dark sharp screams
tainted by green unforgetable realism
hopeless planning, screwing, muteing
soundless dreams

timeless concequence remains always now
guliver can't travel far enough
your perfect body becomes my rotting flesh
your perfect soul becomes my treason, testing
nothing left worth winning

never ending failing
creature on earth
with a broken heart
and a broken head

priced unlasting redemption
swamped futures spitting out candy
pure honest and unforgiving candy
the lobe loves its perfect pictures
untill my world being only yours
becuase I suck it back
then swamps become spectrum

but i never ever blame you

so sleep sleep sweet unknowing
in becoming you, i hope to stay
and stay unforgiving
break by nothing and steal fruitful
don't creep or whisper
as these don't wake unknowings
and stresful, would such a small sound be

stay the vibrant flow for me
because unknowing now i'm not

(this only works for me with darc marc and DJ pauze)

[CaptainNemo]

oh yeah and does anyone want to say anything?

[camus]

CN,

I think perhaps the no comments may be on account of the typos, especially the title.

Run a spell check, there are some glaring errors.

I'm presuming you are a new writer, brimming with enthusiasm, this shows, with some intriguing imagery:

"swamped futures spitting out candy"

and some great lines:

"and stresful, would such a small sound be"

an example of inversion working well, in my opinion.

potentially sound.