Hollow -edit

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Re: Hollow -edit

Post by Macavity » Sun Jun 28, 2015 6:23 am

Suzanne wrote:Hollow

You bring my favorite tea in the evenings,
bend to kiss my forehead,
I cross my legs
at the ankles and thank you.

My hands
reach up for yours- you place
my pink cup on the table.

And I become a ghost
sitting in this chair,
staring through you,
to the wall
of the bedroom.
Just some thoughts Suzanne. Enjoyed the poem, especially the details of the ankles and pink cup.

all the best


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