The Jolly Blue Dragon

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The Jolly Blue Dragon

Post by cydney » Tue May 21, 2019 2:55 am

The Jolly Blue Dragon

It's morning and I'm awake.
I'm thinking about all the things
I'd like to do on my mini-vacation.

I'd like to rearrange my little
corner of the living room
where all my devices are
so it's easier to access stuff.
Too many cords.

I'd like to say something significant.
In word and deed.

I'd like for the bard
to write something
I can actually understand.

I'd like for Paul Newman
and Mr. C. write a poem
just for me.

I'd like to see the Jolly Blue Giant
unfold himself from the couch,
sit up and be jolly.

The old testament says
that a husband's job
is to make his wife happy.
There's something significant
to be said about happiness.

I think if the Jolly Green Giant told me
I can't be happy in France
but I can be happy in Spain,
I'd say, well go to Spain.
By all means, go to Spain.

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Re: The Jolly Blue Dragon

Post by k-j » Wed May 22, 2019 10:58 am

I like this a lot. I like the way it jumps around but still seems coherent. The way "something significant" is repeated. I really like the Jolly Blue Giant / Jolly Green Giant / Jolly Blue Dragon triangle and I think I even understand it. I don't know who Mr. C. is though. I think the end is great and so is "too many cords".
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Re: The Jolly Blue Dragon

Post by Macavity » Wed May 22, 2019 2:54 pm

I particularly enjoyed the last two sections.

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Re: The Jolly Blue Dragon

Post by Poet » Sat Jun 08, 2019 10:06 pm

I liked the last two lines, it had this cadence that sounded serene.

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Re: The Jolly Blue Dragon

Post by Antcliff » Sun Jun 16, 2019 3:31 pm

I have just found out that this is likely to have been one of the last poems by Cheryl Leverette. Some of the older hands here are likely to know her from visits to Poetry Circle, where she had posted for many years. Sadly, I learn that she died very recently.


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We fray into the future, rarely wrought
Save in the tapestries of afterthought.
Richard Wilbur

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