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Post by lotus » Mon Oct 28, 2019 10:56 pm

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Re: Pageantry

Post by Macavity » Sun Nov 03, 2019 4:07 am

The key juxtapositions for me were ephemeral/pageantry, real estate and wastebin, though I did enjoy love/phonetics.

nice to see you sharing again

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Re: Pageantry

Post by lotus » Thu Nov 07, 2019 11:30 am

Macavity wrote:
Sun Nov 03, 2019 4:07 am
The key juxtapositions for me were ephemeral/pageantry, real estate and wastebin, though I did enjoy love/phonetics.

nice to see you sharing again

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dear Mac

it does me good to know those juxtas spoke to you

thankyuuu

i was locked out of the forum on my iPhone for a long long time
seems to be some glitch in the forum programming
any way i am now here on an iMac

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Re: Pageantry

Post by JJWilliamson » Thu Nov 07, 2019 12:12 pm

Hi Lotus!

The ephemeral nature of the tides makes S1 for me, where the temporary influences are juxtaposed with her altruism. The giving, unrestricted and absolute assertions are comforting in a naive sort of way.

The imagery of the second strophe is wonderful, even to the point of including smells without actually mentioning them. Lovely.

illusory, close to the ether.

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Re: Pageantry

Post by bjondon » Thu Nov 07, 2019 5:39 pm

Hi lotus,
definitely one of my favourites . . . noniggles :(

The left/right/centre text justification works a treat.
(I have never seen that innovation before . . . quite tempted to steal :) )

On my second reading I'm also getting the
scrumptious possibility of 'marshmallows' as a verb.

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Re: Pageantry

Post by Sid » Fri Nov 08, 2019 1:32 pm

Fantastic poem.

The absurdity of “Zookeeper of the galaxies” evokes the comedy of guardians of the galaxy while inferring she will collect and care for any stray.

The preaching reference to her altruism as well as phoenetic, cordon blue marshmallow cooking and the absurdity of the above leads me after numerous readings to derive that she is disingenuous. Well done!



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Re: Pageantry

Post by lotus » Sat Nov 09, 2019 12:05 pm

JJWilliamson wrote:
Thu Nov 07, 2019 12:12 pm
Hi Lotus!

The ephemeral nature of the tides makes S1 for me, where the temporary influences are juxtaposed with her altruism. The giving, unrestricted and absolute assertions are comforting in a naive sort of way.

The imagery of the second strophe is wonderful, even to the point of including smells without actually mentioning them. Lovely.

illusory, close to the ether.

Best

JJ


dear JJ

indeed naive is an elemental dimension of the universe
and universes

i like that

thankyuuu for such kind words

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Re: Pageantry

Post by lotus » Mon Nov 11, 2019 12:11 pm

bjondon wrote:
Thu Nov 07, 2019 5:39 pm
Hi lotus,
definitely one of my favourites . . . noniggles :(

The left/right/centre text justification works a treat.
(I have never seen that innovation before . . . quite tempted to steal :) )

On my second reading I'm also getting the
scrumptious possibility of 'marshmallows' as a verb.

Regards,
Jules


dear Jules

that is the kind of theft i would never report to interpol
have fun ,, explore

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Re: Pageantry

Post by bjondon » Thu Nov 14, 2019 7:00 pm

Second bite . . .
there is something uncomfortable about this - the formal excellence, the cordon bleu dexterity.
The two phrases 'sidewalk real estate' and 'zookeeper of the galaxies' could easily be referring
to the arena of the page, the territory of the poet. . . . So is this an indictment of the poet herself?
Or of the inherent impotence of poetry - a mere 'pageantry' of 'phonetics', perfectly toasted marshmallows
appropriating for their sermons the 'wastebin fires' of harsh reality?
'as if tides were not ephemeral' is the critical argument here. There is a collision between the position of
most western poetry (questioning, challenging every aspect of our lives from the act of perception itself
to social mores and wider political issues) - and that of many world religions, especially Buddhism, Hinduism, Taoism
which emphasise the ephemeral nature of the world and the need to accept what is 'exterior' and
to engage/struggle more with our own framing desires and ego.
So where does that leave the Buddhist or Yogic poet who wishes to do more than celebrate the oneness
and wonder of simple being?
Excuse the waffle, but I think the poem justifies it, is concerned with, and I think succeeds in
expressing the paradox.

Jules

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Re: Pageantry

Post by Perry » Thu Nov 14, 2019 8:50 pm

Lotus, you speak with your emotions much more than I do. I keep looking for a logical flow in your poems, but the flow is in the feelings it evokes. I do like this one very much.
If I don't critique your poem, it is probably because I don't understand it.

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Re: Pageantry

Post by lotus » Sun Nov 17, 2019 1:39 pm

Sid wrote:
Fri Nov 08, 2019 1:32 pm
Fantastic poem.

The absurdity of “Zookeeper of the galaxies” evokes the comedy of guardians of the galaxy while inferring she will collect and care for any stray.

The preaching reference to her altruism as well as phoenetic, cordon blue marshmallow cooking and the absurdity of the above leads me after numerous readings to derive that she is disingenuous. Well done!
dear Sid

'disingenuous'

maybe that varies according to the vortexes of ever changing consciousnesses
of where she and we find ourselves from time to time

i am grateful for your entering that into discussion

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Re: Pageantry

Post by lotus » Mon Nov 18, 2019 11:19 am

bjondon wrote:
Thu Nov 14, 2019 7:00 pm
Second bite . . .
there is something uncomfortable about this - the formal excellence, the cordon bleu dexterity.
The two phrases 'sidewalk real estate' and 'zookeeper of the galaxies' could easily be referring
to the arena of the page, the territory of the poet. . . . So is this an indictment of the poet herself?
Or of the inherent impotence of poetry - a mere 'pageantry' of 'phonetics', perfectly toasted marshmallows
appropriating for their sermons the 'wastebin fires' of harsh reality?
'as if tides were not ephemeral' is the critical argument here. There is a collision between the position of
most western poetry (questioning, challenging every aspect of our lives from the act of perception itself
to social mores and wider political issues) - and that of many world religions, especially Buddhism, Hinduism, Taoism
which emphasise the ephemeral nature of the world and the need to accept what is 'exterior' and
to engage/struggle more with our own framing desires and ego.
So where does that leave the Buddhist or Yogic poet who wishes to do more than celebrate the oneness
and wonder of simple being?
Excuse the waffle, but I think the poem justifies it, is concerned with, and I think succeeds in
expressing the paradox.

Jules
dear Jules

i am thankful for the imprint of your wisdom teeth here
you have exposed wonderful details and insights
and shared the intrinsic of oneness

many many sincere thannkyuuus
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Re: Pageantry

Post by Dryanddeadwords » Mon Nov 18, 2019 11:41 am

Extraordinary. The tides as ephemeral as marshmallows over wastebin fires! Not an image/idea one expects to come up against every day, but dammit you've nailed it!

Not keen on this kind of presentation usually, but your voice sings loud and clear.

Regards,
Dylan

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