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Post sonnet examples here

Postby Ros » Fri Jul 19, 2013 6:14 pm

Any sonnets you particularly like, feel are clever etc, put them on this thread.
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Re: Post sonnet examples here

Postby Ros » Fri Jul 19, 2013 6:42 pm

http://www.14by14.com/Issue6/NeanderthalBoneFlute.html

With some useful words by Rose Kelleher underneath.
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Re: Post sonnet examples here

Postby Jackie » Sat Jul 20, 2013 10:06 pm

Thank you for those "useful words," Ros. Important comments.

I also think something different about a sonnet is that it starts with a problem, and to write the sonnet, the poet has to solve the problem, or at least deal with it in some way. In this case, the poet was intrigued with the problem of whether the bone was a flute.

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Re: Post sonnet examples here

Postby k-j » Sat Jul 20, 2013 10:49 pm

Jackie wrote:I also think something different about a sonnet is that it starts with a problem, and to write the sonnet, the poet has to solve the problem, or at least deal with it in some way.


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Re: Post sonnet examples here

Postby Antcliff » Sat Jul 20, 2013 11:35 pm

Hi Jackie :D ,

I also think something different about a sonnet is that it starts with a problem, and to write the sonnet, the poet has to solve the problem, or at least deal with it in some way



As K-J asks. I think you are right in that there is often a problem to be considered..e.g. an old school favourite:

http://www.poetryfoundation.org/poem/173660


But I am not sure whether it is a good idea to inflate this into a defining feature of the sonnet. My favourite sonnet is John Masefield's "The Waggoner"...sadly not on-line. There is no problem in it.



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Re: Post sonnet examples here

Postby Jackie » Sat Jul 20, 2013 11:58 pm

I agree, I'm not thinking of it as a defining criterion. But it's hard to have a turn if there's nothing to turn. :wink:

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Re: Post sonnet examples here

Postby Antcliff » Sun Jul 21, 2013 12:01 am

Well, the "turn" or shift need not amount to much.

e.g. I am fond of this one...

http://www.archive.org/stream/leafburne ... 6/mode/2up
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Re: Post sonnet examples here

Postby Jackie » Sun Jul 21, 2013 2:10 am

Ok, Antcliff, but I put it to you, what if the sonnet began with the turn? What if it started with the positive, and ended with the fearsome? How would this change the poet's solution to the problem of how to define a navvy?

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Re: Post sonnet examples here

Postby Antcliff » Mon Jul 22, 2013 10:53 pm

Hi Jackie,
yes, ha! "Navvy" is a rather old word now.

I'm not sure I see that the poet is taking on a problem in that Ernest Rhys poem....unless you say that any attempt to describe a thing is an attempt to consider " a problem of defining it". (And I wonder if that would rather trivialise the view that a sonnet should ideally address a problem? )

Anyway..here is another of my favourites. And I have to apologise in advance...don't worry, almost everybody needs a translation. I certainly did.


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Re: Post sonnet examples here

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Re: Post sonnet examples here

Postby Antcliff » Thu Jan 25, 2018 6:36 pm

RCJames wrote:Meter hounds are pro’ly gonna tear this apart.
Syllable count’s ok, but spondees, pyrrhics,
and those pesky trochees might not be in line.
But, big But, even the greats let some things slide
for the over-all musicality and rhythm – so –
that said, I’m open for suggestions and tweaks - RC

Romeo/Juliet Redux

Their families at war with each other,
rabid dogs at the heels of a stranger,
one angry son to a feuding brother.
In their own measure, away from danger,
they intertwined hands, welcoming desire,
and gifted each other unwonted bliss.
As the clans’ rivalry spun in a gyre,
the two became aware of their abyss,
a deceptive potion would remedy
the dark mire, albeit a desperate cure.
Deadly, morbid, ill-advised, the recipe
effected a demise of hearts still pure.

In full wedding night posture, unavowed,
forever’s dusky form served as their shroud.



Greetings, RC

Can I suggest that if you are asking for workshopping suggestions...as you are...that this be posted in either of the workshops? You are far more likely to get a response to a workshop request if you put it in a workshop. It is what they are for. :D

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Re: Post sonnet examples here

Postby RCJames » Fri Jan 26, 2018 2:38 pm

OK - I'm certifiably lost now - I'll look around for the proper workshop now. - RC
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Re: Post sonnet examples here

Postby David » Fri Jan 26, 2018 4:44 pm

This is the right workshop, RC - just the wrong corner of it. You just need to post in your preferred place - either here viewforum.php?f=20 or here viewforum.php?f=3. As you will. And as you have been doing already, I see.

Anyway, I'll post a favourite sonnet of mine - for that is the idea, you see - here.

Cheers

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Re: Post sonnet examples here

Postby David » Fri Jan 26, 2018 4:45 pm

If there were, O! an Hellespont of cream
Between us, milk-white Mistress, I would swim
To you, to show to both my love’s extreme,
Leander-like, — yea, dive from brim to brim.
But met I with a butter’d pippin-pie
Floating upon’t, that would I make my boat,
To waft me to you without jeopardy:
Though sea-sick I might be while it did float.
Yet if a storm should rise, by night or day,
Of sugar snows or hail of care-aways,
Then if I found a pancake in my way,
It like a plank should bear me to your quays,
Which having found, if they tobacco kept,
The smoke should dry me well before I slept.

— John Davies of Hereford, 1598
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