Occam all ye faithful

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Occam all ye faithful

Post by brianedwards » Fri Jun 26, 2015 11:00 am

Occam all ye faithful

A plurality of prophets proves you wrong.

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For Suzanne

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Re: Occam all ye faithful

Post by Suzanne » Fri Jun 26, 2015 11:21 am

Thanks B.

Write it in 14 lines.

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Re: Occam all ye faithful

Post by brianedwards » Fri Jun 26, 2015 11:30 am

You need to improve your crits. What does your gut tell you?

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Re: Occam all ye faithful

Post by Suzanne » Fri Jun 26, 2015 11:51 am

My guts says you are afraid i might write a good sonnet- first.

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Re: Occam all ye faithful

Post by brianedwards » Fri Jun 26, 2015 12:09 pm

Seriously, the poem?

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Re: Occam all ye faithful

Post by David » Fri Jun 26, 2015 12:15 pm

Clever title! And a neat little poem. Sometimes one line - or maybe two - is all you need.

I did something similar - I think - a while ago. Do you remember this one?

Jesus quipped

The reports of my birth
are greatly exaggerated.


Of course that positively sprawls across the page, compared to yours.

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Post by brianedwards » Fri Jun 26, 2015 12:21 pm

Ha! I think I do recall it David. Terrific.

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Re: Occam all ye faithful

Post by Suzanne » Fri Jun 26, 2015 12:36 pm

The title is clever, the rest lacks the effort your imagination needs to curl the toes.

And, I find the poem lacks the verbage accustomed to this sort of topic
therefore it renders it simply a clear and consice view of the N's opinion concerning the subject matter.
This is quite dull.

You might want to consider adding a few colorful words beginning with the letter "p". Purple comes to mind.
Maybe some action would be nice. Policing might slip in well.

I'd like to see this re-worked into a haiku.
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Re: Occam all ye faithful

Post by brianedwards » Fri Jun 26, 2015 1:00 pm

Thank you Suzanne. I appreciate your gut reading of the poem.

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Re: Occam all ye faithful

Post by Suzanne » Fri Jun 26, 2015 1:35 pm

That was not my gut.

My gut response was laughter at your cheekiness for dedicating it to me.

Go write a real poem.

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Re: Occam all ye faithful

Post by JJWilliamson » Fri Jun 26, 2015 3:09 pm

Are/were you a student of philosophy, Brian? This reads like a brief philosophical statement to me.
Is it a poem? Some might say yes, others might disagree. I'm on the fence.

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Re: Occam all ye faithful

Post by Arian » Fri Jun 26, 2015 6:52 pm

Made me smile. Good stuff, Bri.

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Re: Occam all ye faithful

Post by brianedwards » Fri Jun 26, 2015 8:11 pm

Thanks all.

Suzy, I go to the trouble of writing you a poem and you don't even consider it so. My heart is full of farts.

JJ, some might think your red pen rude. I'm not on the fence. Fences are so 1980's.

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Re: Occam all ye faithful

Post by JJWilliamson » Fri Jun 26, 2015 8:31 pm

Which colour would you prefer? I'm easy. 1982, 85, 86 and 89 were all very good years in Bordeaux.
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Re: Occam all ye faithful

Post by Antcliff » Sun Jun 28, 2015 1:33 pm

I liked that title, Brian. Funny.


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(p.s I once had a poem mentioning the principle and was torn between Ockham and Occam. You have of course gone for the preferable spelling given the gag).
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Save in the tapestries of afterthought.
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Re: Occam all ye faithful

Post by Firebird » Mon Jun 29, 2015 9:09 pm

Love pun in the title- works really well. And also like the overall poem, and that it can't be reduced to a simple explanation/principle.

Thanks for a thought provoking read.

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Re: Occam all ye faithful

Post by brianedwards » Wed Jul 01, 2015 2:06 am

Thanks chaps.

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