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Post by dedalus » Sun Nov 30, 2008 3:12 pm

I loved her beyond all reason
and then she went and bloody well died on me.
I stroll over to her grave and give it a kick.
Bitch. Some cops with cameras
believe they're hiding behind the headstones
but that's all right. 'Sall all right, orright?
I'll go over to Spain tomorrow
with my red and yellow bandana
and there I'll do what I canna
do here. No more of this useless bleedin shite,
I'll stay off the beer and act polite.
I'll buy ... a hotel. Yeah, what the hell!
Can I show you to your table, Mon Sewer?
Yeah, I'd like that:
a white dinner jacket, a red cummerbund,
a smile with the new white choppers,
a Heckler and Koch in my sock.
I'll need to keep the Brits out, got no clarse,
I'll dump them gobshites on their arse.
Ah, Britain, she's been good to me all the same
since I left burnt-down blasted Croatia
but the face you see is not the face
that smiled up from my mother's knee
when that dirty old brute she called my father,
before he legged it, told me something crystal true:
under the sun, my son, there is nothing new,
fuck them fuckers before they fuck you.
My father, the philosopher:
a litle tear, my dear, runs down my nose,
must be the cocaine, 95% pure,
unlike the crap I sell to the punters,
the ho's and shunters, the human manure.
Voila, Madame! Ho ho, Monsieur!
Is everyssing to your shatisfaction?
Ahem, ahem, more Chateau d'Yquem?
Buzzbuzz, hahaha, humhum.
She's young and flushed, he's old and fat,
an aristocrat: thus the world operates
and circulates, I know that. Watch me, chum.
I could do this job with my eyes closed.

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Re: Hotel

Post by Charles » Mon Dec 01, 2008 3:44 pm

Good stuff, grabs your attention then goes on to make it worth your while. A good insight into the world of the damned - the whole thing fits together really well, the final image sets the whole thing into place for me. Thoroughly enjoyed this one.

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Re: Hotel

Post by PhilipCFJohnson » Mon Dec 01, 2008 6:07 pm

This poem has a very gritty English feel to it. Even though it dealt with some really hard issues, it was still a lot of fun to read, and that's a hard thing to accomplish!
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Re: Hotel

Post by pitseleh » Mon Dec 01, 2008 6:11 pm

your irish aint ya? anyway, i really admire the way you write. something so easy about it, and considering most of your stuff is pretty lengthy it is thoroughly void of superfluity.

the first two lines grabbed me, and i wasnt released until i'd breathed the last line. encapsulating.

Aren't people absurd! They never use the freedoms they do have but demand those they don't have; they have freedom of thought, they demand freedom of speech.

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Re: Hotel

Post by dedalus » Tue Dec 02, 2008 4:59 am

Thanks, chaps. I was quietly messing around with a few notions for internal rhyming schemes (as you do) when I noticed that 'face ya" matched 'Croatia' and that tickled me so much I more or less built the poem around it.

Brendan (irredeemably Irish, pitseleh!)

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