Jeremy Corbyn

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Jeremy Corbyn

Post by Katherine » Wed Sep 16, 2015 10:23 pm

He didn’t sing, but here’s the thing -
he stands for those who are unsung!

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Re: Jeremy Corbyn

Post by brianedwards » Wed Sep 16, 2015 11:40 pm

Bravo.

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Re: Jeremy Corbyn

Post by JJWilliamson » Thu Sep 17, 2015 7:48 am

Short and to the point, Katherine.

I think you've penned a cracking couplet that typifies the 'less is more' philosophy.
Would I like to read more? Yes. Does the poem NEED more? Not really.
The poem is metered, yet everything flows naturally and the content positively sings.
There's no mistaking that title. :)
Katherine wrote:He didn’t sing, but here’s the thing - ...Very current. You have two lines of perfect iambic tetrameter and a pretty cool internal rhyme.
he stands for those who are unsung! ...The slant rhyme of 'sing' and 'sung' is particularly subtle.
Caught my attention, made me smile, made me think, made me smile. :) see.

Send it to the Daily Mail. They're bound to publish it.

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Re: Jeremy Corbyn

Post by Macavity » Thu Sep 17, 2015 8:05 am

Neatly done. Interesting times. Though he has agreed to sing in future. The 'education' of Jeremy begins :wink:

The poisons are already pouring...

http://www.telegraph.co.uk/news/politic ... overs.html

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Re: Jeremy Corbyn

Post by ray miller » Fri Sep 18, 2015 10:37 am

Macavity wrote:Neatly done. Interesting times. Though he has agreed to sing in future. The 'education' of Jeremy begins :wink:

The poisons are already pouring...

http://www.telegraph.co.uk/news/politic ... overs.html

cheers

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I believe he's agreed to do a Queen song next time. The smart money's on Fat-Bottomed Girls, a duet with Diane Abbott.
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Re: Jeremy Corbyn

Post by cynwulf » Fri Sep 18, 2015 11:43 am

Succinctly brilliant. He seems to be a living oxymoron-an unconniving politician.
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Re: Jeremy Corbyn

Post by Bluey » Wed Sep 23, 2015 12:30 am

A couplet of goodness. Verba bona!

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Re: Jeremy Corbyn

Post by ChrisMcLoughlin » Wed Sep 23, 2015 10:30 am

In and out, very concise.

At first it left me wanting more, but I think this is actually a strength with a single couplet - perhaps it sticks in the reader's mind for longer?

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Re: Jeremy Corbyn

Post by Katherine » Wed Sep 23, 2015 7:05 pm

Thanks for the kind responses peeps. x

Why a republican atheist should be expected to sing 'God Save the Queen', is a mystery to me and I'm a practising Catholic (crap at it, but practice makes perfect ;) ) and I like Liz II - God bless her! But, I'm a grown-up! x

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Re: Jeremy Corbyn

Post by camus » Wed Sep 23, 2015 10:45 pm

Topically synoptic.

Well put.
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