World Anthem

[Jester]

This was written as a dance track. Not sure if Ashton-u-Lyne is quite ready for it........but I wish it was. The chorus is intended to sound like a broadcast from an outdoor venue, and an echo is heard after "declare" and "where".

I feel a bit silly posting this after reading other (superior) efforts, but I hope you'll provide some constructive comments as in the other forum.
I realise it's not an original idea, but I'm sure Chris won't mind.


World Anthem

Last night I had the dream of dreams
and woke up feelin fine.
My light-speed breakin friend came down to me –
can’t get it off my mind.
He took me to his saucer
and he gave me China tea.
he said he was no alien
and sang this song to me.


He sang….

(chorus)
I am a member of the human race
and I declare my love for every man and woman –
no matter what the colour of their face,
no matter where their heart and soul began.

He opened his transmitting beam
and set controls to stun,
called all the radio stations,
sent waves across the nations.

He said…..
“Friends –
After eighty generations
in the wilderness of space
I can see the time is right – right now
to cure this crazy place.

If only you can sing this song
meaning every word you say
you can truly say that you are free –
celebrate a better day.”

Chorus

Chorus

[kozmikdave]

Gidday

Great sentiments. I want to hear it.

You self-deprecation is quite unnecessary. We all struggle with the feeling that we are not worthy. (Heard Sheryl Crow say the same about her stuff.) Even if it works for you in the bathroom, it is good.

You messed with my head a little with the alien/human merger. I don't actually mind that though.

The line I thought migh be improved (IMO) is

He opened his transmitting beam
and set controls to stun,
called all the radio stations,
sent waves across the nations.

"stun" didn't work for me. If you use it, make the bit he says really stunning, of find a word that means to shut out and interupt the radio stations [JAM] - maybe add TV in there too - don't forget cable.

Overall it paints a pretty positive message and a good picture.

Thanks for posting it

Cheers
Dave

[barrie]

'And when we got on ship he brought out something for the trip,
he said "It's old, but it's good", like any other primitive would.'

nice one Mick

[twoleftfeet]

"I had to phone someone so I picked on you hoo
Hey, that's far out so you heard him too! oo
Switch on the TV we may pick him up on channel two"

There'a a lot of them out there - they're interested in all things human,
from the worst in popular music to vote rigging - look out for them
when the Eurovision Song Contest is on.


A noble sentiment, Mick.
I like
"No matter where their heart and soul began"

The only minor quibble I have is the "stations/nations" rhyme - it is a reggae cliche .

Geoff

[David]

So, if I understand correctly, you'd like to teach the world to sing (in perfect harmony).

Why not?

David

[Jester]

Thanks guys


..........or "a great big melting pot".

Just how many are there?

Having worked on the shop floor in various mixes of race (and on occasions, a very definite UNmixes!), for me, the message still needs driving home, and what better way than music? Whether kids listen to teachers or not (sorry Dave!), they listen to music.

Dave and Geoff - You both have very valid points. I'll do some twitching on it.

Thanks so much.