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Haiku Train

Postby pseud » Sun Mar 12, 2006 10:17 pm

Haiku Train

Start your haiku with the last line of this one, try to make it relate somehow. Then the next person will do the same to yours. And so on. And so on. For as long as we feel like it. Try to keep the 5-7-5 syllable rule, but we'll be generous if it just doesn't fit.

I know it's lame, and I suck at haikus, but please play along.

vegetarian:
a word to remind us that
ground beef's bad for us
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Postby that girl » Mon Mar 13, 2006 12:53 am

Ground beef's bad for us.
I would eat chicken, but I
fear the bird flu too.


ps. This is a great addition. I'll be posting here from now on.
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Postby barrie » Mon Mar 13, 2006 1:00 am

ground beef's bad for us
eating sky beef's even worse
fish's flesh is best.
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Postby barrie » Mon Mar 13, 2006 1:06 am

Beaten by minutes
now the haiku train's derailed,
I'll catch the next one.
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Postby pseud » Mon Mar 13, 2006 1:12 am

(I) fear the bird flu too.
The ferd blew too, when bird flew
right into the glass.
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Postby pseud » Tue Mar 14, 2006 6:44 pm

train derailed once more-
no inspiration because
Caleb's haiku sucked
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Postby Bombadil » Tue Mar 14, 2006 7:18 pm

I'm here to save the
day with a shitty haiku
and nothing to say.
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Postby Bombadil » Tue Mar 14, 2006 7:26 pm

I'm posting haikus
one by one, to raise my count
above pseud's amount.
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Postby Bombadil » Tue Mar 14, 2006 7:27 pm

If you don't hop on
soon I'm going to pass you
up in the rat race.
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Postby barrie » Wed Mar 15, 2006 4:06 pm

Up in the rat race
mice gnawing the bottom rung -
larder of success.
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Postby cameron » Wed Mar 15, 2006 4:24 pm

Larder of success:
Car advert written by a
Dyslexic Russian.
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Postby Saul » Wed Mar 15, 2006 4:44 pm

Dyslexic Russian
Consumed by his own failings -
Consoled with ice cream.
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Postby twoleftfeet » Wed Mar 15, 2006 4:48 pm

A dyslexic Russian
thinks that CPR is how
the West spells Russia
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Postby Bombadil » Wed Mar 15, 2006 4:51 pm

Ivan (the great one)
was nothing but a Karpet
munching Kossack King.
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Postby Bombadil » Wed Mar 15, 2006 4:54 pm

Chairman got jealous
when some dyslexic Russian
stole his PRC.
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Postby twoleftfeet » Wed Mar 15, 2006 4:56 pm

munching Kossack King
burgers in a Burger Zsar
did for him - checkmate
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Postby Bombadil » Wed Mar 15, 2006 4:56 pm

Just seven more of
these little fuckers to tie
the cigar sucker.
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Postby barrie » Wed Mar 15, 2006 6:01 pm

train not sticky now
many wagons in sidings
who's working the points?
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Postby Bombadil » Wed Mar 15, 2006 6:05 pm

A lubed train goes
into caverns more smoothly--
the points're the posts.
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Postby Bombadil » Wed Mar 15, 2006 6:20 pm

Where did Capone go?
He left us alone and now
he's riding caboose.
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Postby pseud » Wed Mar 15, 2006 9:22 pm

would have responded
sooner, if only I had
the wit and the drive

riding caboose, huh?
No, busy doing taxes
and feeding the fish

notice Red Dragon:
a single non-cheap post with
multiple haikus
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Postby Bombadil » Wed Mar 15, 2006 9:34 pm

Taxes should be done
in February before
rabid April's rush.

Fish food, tetra type
for fantail goldfish, twice a
day makes a haiku.
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Postby Bombadil » Wed Mar 15, 2006 9:52 pm

Am I a dragon
or a Griffin? I'm not sure:
mythic dilemma.
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Postby Minnie » Thu Mar 16, 2006 1:28 am

I can't follow on
But I'll give my tuppence worth
And slot it in here

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Postby barrie » Thu Mar 16, 2006 11:38 am

......and slot it in here.
I'll leave you to it, and go
for an ice-cold beer.
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