Haiku Train

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Re: Haiku Train

Postby sleepystupid » Mon Nov 06, 2017 6:05 pm

a grisly house
fit for beasts bothered by heat
till winter slumber
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Re: Haiku Train

Postby Walton » Wed Dec 13, 2017 6:05 am

The first post mentioned the 5-7-5 was lax, I think this is ok unless it’s become strict

till winter slumber
year earned sales enslave us
your smile worth it

sorry - sometimes - these eyes, leave me
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Re: Haiku Train

Postby Danté » Sun Jan 21, 2018 4:37 pm

your smile worth it
more than any asking price
the number is five
to anticipate touching what is unseen seems far more interesting than seeing what the hand can not touch
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Re: Haiku Train

Postby Suzanne » Tue Jan 23, 2018 10:52 pm

The number is five,
I don't know why that matters:
It's my new guitar.
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