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Teenteaser

Posted: Sat Nov 10, 2007 4:28 am
by dedalus
Five foot two,
compact too;
inky blue
school uniform.
Laughing eyes,
slithering thighs ...
O, no no no no good!

I wish I was
in Carrickfergus
only for nights
in Ballygrand.


I wish you were
more intelligent,
maybe a tad less beautiful,
the Devil's exchange.

Maybe less talk
of fluffy toys
and other boys,
little lynx-eyed Miss Sixteen.

I would swim over
the deepest ocean
only for nights there
in Ballygrand.


No more cookies,
no more milk and tea;
keep that bloody skirt down
and don't you look at me!

It's not fair, it never is.
Dirty old men
seldom initiate,
they just take the blame.

O, O, O so nice!
Looking is free.
Deary me!

How can you know these things
at your young age?
Run, run, run,
the school bell
Jezebel.

But the sea is wide
and I cannot swim over.
Nor have I the wings to fly.

Re: Teenteaser

Posted: Sat Nov 10, 2007 5:19 am
by kozmikdave
Gidday Ded

Another tale of teacher-being-tempted. I understand but daren't vocalise it (being a teacher myself).

I like your use of song, as though you are trying to hum away the thoughts.

Reminds me of the headmaster in the first school I taught in - a girls' school. He was naive when it came to students.

Re: Teenteaser

Posted: Sat Nov 10, 2007 11:47 am
by dedalus
Spot on, Dave. It gets harder by the day. I work at a girls school. I have the brazen hussies flashing their tits at me after their PT classes (no other guys around, I suppose) and hiking their skirts up around their arses and spreading their shapely legs. O no no no no no! I tend to go for more sophisticated ladies, a few years older, but tidily equipped with similar endowments. Legs and things. Chests. Faces. Freckles, even.

I think this poem is just a dry (possibly cold) reaction to teenage Japanese girls. God bless them, each and every one, but let some other guy do the business. Hello Kitty. Look the other way

Bren :wink:

Life in Japan is so cool, but totally exhausting ....

Re: Teenteaser

Posted: Sat Nov 10, 2007 1:02 pm
by Cryptic Cadence
You should have at least put explicit in tags...

Re: Teenteaser

Posted: Sat Nov 10, 2007 6:39 pm
by Sean Sweeney
Not that I'm a teacher, but very easy to relate to. I worked briefly as a classroom assistant and also tutored some classes on photography. Being young myself, it's hard to appreciate being a teacher, until it's experienced. Not my cup of tea.

Love the structure and the easy flow throughout the poem.

Re: Teenteaser

Posted: Sat Nov 10, 2007 7:25 pm
by dogofdiogenes
Hi there,

I enjoyed the lightness of this and the distractedness of it. I also think it would be easily improved with a bit more pattern in it-do you think that that would add to the sense of failing to empty your mind of something without reaching a zen-like state? A bit like a long roll of thunder which you will hear, time and again, during a long storm. Or is a more confused approach a better reflection of a state of mind?

I have to admit to not finding teenage girls attractive....teenage boys doubly so.

nothingbutahounddog :!:

Re: Teenteaser

Posted: Sat Nov 10, 2007 7:44 pm
by Charles
I liked this, the change of tone with the italics worked well.