Unfinished sympathy for the rebel

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Amadis
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Unfinished sympathy for the rebel

Post by Amadis » Sat Aug 01, 2020 5:15 pm

Being responsible I don my mask
and so Covid my identity
I fill bottles with 100 proof
and strap em next to me.

I can cleanse my hands,
or I can spray my enemy.
Leaf blower in the trunk
I’m ready, come get me!

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Re: Unfinished sympathy for the rebel

Post by springchic1979 » Sun Aug 02, 2020 4:42 pm

I am confused about the title in relation to the poem. Wouldn't the rebel be the person who isn't wearing the mask? and sympathy for the rebel (who is not wearing a mask) wouldn't mean arming yourself with a leaf blower or alcohol spray bottles...?

As far as the poem itself I understand how the person wants to protect themselves and has fear about the situation. It is a good write.

I think it may just need a different title...??

respectfully,
YDS

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Re: Unfinished sympathy for the rebel

Post by Amadis » Wed Aug 05, 2020 10:10 am

It is true, it's not quite finished yet...

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