Hyperacusiac

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Hyperacusiac

Post by bjondon » Mon Aug 05, 2019 9:21 pm

I'm a hyperacusiac with amusiac tendencies
somewhat relieved by trichotillomania
I'm a hyperacusiac with amusiac tendencies
more and more retrieved by the thrill of instantania

This is not what they tell you
on the boards of psycho-teranumia
This is not exactly believed
by the psyche grads blowing chatbacks on the verge of therapunia

No, this is Plucking Parrots
and we are Messrs Lumia Lumia and Gonfalutin Lumia
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Re: Hyperacusiac

Post by JJWilliamson » Tue Aug 06, 2019 6:58 am

Hi, Jules

I found myself smiling, on the verge of laughing, at this one and wondered if my reaction was wholly inappropriate.
The language seems deliberately convoluted, as if you were entertaining the reader with a series of complexities,
some of which seemed to be manufactured. Well, that was my initial impression and one that I liked.

S1 was a great, even more so when I attempted to unravell the meaning:

A tone deaf man with an aversion to loud sounds,
who enjoys pulling his hair out
and delights in instant gratification
. ...Is that it? The title emphasises the hearing disorder.

S2 was tricky to follow. It reads as though there are varied opinions and therapeutic options,
none of which entirely convince the speaker.

S3 I imagine the sound of plucking a live parrot would be unbearable.
However, a light show would be sheer heaven.

Am I close?

Enjoyed the trip.

Best

JJ
bjondon wrote:
Mon Aug 05, 2019 9:21 pm
I'm a hyperacusiac with amusiac tendencies
somewhat relieved by trichotillomania
I'm a hyperacusiac with amusiac tendencies
more and more retrieved by the thrill of instantania

This is not what they tell you
on the boards of psycho-teranumia
This is not exactly believed
by the psyche-grads blowing chat-backs on the verge of therapunia

No, this is Plucking Parrots
and we are Messrs Lumia Lumia and Gonfalutin Lumia
Long time a child and still a child

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Re: Hyperacusiac

Post by Macavity » Tue Aug 06, 2019 9:24 am

With the aid of google I could follow S1 and found it highly entertaining.
bjondon wrote:
Mon Aug 05, 2019 9:21 pm
I'm a hyperacusiac with amusiac tendencies
somewhat relieved by trichotillomania
I'm a hyperacusiac with amusiac tendencies
more and more retrieved by the thrill of instantania

This is not what they tell you
on the boards of psycho-teranumia
This is not exactly believed
by the psyche-grads blowing chat-backs on the verge of therapunia

No, this is Plucking Parrots
and we are Messrs Lumia Lumia and Gonfalutin Lumia

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Re: Hyperacusiac

Post by Firebird » Tue Aug 06, 2019 10:23 am

Hi Jules,

I’m happy to look up one or two unknown words in a short poem, but more than that and it becomes more a language exercise and the poetry gets lost for me. I’m sorry, but your poem falls into the latter for me. I did try to google some of the terms, but there’s just too much I can’t get my head round overall. I realise that this is probably my failing more than your poems.

Cheers,

Tristan

bjondon wrote:
Mon Aug 05, 2019 9:21 pm
I'm a hyperacusiac with amusiac tendencies
somewhat relieved by trichotillomania
I'm a hyperacusiac with amusiac tendencies
more and more retrieved by the thrill of instantania

This is not what they tell you
on the boards of psycho-teranumia
This is not exactly believed
by the psyche-grads blowing chat-backs on the verge of therapunia

No, this is Plucking Parrots
and we are Messrs Lumia Lumia and Gonfalutin Lumia

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Re: Hyperacusiac

Post by bjondon » Tue Aug 06, 2019 1:26 pm

Thank you JJ, mac and Tristan . . . a welcome response from all three of you, pretty much capturing my own conflicted view - I am tending to post my fringiest of poems at the moment i.e. I have a hunch it's working but a suspicion it's nonsense . . . and in a way the ginormous posterboy of nonsense poetry itself, Jabberwocky, was an inspiration - That poem does actually contain a plethora of meanings but Carroll lets fly with his extraordinary pseudo-language (and we take wing with him).
I do like also in this age of augmented poetry, sending readers off on wild-goose-google chases (apologies Tristan).

JJ - pretty much spot on as usual (and nervous laughter being exactly the response I was hoping for).
Parrots pulling their own feathers out was the reference I was thinking of, but I am delighted with the, now staring me in the face, audio image of the noise a parrot would make if involuntarily plucked . . . which is exactly how all music and even the tiniest of resonant noises strike the brain of a hyperacusic amusic (I've never actually seen the 'ac' ending being used by professionals).

If there's a serious point here it's about pathologising human behaviours and those with 'conditions' fighting back, often on the internet.

I have just edited 'psyche-grads' to remove the hyphen, and run 'chat-backs' into a single unhyphenated word.

Regards,
Jules

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Re: Hyperacusiac

Post by twoleftfeet » Mon Aug 19, 2019 9:53 am

Just my cup of tea,Jules - love it!

It made me chuckle even more when I realised that the couple of psychological terms that I goooogled were real)
Initially I though an "amusiac" was someone who delighted in telling groanworthy jokes
YES - that's me,that is: :)
Q: How many psychiatrists does it take to change a light-bulb?
A:Only one - but the light-bulb must want to change.

Anyway,I'm in two minds about "Plucking Parrots" ( aha!,a schizophrenic,I hear you say!)
I thought that you wanted to express,in the vernacular,your feelings about psycho-babble - "Plucking" works well in that regard,and I see that "parrots" could imply something like "parroting a paragraph from the text book",but somehow
the two together aren't working for me:I can't imagine a parrot(patient?) enjoying being plucked.
I was honestly expecting "Plucking Pollacks",peasant that I am :)

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Geoff
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