The Extra-Boot (V4)

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The Extra-Boot (V4)

Post by bjondon » Wed Jan 09, 2019 7:24 pm

Tee Hee
the great romantic artist
that I thought I was
turns out
not to be

Wha Wha
that small conceit
found feet
and has indeed both been and gone
too far!

Hoo Hoo
it wasn't me
but others too have donned the boot
and kicked the dust (Like Me!)
and maybe just possibly
Like You!

Yar Yar
we've all been there
we've seen the show
(Look here's my scar!)

A thousand scattered boots
for every one that makes the air

But listen

Who's the crew?
Who stoked the fire?
Who works the ground?
Who built the fliers?


Yeah
Yeah!
without us hoots
those extra-boots
would be
No Where



V2
But listen,
who's the crew?
who's the stoker?
the giant shipshape shoe floater?

Yeah! Yeah!
without us hoots
those extra-boots
would be
No Where


………………………………
Original last stanza
But listen, who's the crew?
Without us hoots those extra-boots
would be
No Where
Last edited by bjondon on Thu Jan 17, 2019 5:26 pm, edited 9 times in total.

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Re: The Extra-Boot

Post by ray miller » Thu Jan 10, 2019 12:17 pm

I enjoyed this, though I feel I might be missing some pun or joke in the title.
bjondon wrote:
Wed Jan 09, 2019 7:24 pm
Tee Hee
that great romantic artist
that I thought I was
turns out - turned?
not to be

Wha Wha
that small conceit
found feet
and has indeed both been and gone - sounds better without "indeed"
too far!

Hoo Hoo
it wasn't me
but others too have donned the boot
and kicked the dust (Like Me!)
and maybe just (possibly?) - I think and possibly Like You! is better
Like You!

Yar Yar
we've all been there
we've seen the show
(Look here's my scar!)

A thousand scattered boots - maybe grounded is better than scattered
For every one that makes the air

But listen, who's the crew? - who's the crew? Not sure what that's supposed to mean.
Without us hoots those extra-boots
would be
No Where
I'm out of faith and in my cups
I contemplate such bitter stuff.

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Re: The Extra-Boot

Post by Firebird » Thu Jan 10, 2019 1:09 pm

Hi Jules,

I thought I could be an artist too, but a long time ago now. Enjoyed. I’d keep ‘too’ and ‘indeed’ for the rhyme, but agree with what Ray says about ‘possibly’. My only query is with you final stanza. See below.

Cheers,

Tristan
bjondon wrote:
Wed Jan 09, 2019 7:24 pm
Tee Hee
that great romantic artist
that I thought I was
turns out
not to be

Wha Wha
that small conceit
found feet
and has indeed both been and gone
too far!

Hoo Hoo
it wasn't me
but others too have donned the boot
and kicked the dust (Like Me!)
and maybe just (possibly?)
Like You!

Yar Yar
we've all been there
we've seen the show
(Look here's my scar!)

A thousand scattered boots
For every one that makes the air

But listen, who's the crew?
Without us hoots those extra-boots (I understand that ‘hoots’ is a noun here but at first I thought it was a verb because I thought the line before was all speech. I think I thought this because like Ray I couldn’t understand who ‘the crew’ were. Think this needs clarifying somehow.)
would be
No Where

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Re: The Extra-Boot (revision)

Post by bjondon » Thu Jan 10, 2019 5:04 pm

Thanks Ray and Tristan,
fair point . . . . I thought everyone could read my mind.
Have posted a revision.
Glad you like this.
Jules

ps. the title partly comes from memories of my
mum accusing my dad of thinking he was an Extra-Wurst.
I started out as a visual artist too . . . still hanker after it.
My intention here is for 'artist' to be more generic
i.e. writers and musicians too.

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Re: The Extra-Boot (V3)

Post by Firebird » Sat Jan 12, 2019 8:32 pm

Hi Jules,

For what it’s worth, this is where I am with understanding the end of the poem.
A thousand scattered boots
for every one that makes the air (don’t understand these two lines. ‘Boots’ appear from nowhere.)

But listen

Who's the crew?
Who's the stoker?
Who hewed that coal?
Who's the motor? (So these are the workers? The people who make things and make the world go round?)

Yeah
Yeah!
without us hoots (Why are the workers calling themselves ‘hoots’ here?)
those extra-boots (Are the ‘extra-boots’ the artists (like spare leg-ends) who produce nothing of use? If so I think I’m getting it and the irony.)
would be
No Where
Am I close or miles off?

Cheers,

Tristan

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Re: The Extra-Boot (V3)

Post by bjondon » Sat Jan 12, 2019 8:48 pm

Thanks for coming back Tristan.
'donned the boot' in S3 refers to
attempting a creative career.
The poem is essentially about the realisation
that there is always a deep cultural context
for all good art and you don't have to be a star
to contribute to that culture.

Ray, on the 'grounded' v 'scattered' question, I was
pursuing the image of a circus ring ('kicked the dust';'seen the show')
and liked that image of all the 'boots' who didn't make it lying
scattered around with just one (the extra-boot) airborne.
'grounded' has that connotation of a 'parental' lock-down,
but I agree my image could be clarified.
Jules
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Re: The Extra-Boot (V3)

Post by Firebird » Sat Jan 12, 2019 9:48 pm

'donned the boot' in S3 refers to
attempting a creative career.
Sorry Jules, I should have noticed that. I like the sentiment of your explanation of the poem. I’ll have a think now and see if I can match it up to the poem. I’m sure I’m just being slow.

Cheers,

Tristan

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