DRAGONBOUGH

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DRAGONBOUGH

Post by twoleftfeet » Mon Jun 10, 2019 3:57 pm

This poem was kicked off by a couple of pictures taken in the park,so I've created a PDF on my Goooogle Drive.
Here's a link (sorry,you'll have to paste it yourself,as the "url" feature doesn't seem to be working):

https://drive.google.com/file/d/1lz_T9cI5IyQSmEI12ZgCk1pqAbnD7ljv/view?usp=sharing


You probably need to be British and of a certain age, in order to know about Nutwood,and Rupert and his chums.
Here's a link to a dedicated "fan" website,with a list of characters:

https://followersofrupertbear.co.uk/visit-nutwood/
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Re: DRAGONBOUGH

Post by Macavity » Mon Jun 10, 2019 5:34 pm

I'll keep this in mind when I walk the woodland park tomorrow...may have stepped on one or two in the past :oops: The dangling she sort of works...

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Post by David » Mon Jun 10, 2019 6:18 pm

I like it, of course. Geoff and Nutwood - what's not to like? I'm not sure about the non-rhyming lines, but I can't remember - is that a Nutwood speciality or not?

And pics too. A neighbourhood park? Those dragons do look very like brothers.

I never did finish the poem that I intended to call "Nutwood City Limits" - couldn't get past the (excellent) opening couplet.

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Post by Leaf » Mon Jun 10, 2019 6:31 pm

Well, this is excellent, TLF or Geoff, if you prefer :-)

I really like the combination of poem and photos. The suspense between the first two photos is thrilling. 'Aha!' I said, on seeing the dragon. What a splendid fellow :D

I like the rhythm and rhyme scheme of the poem, and particularly the verses seeking to find out about the dragon. It's good to ask questions, even if you don't get any answers; and sometimes not knowing is better, in a way.

Well, I'm not an expert on dragonboughs, but I agree that the second chap might well be a brother. He's a bit slimmer than his brother, but my brothers are like that. The younger one has been described as a 'stick man' :lol:

Being British and of a certain age, I know of Nutwood and dear Rupert and chums. That's a great website; I've bookmarked it, so I can pop in between serious work tasks tomorrow.

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Post by twoleftfeet » Wed Jun 12, 2019 12:42 pm

Thank you,folks!

Mac
I hope you were wearing your "Nutwood specs" in the woodland to avoid accidents..

Yes that "she" at the end of the line is a bit cheeky (OK then,desperate) but it's the sort of liberty that's regularly taken by the story-writers of Rupert.

David
As you may recall, there were usually 4 pictures to a page with a rhyming couplet beneath each one.Below these was the full text of (that part of) the story e.g.
https://www.pinterest.com/pin/567664728016944425/

One couplet I'll always remember appeared on a Xmas card:
Rupert must be on his toes
that snowball's heading for his nose!
:)

I realise that what I've done amounts to heresy, but here's my lame excuse:
pictures 1 and 2 constitute the basis for the poem but I couldn't describe the storyboard of each one in a short couplet.
The number of syllables I settled for eventually was driven by "waiting to be seen through Nutwood eyes".

The 2 parks are 10 miles apart - it sounds a lot but it's nothing where magic is concerned!

Nutwood City Limits? - GROAN!

Leaf
Thanks for the kind review. It's good to meet another Rupert fan, and I'm pleased to have been able to point you at the
FOLLOWER'S OF RUPERT site.
I empathise with your brother - I was once described as a "spring onion":
I was playing football wearing a green shirt and white shorts at the time. :shock:

Cheers
Geoff
PS If you spot any DRAGONBOUGHS, please take a picture!
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Re: DRAGONBOUGH

Post by Leaf » Wed Jun 12, 2019 6:25 pm

twoleftfeet wrote:
Wed Jun 12, 2019 12:42 pm
Leaf
Thanks for the kind review. It's good to meet another Rupert fan, and I'm pleased to have been able to point you at the
FOLLOWER'S OF RUPERT site.
I empathise with your brother - I was once described as a "spring onion":
I was playing football wearing a green shirt and white shorts at the time. :shock:
'Spring onion' :lol: :lol: :lol:

Yes, great site; I'm particularly drawn to Wise Old Goat, for some reason. And I'll be looking out for DRAGONBOUGHS in my local park from now on :)

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Post by barrett » Wed Jun 12, 2019 11:52 pm

I can't say I was ever a fan of Rupert but this is perfect, wouldn't change a thing.

"...patient, cloaked in spiky-­branch disguise,
waiting to be seen through Nutwood eyes."

That's a fine couplet and says a lot more than its seeming simplicity suggests!

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Re: DRAGONBOUGH

Post by Poet » Thu Jun 13, 2019 3:36 am

I like the poem, Interesting take on the dragon itself. Keep it up!

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Post by bjondon » Thu Jun 13, 2019 12:50 pm

I wonder if you could take this further : next frame shows Rupert Bear
himself behind the camera (I'm sure you've got the outfit somewhere :) )
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Post by twoleftfeet » Thu Jun 13, 2019 2:37 pm

barrett wrote:
Wed Jun 12, 2019 11:52 pm
I can't say I was ever a fan of Rupert but this is perfect, wouldn't change a thing.

"...patient, cloaked in spiky-­branch disguise,
waiting to be seen through Nutwood eyes."

That's a fine couplet and says a lot more than its seeming simplicity suggests!
Thanks for that,barrett. I was a huge fan when very small,then "grew out of it" only to be drawn back in
,as an adult, in by the wonderful art work and the longing for the Utopia that Nutwood represents.
And everyone gets back home,safe,in time for tea. :)
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Post by twoleftfeet » Thu Jun 13, 2019 2:37 pm

Poet wrote:
Thu Jun 13, 2019 3:36 am
I like the poem, Interesting take on the dragon itself. Keep it up!
Glad you liked it,Poet.
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Post by twoleftfeet » Thu Jun 13, 2019 2:45 pm

bjondon wrote:
Thu Jun 13, 2019 12:50 pm
I wonder if you could take this further : next frame shows Rupert Bear
himself behind the camera (I'm sure you've got the outfit somewhere :) )
Jules
Sure,Jules -
I can see the headline now:
MAN WEARING "RUPERT BEAR" COSTUME WHILE IN POSSESSION OF A CAMERA ARRESTED IN THE PARK
When the suspect explained to PC Nickham that he was taking photos of dragonboughs for a poem, and the children just came over to watch - the officer replied "Tell that to the judge!"
:)
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Post by Antcliff » Thu Jun 13, 2019 7:09 pm

Geoff! Good grief, I heard you got killed down in that shoot out in Ecuador along with Butch and Sundance. So it turns out you were in a different gang and in Nutwood.

I am such a Rupert fan that I cannot assess anything Rupert related without judging it = excellent.

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Post by twoleftfeet » Thu Jun 13, 2019 10:01 pm

Antcliff wrote:
Thu Jun 13, 2019 7:09 pm
Geoff! Good grief, I heard you got killed down in that shoot out in Ecuador along with Butch and Sundance. So it turns out you were in a different gang and in Nutwood.
Seth,
That shootout was in Bolivia. :)
The only shoot-outs in Nutwood are of the penalty-shoot-out type. Rupert's team always wins - because Edward Trunk fills the goal.I got to be ball-boy once..
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I am such a Rupert fan that I cannot assess anything Rupert related without judging it = excellent.
Me too!
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