Romeo and Juliet Redux

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Romeo and Juliet Redux

Postby RCJames » Wed May 16, 2018 2:53 pm

Poppin’ off at each other, kinfolk were,
nasty coon-hounds worryin’ a poacher,
young frisky whelp to a nasty neighbor.
Hid away from peepin’ nosy stalkers,
they found refuge inside a dream bell jar,
gave each other a dose of neon blue,
fam’lies pissed as tom's in a gay cat bar.
With the mad potion complications grew;
blue cube acid mixed with pure rock cocaine,
sad fears would be relieved, they’d start anew.
far-out, spacy, the cocktail brought dark pain,
fulsome lights turned endless black from the brew,

formally dressed for hook-up, down for night,
virginal; eternity draped them tight.
Last edited by RCJames on Mon May 21, 2018 6:50 pm, edited 1 time in total.
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Re: Amour Bummer - R&J Redux

Postby Macavity » Sun May 20, 2018 4:31 pm

A Sonnet! The trip starts high ends low - a drugs tale. The key line seemed to be they found refuge inside a dream bell jar. I read that the reason, or excuse, were the nasty coon-hounds. Not sure what the title means.

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Re: Amour Bummer - R&J Redux

Postby RCJames » Sun May 20, 2018 6:05 pm

Macavity - Thanks for your look - meant as a playful parody of Romeo and Juliet in modern street/drug jargon - "coon hounds" is a little
out of synch with the rest - but had to leave the project before dementia set in - RC

they found refuge inside a dream bell jar. I think you're right, is the key passage, - suits the R&J tale and situation.
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Re: Amour Bummer - R&J Redux

Postby 1lankest » Mon May 21, 2018 4:33 pm

Really impressed with this. Totally got the neo-Shakespearean thing. And the parody element doesn’t render it flippant. The vernacular sounds like the English Midlands, which engaged me a lot. Grit and grime with a hint of music. V nice.

Title baffled me too.

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Romeo and Juliet Redux

Postby RCJames » Mon May 21, 2018 6:49 pm

1lankest - Glad you enjoyed it - interesting you place the dialect as British Midlands - I'm from New Hampshire and have always been
intrigued by a similarity in the old-timer's NH accent - "Ayuh - I 'spose whut we oughta do is ta check on the heffuhz in the fah meddow."
Borrowed to some degree from the British I think.


the title probably should be - Romeo and Juliet Redux - RC
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