Mirrie Dancers

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Mirrie Dancers

Postby Antcliff » Sat Jul 16, 2016 10:11 am

I hear a knock, open the door. It's the morose dancers. They come every year around this time, collecting money for the local lifeboat fund.

They start to tap dance in a dull, perfunctory manner; as if offering satire.

"Hello", one says. "We're the morose dancers collecting for the local lifeboat. For a small donation we will continue performing, or leave if you wish. Most people are happy to see us go. Our life's work is to express despair and very negative emotions in dance. We've won awards."

They form a circle and place their hands in such a way as to suggest that they are all intent on back stabbing.

"You were here last year", I say.

"Yes, sir. Do you want see our dance on the theme of eternal recurrence?".

"No, I think..." I dip into my pocket, summoning up the strength to say "Go!".

"We can tell, sir, that you are not keen to see us. By character and training we are acutely sensitive to all forms of negativity."

"It isn't that I am wholly negative about negativity", I say. "Perhaps I am just not a big fan of dance. If you were the joyful dancers, I suspect I would say the same."

"Dance is not for all, sir", one says. They start to weave in and out, pretending to urinate on each other as they pass. "We understand."

"So if I give you a fiver, you'll go with no hard feelings?"

"Fine, sir." They speak as one, doing their special shaking dance of un-appreciation and rejection. "We can live with un-appreciation and rejection. We are used to it."

They continue to shake, shouting: "We learnt this dance from orphans!".

Until, with a fiver paid, I watch them wander down the road. They seem very happy. I feel dreadful.
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Re: Mirrie Dancers

Postby Ros » Sat Jul 16, 2016 10:57 am

Enjoyed greatly!

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Re: Mirrie Dancers

Postby Boat » Sat Jul 16, 2016 11:13 pm

Hello, Antcliff.

Superb.
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Re: Mirrie Dancers

Postby Antcliff » Sun Jul 17, 2016 11:22 pm

Gosh, thanks Ros and Pat.

I must try my hand at some more prose it seems.

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Re: Mirrie Dancers

Postby David » Fri Jul 22, 2016 5:15 pm

Yes, very good. Didn't quite get the "Mirrie". Nietzsche and morris dancers! Who'd have thought? (I should add that our friend Bill, when living in Oldham, was a morris dancer, but a very merry one, I believe. It was mostly a way of getting from one pub to another, while skipping. With hankies.)

Antcliff wrote:"So if I give you are fiver, you'll go with no hard feelings?"

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Antcliff wrote:I must try my hand at some more prose it seems.

Yes! Do.

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Re: Mirrie Dancers

Postby Antcliff » Fri Jul 22, 2016 7:28 pm

Thanks, David.

Arrgh....that is the problem with prose, typos creepin in. Thanks for spotting.

"The Mirrie Dancers" = Shetlandic for the northern lights. Which is no justification at all, none. None.

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Re: Mirrie Dancers

Postby Arian » Sat Sep 24, 2016 6:46 pm

Amusing, Seth. Well done.

Perhaps 'summoning up', as opposed to 'getting up', which his a bit ugly?

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Re: Mirrie Dancers

Postby bodkin » Sat Sep 24, 2016 9:09 pm

:-D -- or should I say :-(
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Re: Mirrie Dancers

Postby Antcliff » Sun Sep 25, 2016 6:55 pm

Arian wrote:Amusing, Seth. Well done.

Perhaps 'summoning up', as opposed to 'getting up', which his a bit ugly?

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Thanks, Peter

Glad to hear it. Yeh, good idea, I will shift from "getting up" to "summoning up".

Thanks, Ian

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Re: Mirrie Dancers

Postby fortytwo » Tue Jan 09, 2018 3:12 pm

And they say Monty Python is dead !!
Hilarious throughout but even more so if you could have connected the "urinating dance" and the "shaking [it] dance more directly. Morris Dancers ....."Morose dancers", omg ! .genius !
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