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Postby barrie » Wed Apr 12, 2006 3:33 pm

not as we know it
boy scouts are told to tie one
have I spelt it write?
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Postby twoleftfeet » Wed Apr 12, 2006 3:45 pm

Have I spelt it write?
To knot knots or not to knot -
I can see no hitch
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Postby barrie » Wed Apr 12, 2006 3:48 pm

I can see no hitch
just a strong desire to scratch
an itch with a hitch
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Postby twoleftfeet » Wed Apr 12, 2006 4:01 pm

An itch with a hitch
is not a hitch-hiker's itch -
Please scratch my backpack
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Postby barrie » Wed Apr 12, 2006 4:10 pm

please scratch my backpack,
did you say? Just carry on,
get along your way.
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Postby juliadebeauvoir » Wed Apr 12, 2006 4:55 pm

Get along your way,
scratch your backpack, how absurd!
camping manners please...!
"Freedom is what you do with what's been done to you."
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Postby barrie » Wed Apr 12, 2006 6:30 pm

camping manners please
camping womanners don't they?
Have I got that right?
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Postby juliadebeauvoir » Wed Apr 12, 2006 7:36 pm

Have I got that right?
I am use to being wrong,
just ask my children..
"Freedom is what you do with what's been done to you."
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Postby barrie » Thu Apr 13, 2006 1:09 pm

just ask my children,
said Kronos, if I ate them
because of hunger!!
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Postby twoleftfeet » Thu Apr 13, 2006 5:47 pm

because of hunger
I'm a Hungarian but
I am a Cretan
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Postby barrie » Thu Apr 13, 2006 6:30 pm

I am a Cretan
I am a Samaritan
I am the walrus
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Postby Bombadil » Thu Apr 13, 2006 7:05 pm

I am the Walrus,
they are the egg-men, I--shut
the fuck up Donnie.
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Postby juliadebeauvoir » Fri Apr 14, 2006 2:31 am

The fuck up Donnie...
who is this Donnie to be
defamed and denounced?
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Postby barrie » Fri Apr 14, 2006 3:07 pm

defamed and denounced
hit de ball hard with de bat
and de ball will bounce.
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Postby juliadebeauvoir » Fri Apr 14, 2006 9:09 pm

And de ball will bounce
and de cookie* crumbles--so
dat's de way it is!

*I think you call them digestibles or biscuits.
...too many syllables!
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Postby barrie » Sat Apr 15, 2006 10:04 am

dat's de way it is,
said the man, pointing uphill,
it's downhill beyond.
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Postby juliadebeauvoir » Sat Apr 15, 2006 12:39 pm

It's downhill beyond,
the hut, where the hermit lives
riffraff and rubbish
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Postby barrie » Sat Apr 15, 2006 1:20 pm

riffraff and rubbish
reefers, hashish and roll-ups
where will it all end?
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Postby juliadebeauvoir » Sat Apr 15, 2006 2:33 pm

"Where will it all end?
Great Jumping Jehoshaphat!"
Sam cried, wringing hands.
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Postby barrie » Sat Apr 15, 2006 2:38 pm

Sam cried, wringing hands,
ringing the bells with wrung hands.
Where's Esmeralda?
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Postby juliadebeauvoir » Sat Apr 15, 2006 3:18 pm

Where's Esmeralda?
I have a hunch she's in jail
quasi guilty wench
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Postby barrie » Sat Apr 15, 2006 3:30 pm

quasi guilty wench?
poor old Quasi's now off work -
he's got a bad back!
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Postby juliadebeauvoir » Sat Apr 15, 2006 3:43 pm

He's got a bad back
a face only mum could love,
or a mask could fix!
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Postby barrie » Sat Apr 15, 2006 3:57 pm

or a mask could fix
not the world's ugliest man,
he just looks like him!
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Postby juliadebeauvoir » Sat Apr 15, 2006 4:35 pm

He just looks like him
dresses same--shirt and knickers
that's because they're twins.
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