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Childish iv - Porkies

Posted: Wed Jul 22, 2020 12:37 pm
by NotQuiteSure
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Porkies

This little piggy went to market
(he moved his firm to Ireland)

This little piggy stayed at home
(he drove to County Durham)

This little piggy had roast beef
(mmm, chlorinated chicken)

This little piggy had none
I voted to be poorer!

And this little piggy cried
Wee Wee Wee
gobbling up the NHS



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Re: Childish iv

Posted: Wed Jul 22, 2020 1:08 pm
by Firebird
You should call it ‘Porkies’ :D.

I’m not sure what the first stanza refers to, though I understand what it’s getting at. And I think the final stanza should be Wee Wee Wee - I think it works better that way: pretending to cry, when gobbling up the NHS.

It would nice if each stanza were in some way a type of lie. Not really sure stanza three is though.

Cheers,

Tristan

Re: Childish iv - Porkies

Posted: Wed Jul 22, 2020 2:15 pm
by NotQuiteSure
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Hi Tristan.

You should call it ‘Porkies’ :D.
I should and I will! thanks.

I’m not sure what the first stanza refers to, though I understand what it’s getting at.
Rees-Mogg moving offices to Ireland

And I think the final stanza should be Wee Wee Wee - I think it works better that way: pretending to cry, when gobbling up the NHS.
Would Wee Hee Hee work?

It would nice if each stanza were in some way a type of lie.
I though they were (in some way) :)

Not really sure stanza three is though.
Reference to 'maintaining our high food standards' (similar to protecting the NHS).
could have had - full of yummy hormones ?

Regards, Not


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Re: Childish iv - Porkies

Posted: Wed Jul 22, 2020 8:15 pm
by Firebird
NotQuiteSure wrote:
Wed Jul 22, 2020 2:15 pm
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And I think the final stanza should be Wee Wee Wee - I think it works better that way: pretending to cry, when gobbling up the NHS.
Would Wee Hee Hee work?

It’s better, but I still prefer Wee Wee Wee.

It would nice if each stanza were in some way a type of lie.
I thought they were (in some way) :)

I think this needs to be made a little clearer, though.

Not really sure stanza three is though.
Reference to 'maintaining our high food standards' (similar to protecting the NHS).
could have had - full of yummy hormones ?

Yes, that would be better. But the lie element still isn’t explicit enough for me in this instance.

Maybe something like this:

This little piggy had road beef,
while saying it was chlorinated chicken.

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Cheers,

Tristan

Re: Childish iv - Porkies

Posted: Thu Jul 23, 2020 11:27 am
by NotQuiteSure
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Hi Tristan,
ok, the Wees have it.

Regards, Not

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