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Teeth

Posted: Wed Oct 26, 2016 3:55 pm
by penguin
If only they’d known - those poor fellows
who’ve protested when up in front of the beak,
that she appeared to be much older
than sixteen. If they knew they’d been looking
in all the wrong places, then of course,
they would never have gone there at all.

Re: Teeth

Posted: Wed Oct 26, 2016 10:42 pm
by Moth
Excellent thinking there, Pen, and what a thought! Will remember this for sure. Who've would read better as who imo.

Re: Teeth

Posted: Thu Oct 27, 2016 10:21 am
by penguin
Moth wrote:Excellent thinking there, Pen, and what a thought! Will remember this for sure. Who've would read better as who imo.
Thanks, Moth. Perhaps you're right, but I'll probably change more than that.

Re: Teeth

Posted: Thu Oct 27, 2016 10:58 am
by cynwulf
Yes, a very apt poem, thinking of certain recent legal proceedings, well expressed.
Regards, c.

Re: Teeth

Posted: Thu Oct 27, 2016 3:28 pm
by penguin
Thanks, Cynwulf.

Re: Teeth

Posted: Sun Oct 30, 2016 7:09 pm
by David
cynwulf wrote:Yes, a very apt poem, thinking of certain recent legal proceedings, well expressed.
Exactly. Unfortunately.

David