April 13th

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April 13th

Post by Luce » Thu Apr 13, 2017 1:26 pm

Hey Ian - I thought I'd do the prompts for you today. Save you the trouble.

Offical NaPoWriMth Prompt: Write a ghazal. Not as hard as it sounds folks. Infact, it sounds like fun. For details click http://www.napowrimo.net/.

Additonal Prompts:

1. Vessel Poem: Write about a ship or other vehicle that can take you somewhere different from where you are now.

2. Addict Poem: Everyone’s addicted to something in some shape or form. What are things you can’t go without?

3. Shadow: Imagine you are someone’s shadow for a day.

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Re: April 13th

Post by Luce » Thu Apr 13, 2017 10:59 pm

Prompt: Ghazal

The Choice

My daddy was a union man.
but grandpa was a gambling man.

Dad worked hard to pay the rent.
Grandpa, didn’t, a lazy man.

Dad didn’t smoke, play dice or drink.
Grandpa drank like a thirst crazed man.

My dad didn’t laugh, seldom smiled.
Grandpa cracked jokes, a funny man.

I loved my dad and grandpa too
but who was the better man?

My dad taught me duty and thrift
Grandpa showed me to spot a cruel man

In the end I, Luce, can’t pick then,
which one man was the better man.

Very clumsy ghazal. My first. No excuse really.

It's not as easy as I thought it would be. Oh well, practice makes perfect.

I was under the gun with only one hour to do the prompt before it became midnight in the UK.

Gotta confess the competition is getting a little grueling but you know what they say, "when the going gets touch, the tough order pizza"...or something like that. :lol:

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Re: April 13th

Post by JJWilliamson » Fri Apr 14, 2017 7:45 pm

Took some time did this one. Nice form.

Passing Through (Ghazal)

There, by Grasmere meadows, I sat alone;
the clouds and ramblers wandered by; I sat alone.

The glaciers had forged a path with basal
slip and grinding stones, and I sat alone.

Spacemen don’t exist, I cried to the moon,
and even if I went I’d wind up all alone.

Rugby clubs and tennis courts attract romantics
who never want to find themselves alone.

A climb, a game, a whispered word in her ear,
one more smile, perhaps. No, I sat alone.

The wandering pilgrim always understands
how the leaves feel when they fall. They feel alone.
Long time a child and still a child

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Re: April 13th

Post by bodkin » Tue Apr 18, 2017 8:45 pm

Taking Luce's "Vessel prompt" albeit possibly not quite as she imagined :-D

http://www.ianbadcoe.uk/2017/04/napowri ... -wait.html
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Re: April 13th

Post by Luce » Tue Apr 18, 2017 10:23 pm

bodkin wrote:Taking Luce's "Vessel prompt" albeit possibly not quite as she imagined :-D

http://www.ianbadcoe.uk/2017/04/napowri ... -wait.html
Ian - Actually, you didn't stray so far out that you were in another poetry prompt zip code. It works. Vey cute, if poems can be cute.

JJ - Your ghazal is definitely more engaging than mine. I just found it torturous and it shows.

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