March 18th 2011

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March 18th 2011

Post by brianedwards » Fri Mar 18, 2011 7:12 am

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Re: March 18th 2011

Post by clarabow » Fri Mar 18, 2011 8:12 am

I don't know if you want comments or not to these poetic diary like thoughts? But the writing is beautiful and poignant. I am glad you are writing this Brian and I know it it not just for you but for all those who have a face but not the voice, I am sure you write for many.

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Re: March 18th 2011

Post by brianedwards » Fri Mar 18, 2011 10:11 am

Thanks Claire, your words are appreciated. People can comment on them as they wish, or not.

B.

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Re: March 18th 2011

Post by David » Fri Mar 18, 2011 8:38 pm

I don't think I'll comment on them any more, but you should know that I'm reading them, and they're very affecting.

Cheers

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Re: March 18th 2011

Post by oggiesnr » Fri Mar 18, 2011 10:02 pm

Thank you for posting these, be well and remain safe.

Stephen

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Re: March 18th 2011

Post by gavin » Sat Mar 19, 2011 3:08 am

your not dead

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Re: March 18th 2011

Post by brianedwards » Sat Mar 19, 2011 3:16 am

gavin wrote:your not dead
your = you're

Thanks for all the looks people.

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Re: March 18th 2011

Post by gavin » Sat Mar 19, 2011 3:22 am

i found your crit on the american poet laureate

one of the best reads in a long time;

all good

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Re: March 18th 2011

Post by John G » Sat Mar 19, 2011 9:47 am

Nice stuff Brian -
It's the thought of taking turns to vomit, of keeping daily charts of hair loss and lesions, comparing our reddening skin like excited sunbathers worshipping their fiery god, of measuring our tumours how we once measured sunflowers
excellent
After one look at this planet any visitor from outer space would say 'I want to see the manager.

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Re: March 18th 2011

Post by Suzanne » Sat Mar 19, 2011 10:57 am

Brian,
Quite a quandary i find myself in. I completely enjoy reading these, excellent balance of emotion and objectivity...
And i feel a bit guilty for enjoying reading your struggle as it is so fresh.

Metaphors i have used (rather flippantly) have become your reality
and with that comes a deeper undertanding
of what tthe power of the written word- what it is and what it isn't.

Keep your head up, going forward. I will keep reading.

Suzanne

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Re: March 18th 2011

Post by brianedwards » Sat Mar 19, 2011 11:05 am

Objective? No such thing ;)

Thanks Suzanne.

And thanks to you too John.

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