Bonnie & Clyde v2

[NotQuiteSure]

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Bonnie & Clyde (2020)



Captured here by video surveillance
the outlaws,
wearing their trademark red hats
ID'd, arrested
in less than an hour
the only ones without a mask in the bank.

Brought back alive
boasted the sheriff
it weren't as if either were black.


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Bonehead & Clyde (2020)



Captured here by video surveillance
the outlaws,
wearing their trademark red hats
ID'd and arrested
in less than an hour
the only ones without a mask in the bank




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[Macavity]

Went web searching Not. I presume the title is playing around with Bonnie and Clyde (the latter could relate to the Anthill mob as well), but I didn't find any definitive red hat images (obviously I'm missing something). Perhaps there is some news story floating about?

The law breakers not wearing a mask is a nicely ironic image.

best

mac

[NotQuiteSure]

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Hi mac,
I'd forgotten the Anthill mob, delighted to be reminded.
'Red hats', just a reference to those MAGA hats of Trump.

Regards, Not

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[Macavity]

Red hats', just a reference to those MAGA hats of Trump.

I should have guessed!

No doubt an amnesty would be granted

cheers

mac

[NotQuiteSure]

I should have guessed!

You really should

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[springchic1979]

2 normal citizens going about their everyday business are now considered/labeled as outlaws and social outcasts for having the audacity to continue to live life normally AND for having an unpopular political opinion...though neither made you a pariah until recently.

Honestly though, I liked liked the irony!

Nice write.
respectfully,
YDS

[NotQuiteSure]

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Hi Y,
I hadn't foreseen that 'outlaw' could be exploited in that way. (Always nice when you discover you've hidden depths.)
Would it enhance your interpretation were the title to be (the less? pejorative) Bonnie & Clyde (2020)?

Many thanks.

Regards, Not


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[springchic1979]

Now that you mention it...i'm not sure if 'bonehead' really goes well in the title. If you took out the perjorative 'bonehead' you leave it more open for the reader to interpret how they choose. (just my opinion)

I do rather like the idea of giving it a slightly different title like:
Bonnie & Clyde 2020
or Modern day Bonnie & Clyde.

Title aside, it was definitely a good write. It does make me wonder what other normal everyday opinions and behaviors will all of a sudden be considered 'punishable'...

[NotQuiteSure]

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Hi Y,
title changed.

Thanks again.

Regards, Not


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[Macavity]

Thumbs up on the title change. Liking this more, now that I am keying into the changing perceptions of criminality and not web searching on the title!

best

mac

[NotQuiteSure]

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Thanks mac,
Credit to Y for that. She/he saw that to which I was smugly oblivious

Regards, Not


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[NotQuiteSure]

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- tweaked -

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[Macavity]

hi Not

I think you lose the 'black' humour of the original with the additional theme.

best

mac

[springchic1979]

This does change the feel of the poem. It goes from irony to something that could be considered crude humor. There is nothing wrong with that type of humor if that is what you are going for.

However, with all the information 'implied' one might be able to argue that those two people wouldn't have been arrested in the first place. . .

respectfully,
YDS

[NotQuiteSure]

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Hi mac, Y
I think you're probably right, thanks for revisiting.

Regards, Not

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