Wounded knees

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Wounded knees

Post by twoleftfeet » Thu Jun 13, 2019 2:16 pm

This is an oldie that I've tinkered with,just for fun.
I needed a body part to rhyme with "pass" - I could only think of one -and you need to pronounce both words
like a cowboy. :)
In fact, read it in your best Johm Wayne voice.
I'm not sure if I should misspell "pawnee" as "pawknee"..
Apologies to any Native Americans - no disrespect is intended.
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Don't bury my heart at Wounded Knee
for I need it to lay a hand on.
Don't bury my knees at Wounded Heart
or I won't have a leg to stand on.

I'm going to the Happy Hunting Ground:
I'll be needing all my bits.
They've always been a part of me,
they've never been apart from me,
and each part knows where it fits.

If you really must cut a part from me
then please let it be my ass:
my pony needs it more than you,
so stick it on him with rawhide glue -
we'll race down Pawnee Pass,we two,
when you put him out to grass.
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Re: Wounded knees

Post by bjondon » Thu Jun 13, 2019 3:00 pm

I like it - both violent and wry and beautifully paced - so kind of appropriate.
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Post by Macavity » Thu Jun 13, 2019 9:20 pm

Yes, nicely done TLF. I'd keep "pawnee", nudges a shadow.

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Re: Wounded knees

Post by Poet » Fri Jun 14, 2019 7:42 pm

Nice poem. I love the message of it.

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Post by camus » Fri Jun 14, 2019 8:33 pm

Geoff is that you? Geoff, Geoff, Geoff, Geoff, Geoff, Geoff, Geoff, Geoff, Geoff, Geoff, Geoff, Geoff, Geoff, Geoff, Geoff...

Sorry, got carried away. So happy to see you back here...
"Don't bury my heart at Wounded Knee
for I need it to lay a hand on."
So, I was expecting a Cormac McCarthy type affair, all alienated native American Indian, then came the humour...And it was witty and I especially enjoyed:
They've always been a part of me,
they've never been apart from me,
and each part knows where it fits.
Twas fun, but could've been darker...

Your name's not Geoff is it?

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Re: Wounded knees

Post by twoleftfeet » Sat Jun 15, 2019 12:47 pm

bjondon wrote:
Thu Jun 13, 2019 3:00 pm
I like it - both violent and wry and beautifully paced - so kind of appropriate.
Jules
Thanks,bj
It started with the idea of "what is the plural of WOUNDED KNEE?" (as in the book "Bury My Heart at Wounded Knee")
The answer sounds so silly I couldn't resist an attempt at impersonating Spike Milligan.

Thanks,mac
- I'll stick with "pawnee", then..

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I'm glad you liked it.

Chris,
Thank you. Yes,Geoff my name is.
What? :shock: Severed body parts isn't dark enough for you?

My brother is good at impressions.He doesn't do JOHN WAYNE but he's offered to record it in a FRANK SPENCER voice..
What do you think? :lol:

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Re: Wounded knees

Post by bjondon » Sun Jun 16, 2019 12:37 pm

Yay! Go Frank!
He would definitely pause and check Betty wasn't listening
before saying 'arse'.
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Re: Wounded knees

Post by Namyh » Mon Jun 17, 2019 8:17 pm

Twoleftfeet - This was fun and I liked it. Namyh

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Re: Wounded knees

Post by barrett » Tue Jun 18, 2019 12:36 am

Brilliant fun, TLF! You make it look so effortless. It's like Robert W. Service suddenly got a sense of humour!

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