Centrifugal Eye

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Centrifugal Eye

Post by Macavity » Sun Jun 12, 2016 5:55 am

Making an appearance

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As usual thanks for all the help

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Re: Centrifugal Eye

Post by Firebird » Sun Jun 12, 2016 11:05 am

Really liked it, Mac, especially the second stanza and the 'aubergine clouds' in S3.

Many congrats!

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Re: Centrifugal Eye

Post by Macavity » Sun Jun 12, 2016 3:00 pm

Thanks Tristan. Pleased you enjoyed...especially the aubergines :)

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Re: Centrifugal Eye

Post by Magpie Jane » Sat Jun 18, 2016 5:12 pm

Congrats, Mac!

Those two are truly terrific.
I like the way you handle boathouses, and the snailed church and those priesting mussels are irresistible.

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Re: Centrifugal Eye

Post by David » Sat Jun 18, 2016 6:52 pm

Well done, Mac! Quite interesting, those two poems riffing off each other. If you were only going to keep one - and why would you? - it would have to be Playing at Being Dylan, I think. It reads like a stream-lined version of Laugharne.

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Re: Centrifugal Eye

Post by Macavity » Sun Jun 19, 2016 12:09 pm

Magpie Jane wrote:Congrats, Mac!

Those two are truly terrific.
I like the way you handle boathouses, and the snailed church and those priesting mussels are irresistible.

Jane
Thanks MJ. The October poem walk in Laugharne, if you ever have the opportunity, is worth a stroll. There's a spooky sense of Dylan about that walk. Or perhaps it's just the silence of the marsh :roll:
Well done, Mac! Quite interesting, those two poems riffing off each other. If you were only going to keep one - and why would you? - it would have to be Playing at Being Dylan, I think. It reads like a stream-lined version of Laugharne.
Thanks David. Of course, Dylan had a habit of switching nouns to verbs, a practice you have some antipathy towards, but that was my excuse here :)

Thanks again both for the encouragement.

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Re: Centrifugal Eye

Post by Antcliff » Sun Jun 19, 2016 6:34 pm

Terrific, Mac. Nicely atmospheric. Nicely connecteing with his noun-verbing.
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Save in the tapestries of afterthought.
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Re: Centrifugal Eye

Post by Macavity » Mon Jun 20, 2016 4:06 am

Thanks Seth. As you know, the editorial team on this publication have a positive interaction with those that contribute, which makes the outcome that more rewarding,

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Re: Centrifugal Eye

Post by Ros » Mon Jun 20, 2016 1:08 pm

Well done! Interesting poems.

Anyone else struggle with issuu, or do others like the format?

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Re: Centrifugal Eye

Post by Antcliff » Mon Jun 20, 2016 2:05 pm

Ros wrote:Well done! Interesting poems.

Anyone else struggle with issuu, or do others like the format?

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Re: Centrifugal Eye

Post by Macavity » Mon Jun 20, 2016 3:17 pm

Thanks Ross.

They've sent me a pdf version. I'm okay with the format if I use the full screen for issuu.

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