GNU IN MUTED DOINK

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GNU IN MUTED DOINK

Post by bjondon » Mon Nov 18, 2019 2:34 pm

Greenwich Mean Time OK?

UNINK DONG TEDIUM

Two ayes. Two yoos…

UNKID MINGE DONUT

Two days. Three endz…

UNKIND DIM TONGUE

Ununited Kingdom
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Re: GNU IN MUTED DOINK

Post by NotQuiteSure » Mon Nov 18, 2019 3:42 pm

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Hi Jules.

Well, that raised a smile.

Not sure about the title, maybe use L1?
Having the anagrams all start UN (except the title)
seems a bit weak.

Two days. Three ends ... ? Lost again!
(leave a line, let the elipsis

have some room?)


Regards,


TUMID* KIN DUNGEON

DUNG MONKI UNTIED

UNKIND DIM TONGUE


Not


* actual word!
.

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Re: GNU IN MUTED DOINK

Post by Sid » Mon Nov 18, 2019 7:08 pm

Jules,

“Un kid minge donut”

Ha ha ha I’m still giggling.

Clever play on United Kingdom. Maybe the title could be
“O’ Kind in muted Gun” Instead?

I think the UN at the start reflects the final statement so think it’s appropriate here.

Conveys a really clear message of the jumbled mess the UK is in. Two days three ends I assume is a political reference but it’s abstract enough to insinuate change and confusion.

I understand why you have asked the OK? However the poem answers this regardless of whether the question is asked. For me I’d drop that from the first line.

Thanks for the read.
Like the imprint left, an effect on your being - beautiful, wonderful, succinct.

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Re: GNU IN MUTED DOINK

Post by bjondon » Tue Nov 19, 2019 3:52 pm

Thank you Not and Sid,
Like banjo players and jugglers, anagrammers should never be
encouraged . . . you are taking a risk here :)
Actually this particular pony is performing one additional trick
that nobody seems to have noticed.
I will just say that I can't do without the 'OK' and that Greenwich Mean Time is more often written as an acronym.

Sid - pleased this amused you; and that you dig the repeated 'UNs',
and that even though the mechanical purpose of lines 1,3+5 isn't clear they still seemed to work.

Not -
NotQuiteSure wrote:
Mon Nov 18, 2019 3:42 pm
.
Well, that raised a smile.
.
- this is what makes it all worthwhile :)

- The title was my favorite bit . . . the ultimate headline I'd like
to see in print . . . I may have to write a book and call it that to achieve this ambition.

- I have added some minor inflexions (extra clues?) and spaced out a bit more as per your suggestion.

- Apparently 'tumid' can be applied to both oratory and penises . . . that should come in useful.

Jules

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