Art Nouveau

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Art Nouveau

Post by brianedwards » Mon Jun 29, 2015 5:37 am

Art Nouveau

You think I'm chic now,
you should have seen me
in a previous life:

I'd have danced seven bells
of merde out of you,
left you for mort on the shore of a smile.


Don't doubt you for a second
my dear, he thinks,
unhooking her from the wall,

determined to take her
for one last whiplash
round the inside of his darkening maison.







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Re: Art Nouveau

Post by ray miller » Mon Jun 29, 2015 11:12 am

Made me laugh, hope that's an appropriate response. Nice idea, I love the whiplash. Brought to mind an ageing Terry Thomas. Why do all the French words begin with m?
I'm out of faith and in my cups
I contemplate such bitter stuff.

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Re: Art Nouveau

Post by Arian » Mon Jun 29, 2015 6:52 pm

A touch of ekphrasis? Always a penchant of yours. And well done, too. Like ray, it made me smile. Not sure I've interpreted the last bit right, but a cleverly reflexive comment on the relationship between art and the artist (or owner).

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Post by David » Mon Jun 29, 2015 7:31 pm

Yes, really good. I didn't get the whiplash until Peter (I think) explained it (indirectly). Still not sure about that bit, though. Is it a whip? Are there art nouveau whips? If a whip, is whiplash too close to the word? ("One last crack" instead?)

But it made me laugh too.

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Re: Art Nouveau

Post by brianedwards » Tue Jun 30, 2015 1:55 am

Thanks all. Glad it raised some smiles.

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Re: Art Nouveau

Post by Firebird » Tue Jun 30, 2015 7:21 am

I love the 'darkening maison' (Maison de l'Art Nouveau). Great irony. It's funny how time changes our relationship with art.

Many thanks for sharing. It brought all sorts of thing to mind. I loved the line 'left you for mort on the shore of a smile'.

I like the use of the phrase 'last whiplash' (a neck injury caused by a sudden movement of the head forwards, backwards or sideways). This is what the art of people like Toulouse-Lautrec initially did.

The French words seem to spell out 'shit dead house'. Is this just coincidental or do they denote a meaning other than the obvious?

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Re: Art Nouveau

Post by JJWilliamson » Tue Jun 30, 2015 10:38 am

Like this one, Brian

Many of your references have more than one possible interp' but if I focus on the title
I am left with the dynamism that was/is Art Nouveau.
There are deliberate dark overtones (possibly), something akin to the horror film genre.

My only gripe is that of accessibility. I like the language throughout and particularly
enjoyed the French intermingling but it's a tough one to penetrate, at least for me, others
are not of the same opinion. It feels like an intellectual poem and I therefore wonder about
its limited appeal. This is more of an observation than a criticism as 'intellectual' is fine by me.

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Post by brianedwards » Tue Jun 30, 2015 10:54 am

Many thanks Tristan and JJ.

I'm baffled by the charge of intellectualism, but perhaps that makes me stupid.

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Re: Art Nouveau

Post by JJWilliamson » Tue Jun 30, 2015 11:15 am

Not a charge, merely an observation. If 'intellectual' offends then how about 'highly creative'. Accessibility is my one and only gripe.

I do like the poem

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brianedwards wrote:Many thanks Tristan and JJ.

I'm baffled by the charge of intellectualism, but perhaps that makes me stupid.

Cheers me peers.

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Post by brianedwards » Tue Jun 30, 2015 12:12 pm

I'm certainly not offended. I was merely confused as to how intellectualism might be somehow deemed objectionable in poetry, or why a poet should be concerned with accessibility.

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Re: Art Nouveau

Post by JJWilliamson » Tue Jun 30, 2015 12:41 pm

Fair enough

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