I want to hold you

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dedalus
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I want to hold you

Post by dedalus » Sun Aug 23, 2015 11:57 pm

I want to hold you

but I cannot hold you …
not in front of a policeman
not when the lights are turning red

not when people are looking
not when your eyes are shining
not when a cough is coming

not when war still rages
not when the climate changes
not when children are hungry

perhaps when it rains
we can smile into one another’s eyes
and hide under my big umbrella

but the people will bump into us
from before and behind and say,
move along there, move along !

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Re: I want to hold you

Post by Mic » Mon Aug 24, 2015 7:56 am

I think this has some charm to it!

Michaela
"Do not feel lonely, the entire universe is inside you" - Rumi

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Re: I want to hold you

Post by Suzanne » Wed Aug 26, 2015 5:15 pm

I agree with Mic.
A pleasant little thing, Bren.

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Re: I want to hold you

Post by dedalus » Thu Aug 27, 2015 11:59 pm

Thank you, ladies!
Bren

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