Brrr

[penguin]

unrecognised
late autumn face
auburn shades to
steely grey as
light shifts the mist
lifts a shiver
from the mirror

[David]

Hmm. Have you shaved after a summer of fuzz? And it seems oddly cold by comparison? I can't think what else might have prompted this - and the title - but it works very well. I don't usually go on about sonics - although they are important, I know - but the last three lines are so euphonious.

Cheers

David

[1lankest]

I disagree with David, I think the last three lines overdo the sonics. Some nice imagery here and clever word play. A good snap shot but I'm lost as to a broader meaning. Perhaps that doesn't matter.

Enjoyed.

Luke

[penguin]

Thanks both. I think it was about old age taking someone by surprise. Doesn't matter. Low scoring draw on the sonics, then.

[Antcliff]

Liked the sounds. Like the face in mirror theme. Not sure I understood ln. 5. As more light is on the mirror, the mists lift..i.e. face recognised?

[penguin]

Liked the sounds. Like the face in mirror theme. Not sure I understood ln. 5. As more light is on the mirror, the mists lift..i.e. face recognised?

Thanks, Seth. ...as light shifts the mist lifts... just meant to be a dawning realisation kind of thing.

[Elphin]

Rises above defence and with deft nod of the head scores late winner on behalf of sonics --- very Brrr.

elph

[penguin]

Thanks, Elphin. We await an offside flag.