Haiku Train

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Re: Haiku Train

Post by Amadis » Sat Nov 21, 2020 1:09 am

wakes a sleepy mole
yawning, stretching, life from snow
impact winter over

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Re: Haiku Train

Post by JJWilliamson » Sat Nov 21, 2020 3:11 pm

Impact winter over
sleigh bells thaw
reindeer stir
Long time a child and still a child

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Re: Haiku Train

Post by Amadis » Sun Nov 22, 2020 11:56 am

reindeer stir
horse flies bite in passions heat
an arctic frenzy

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Re: Haiku Train

Post by Macavity » Wed Nov 25, 2020 5:09 am

an arctic frenzy
across the tundra a bear
pisses with vigour

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Re: Haiku Train

Post by JJWilliamson » Wed Nov 25, 2020 9:49 am

Now that's a haiku, mac. Nice one.

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Re: Haiku Train

Post by NotQuiteSure » Thu Dec 03, 2020 1:12 pm

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pisses with vigour
golden streams of memory
old sheets need changing


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Re: Haiku Train

Post by Amadis » Fri Dec 11, 2020 9:41 am

old sheets need changing
crusty traces of pleasure
new days joy beckons

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