Haiku Train

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Re: Haiku Train

Post by Amadis » Thu Jul 30, 2020 7:47 am

becomes fishermen
fishermen trawling for truth
finding a lean catch

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Re: Haiku Train

Post by Macavity » Fri Jul 31, 2020 2:48 am

finding a lean catch
whets blades and sculpts Aran scowls
her children play tag

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Re: Haiku Train

Post by Amadis » Fri Jul 31, 2020 8:43 am

her children play tag
the last children of Rapa Nui
stone eyes look out

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Re: Haiku Train

Post by Macavity » Sat Aug 01, 2020 5:09 am

stone eyes look out
dreaming an ocean with shoals
to feed their children

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Re: Haiku Train

Post by Amadis » Sat Aug 01, 2020 9:10 am

to feed their children
horrific crimes to commit
dreams of worlds better

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Re: Haiku Train

Post by Macavity » Sat Aug 01, 2020 8:25 pm

dreams of worlds better
awake him in Elysian Fields
harvest surreal crops

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Re: Haiku Train

Post by Amadis » Sun Aug 02, 2020 5:14 am

harvest surreal crops
flowers of human misery
the gods have strange taste

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Re: Haiku Train

Post by Macavity » Mon Aug 03, 2020 5:39 am

the gods have strange taste
a tin of ambrosia makes
perception divine

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Re: Haiku Train

Post by Amadis » Tue Aug 04, 2020 12:03 pm

perception divine
clarity the newest drug
a razor to walk

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Re: Haiku Train

Post by springchic1979 » Tue Aug 04, 2020 1:04 pm

a razor to walk
purposefully across skin
leaves bloody footprints

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Post by Macavity » Wed Aug 05, 2020 5:07 pm

leaves bloody footprints
where gulls brawl until high tide
erases the melee

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Re: Haiku Train

Post by Amadis » Thu Aug 06, 2020 8:04 am

erases the melee
Freyja sews new seed for the spring
earth once more flowers

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Re: Haiku Train

Post by Macavity » Fri Aug 07, 2020 8:18 pm

earth once more flowers
an emperor's feast for hares
tundra saxifrage

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Re: Haiku Train

Post by Amadis » Fri Aug 07, 2020 10:41 pm

tundra saxifrage
being pleasing to Roman gods
ensures mans future

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Re: Haiku Train

Post by Macavity » Sat Aug 08, 2020 4:08 pm

ensures mans future
this woman suckling her boy
all blossom is bliss

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Re: Haiku Train

Post by Amadis » Sun Aug 09, 2020 12:50 am

all blossom is bliss
A gift from Darwins machine
imbibe well of it

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Re: Haiku Train

Post by Macavity » Wed Aug 12, 2020 4:29 am

imbibe well of it
today's palette unbothered
by umber shadows

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Re: Haiku Train

Post by Amadis » Wed Aug 12, 2020 9:44 am

by umber shadows
he transforms his face with paint
and returns a man

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Re: Haiku Train

Post by Macavity » Thu Aug 13, 2020 7:52 pm

and returns a man
in his Stetson hat and love
of cigars and cards

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Re: Haiku Train

Post by Amadis » Fri Aug 14, 2020 10:48 pm

of cigars and cards
all of life but a gamble
who can know who wins

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Re: Haiku Train

Post by Macavity » Sun Aug 16, 2020 5:43 am

who can know who wins
when fame rolls whispering dice
and ambition's loud

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Re: Haiku Train

Post by Amadis » Mon Aug 17, 2020 9:44 am

and ambition's loud
persistent shouts, from within
mask bonds of kindness

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Re: Haiku Train

Post by Macavity » Tue Aug 18, 2020 7:03 pm

mask bonds of kindness
this dense forest where playing
cubs forget to hide

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Re: Haiku Train

Post by Amadis » Wed Aug 19, 2020 9:00 am

cubs forget to hide
all humans gone since the leak
Chernobyl a park

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Re: Haiku Train

Post by Macavity » Thu Aug 20, 2020 2:53 am

Chernobyl a park
-ing of human playing God
until the rain came

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