Liberation

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Paula
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Liberation

Post by Paula » Sat Feb 28, 2015 9:40 pm

God help me!
I know the rules
But something stirs
To pen this duel!

I know I shouldn't
The rules they’re there
But in this moment
I have to share!

Face this challenge
of the governing body
To withhold my flow
I will post and lobby!

Defend my right
My creative flow
To land and fire
My poets bow

Shoot for freedom
I will and say!
Trace my pen
Express my way!

One hundred and ten
One hundred more
Creative flow
Needs to be explored!

One a day you say
To all?
For heavens sake
We are tied and stalled!!

Saturation
Damnation
Liberation I say!

Alas, dear lass
Your just like us
Rules are rules
Don’t make a fuss!!

I hear them whisper
Loud and clear
One poem a day
Can't you HEAR?

Yes! Yes!
I know the rules
But something stirs
My inner duel

To express
Release
Get this out
Break the rule
End this drought!

Find MY space
I will, I can!
Never confined
Ever again!







(Yesterdays second poem..posted today..)

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Re: Liberation

Post by KevJ » Sun Mar 01, 2015 11:08 am

Hi Paula

Love this. It flows nicely along and I love a good rhyme. Not sure I could manage a poem a day myself. Good luck with that. :)

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Re: Liberation

Post by bodkin » Mon Mar 02, 2015 4:49 pm

Hi Paula,

I cannot quite picture what's going on here... although you are obviously discussing it with great energy.

Maybe if you were to set the scene a bit more first? It might only take a sentence...

Other than that, a nit:

You've got "your" instead of "you're" in S9...

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Re: Liberation

Post by cynwulf » Tue Mar 03, 2015 12:42 pm

G'day Paula,
I liked this, I agree with both of the previous commenters; very much like the swing and form of it, but don't fully understand what's happening.
Regards, C.

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Re: Liberation

Post by Namyh » Sun Mar 08, 2015 7:28 pm

Paula - When you step out of the box, you see perspectives not seen before. You draw on inner strengths not drawn on before. You write the words not written before to bring a vision perhaps not seen before. Somewhere in there is the poet's liberation. Enjoyed Paula. Namyh

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Re: Liberation

Post by Paula » Sat Mar 21, 2015 10:26 am

Namyh wrote:Paula - When you step out of the box, you see perspectives not seen before. You draw on inner strengths not drawn on before. You write the words not written before to bring a vision perhaps not seen before. Somewhere in there is the poet's liberation. Enjoyed Paula. Namyh
This is true, you understand.. 8)

Thankyou for the feedback everyone who responded I appreciate and thankyou for sharing your thoughts..

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