Emerald

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Emerald

Post by Lovely » Sat Jun 06, 2009 5:24 pm

Green burn the fires of Nature's beauty
on trees and grass in woods or field.

Essence of Life:


that's drawn from out the seeds of earth
by bright and warming rays of Helios,


deeply bright:



which rest the eyes of human-kind
(to a make a background)
for the vivid colours of the flowers
that stand around raised
by fragile grace,


their petals for Light and Space.

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Re: Emerald

Post by peterkiggin » Sun Jun 07, 2009 8:28 am

This poem was written by someone who understands about love and beauty and comes through as a bright explosion of words travelling fast through a mind so beautiful, great work deserves great praise.

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Re: Emerald

Post by Mic » Mon Jun 08, 2009 10:49 am

Dear Lovely,

Let me first say that I have read a number of your postings and like what you do, very much. But I'm afraid I found this one inaccessible. The syntax and layout feels self-conscious and - dare I say it? - arbitrary (to me). For example, why the capitals in "Essence of Life', "Light and Space" and "Nature" but not 'earth'? And the colons? They seem to lack, er, purpose I s'pose. The yawning expanse of white space between certain lines and stanzas is exhausting for the eye. That said, there may be a code of conduct here I'm not getting.

Yours,

Moan-y Mic
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Re: Emerald

Post by Emmanuel » Mon May 07, 2018 11:05 pm

This is a sublime poem; however, the real author was J. Michaud PhD, who died in 1961. It was published as the epigraph to chapter three of his book The Golden Star, which is freely available to read at http://www.thegoldenstar.org/vision03.html.

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