Extinctions in the yellow wood

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Extinctions in the yellow wood

Postby Firebird » Sat Apr 21, 2018 5:19 pm

For each decision taken
there’s a path left behind

a cul-de-sac
in the evolution of the mind.
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Re: Extinctions in the yellow wood

Postby JJWilliamson » Sat Apr 21, 2018 5:37 pm

Hi, Tristan

A touch of Frost, methinks, yet it is clearly your own.

Firebird wrote:For each decision taken
there’s a path left behind: ...Good allusion to Frost and the wear on the paths, the creative process of walking through a wood. Each decision brings its own outcomes.

a cul-de-sac
in the evolution of the mind. ...I've been down a few dead ends in my time. With a bit of luck you'll find your way through the yellow wood eventually.


Enjoyed this short poem. Nice little thinker.

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Re: Extinctions in the yellow wood

Postby Firebird » Sat Apr 21, 2018 6:37 pm

Spot on JJ, a touch of Frost indeed it is. I liked the idea ‘of my mind left behind’, and all the extinct versions of myself. I also liked the idea that our development may be random, hinted at by the random process of evolution.

I don’t really think there’s any way out of Frost’s yellow wood.

Many thanks for commenting JJ.

Cheers,

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Re: Extinctions in the yellow wood

Postby churinga » Mon Apr 30, 2018 12:08 am

An epitaph?
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Re: Extinctions in the yellow wood

Postby ray miller » Mon Apr 30, 2018 10:12 am

I like it. Why yellow wood? You could urbanise it and go for "estate of the mind".
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I contemplate such bitter stuff.
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Re: Extinctions in the yellow wood

Postby churinga » Mon Apr 30, 2018 10:00 pm

Why yellow wood?
It's in the first line of Frost's poem.
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Re: Extinctions in the yellow wood

Postby 1lankest » Tue May 01, 2018 9:06 am

I like it but it would be good if the poem added to the sentiments of the Road Not Taken. There doesn’t seem to be value added here...it is just a homage to Frost - and a nice one - but true invention?

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Re: Extinctions in the yellow wood

Postby Macavity » Tue May 01, 2018 2:47 pm

Firebird wrote:For each decision taken
there’s a path left behind

a cul-de-sac
in the evolution of the mind.


Enjoyed the poem Tristan. The decision/evolution coupling pointed me towards conscious choice rather than a random outcome.

Like the title.

life rather than path...too melodramatic?

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