To a Sapphire

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To a Sapphire

Post by Lovely » Sat Feb 20, 2010 1:37 am

Within the deep blue dome of astral light
the jeweled planets glitter----------------
red and green and silver;
reflections from the hidden sun.

A mystic symbol this of life's illusion,
where real and unreal blend
with actuality-------------------unseen.


We dwell within the temples of the spirit
erected by the master builders
of mind, darkness and light.

And wonder upon wonder all around
created deep within the rhythm,
of the spinning wheels above,
below without within the realms
of their imagination,
inspired with a kiss of love divine.

Reflections of reflections
essences of essences
of holy thought and love;
to rise up again in mighty arcs!
Be-rayed with blazing colours of life and light.
Exalted,whirling, spinning, weaving
in eternity; space and power you
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Post by Lovely » Sat Feb 20, 2010 1:57 am

Thanks guys she is finished now. Sorry for overloading you. Just needed to get this out.

I won't write for a time now. Looking very much to "your" poetry. I think there is so much talent here.......really. I want to study you now.

Dave

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Post by arunansu » Sun Feb 21, 2010 7:52 am

This is almost an excellently made piece. I just relished the lines:

We dwell within the temples of the spirit
erected by the master builders
of mind, darkness and light.


But then stumbled on: inspired with a kiss of love divine
- Sounds too much, I'm sorry!

Could you do away with so many "ing" sounding verbs in the ending lines? I'd love to see this one closing at "colours of life and light".

Beautiful thought painted brilliantly. Smiles.

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Post by ray miller » Sun Feb 21, 2010 8:09 am

I liked the opening 3 lines but as soon as "mystic symbol" appears I know my time is up and, for me anyway, it wanders off to nowhere.To give one example -"where real and unreal blend with actuality" - aren't real and actuality the same thing?
I'm out of faith and in my cups
I contemplate such bitter stuff.

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Post by Lovely » Sun Feb 21, 2010 9:06 am

Thanks guys for your kind thoughts here. Aru thanks. Ray there is a reality, and an actuality,
but not on earth's vibration here . I really hope I am not getting to deep for you lovely peoples.

This earth is but one realm there are (several) above and below. This earth vibe, as it were,
is in the (middle) of the (heavens) above and the (hells) below. Truth is a strange thing, eh?
we prefer to ignore Her beacause it is easier to do, but ignorance is a sin as "Blavatsky" said that russian
lady of ligtht in " Isis Unveiled" The small truths lead to greater truths in time; and
surely as poets, artists: we need truth to reveal herself.

I am well aware there are some peoples who think I am mad as a hatter. I prefer to be
mad and know light than dwell in darkness without sight

As I said, I will not write for a while, I am more concerned about your poetry here
and how we can progress into greater happiness and light


wish you well
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Re: To a Sapphire

Post by David » Sun Feb 21, 2010 9:49 am

Lovely wrote:This earth vibe, as it were
I love the nonchalant spirituality of that. I'm not buying the whole thing, you understand, but that I like.

Cheers

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Re: To a Sapphire

Post by anniecat » Wed Feb 24, 2010 3:06 pm

I liked the thoughts and feelings behind this, illusions or reality, as mabe and the possible depths of real and reality...interesting a nice read :)
It always happens when you least expect it. AC

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Post by Lovely » Thu Feb 25, 2010 2:12 am

Big thank you to all again. Sometimes when I write I don't understand me no more;
but you peoples are wonderful.....you help me so much. You do so much.

I feel so helpless when I say this, you "all" have given me so much with this art

I am helpless for the moment don't know how to respond my tears for you which
now warms my heart cold and light.....light and dark. You have given me so much
in the way I should write now.......ignorance me...forgive this fool: my red- shot- eyes
cannot look at me anymore

always warm I guess..........

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Re: To a Sapphire

Post by joy » Thu Feb 25, 2010 9:55 am

I don’t see your tangent , are you a social worker in a hospital clinic,
Or some lonely person in the roman amphitheatre looking up at the thumbs down,
You of all people have a gift, and that gift is poetry, you are a person with- out government
you have a brain that can teach the greatest of poest, stop being a puzzle, get a life and write poetry
If you know that you are equal to the light of the sun, than shine on us,
And stop being an artificial arrow that is fired from the elasticity of you foreskin,
You are a man, be one, i have read many of your poems, stop pending time

Joy two moons

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Re: To a Sapphire

Post by Lovely » Mon Mar 08, 2010 2:27 pm

Dear Joy thanks for the words and arrows shot through the heart. I need to hold back in what I really want to say for wise reasons

I am aware of the different types of personalities in these boards. Call them colours if you want or vibrations which is better.

All things come in time with a little love and patience........stay calm and don't worry

sincere me

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Re: To a Sapphire

Post by Lake » Tue Mar 09, 2010 3:45 pm

Lovely,

The first stanza reads very well. Some beautiful adjectives, astral, jeweled. In S1L2 and S2L3, I first took it as the punctuation of elipsis, then having another look, it is not. Are you using it as a visual effect? It does look like sunrays. The rest of the poem sounds more rational or whatever it is. Thanks for letting us read your thoughts.

Best,

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Submit without submitting.

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Re: To a Sapphire

Post by Lovely » Tue Mar 16, 2010 10:23 pm

Dear Lake, thank you. I am only of heart so sorry. Sorry.

I cannot help me. Live U people.........I am crazy again sorry
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Post by Lovely » Tue Mar 16, 2010 10:29 pm

Love U guys!

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Re: To a Sapphire

Post by Lovely » Mon Mar 22, 2010 9:13 am

Lake wrote:Lovely,

The first stanza reads very well. Some beautiful adjectives, astral, jeweled. In S1L2 and S2L3, I first took it as the punctuation of elipsis, then having another look, it is not. Are you using it as a visual effect? It does look like sunrays. The rest of the poem sounds more rational or whatever it is. Thanks for letting us read your thoughts.

Best,

Lake

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Re: To a Sapphire

Post by Lovely » Tue Mar 23, 2010 8:15 am

Thanks you:- thanks I guess me. I don't know how to write anymore I am closing me down.

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Re: To a Sapphire

Post by Emmanuel » Mon May 07, 2018 11:16 pm

This is an blessed work of poetry; however, the real author was J. Michaud PhD, who died in 1961. It was published as the epigraph to chapter eight of his book The Golden Star, which is freely available to read at http://www.thegoldenstar.org/vision08.html.

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