From the Pomposity to the Dogends of Tradition

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From the Pomposity to the Dogends of Tradition

Postby Firebird » Wed Jul 11, 2018 10:15 pm

That’s not a poem;
it doesn’t even rhyme.
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Re: From the Pomposity to the Dogends of Tradition

Postby Antcliff » Thu Jul 12, 2018 11:48 am

Greetings

It happens once in while: I rather prefer the title to the poem. :D You are in good company. I quite often like the titles of Wallace Stevens poems more than the poem.

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Re: From the Pomposity to the Dogends of Tradition

Postby Firebird » Thu Jul 12, 2018 4:24 pm

Hi Seth, good to see you back.

Pleased you liked the title. I was thinking of cutting it though and having the first line as the title.


That's not a poem

it doesn't even rhyme.



A much shorter poem but more effective I think. And I slightly prefer the new title as it's more provocative.

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Re: From the Pomposity to the Dogends of Tradition

Postby JJWilliamson » Fri Jul 13, 2018 8:19 am

It's a very common expression, though, Tristan.

The title is highly entertaining and the idea is good, though.

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Re: From the Pomposity to the Dogends of Tradition

Postby Antcliff » Fri Jul 13, 2018 9:45 am

"A much shorter poem but more effective I think. And I slightly prefer the new title as it's more provocative."

I'm not sure who it is that would be provoked. It feels a bit like a swipe at a strawman these days. It feels a bit like this poem?


That is not Earth

it is round


Bring back the Dogends of Tradition, I say. Let them do battle with the Catends of Modernity!

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Re: From the Pomposity to the Dogends of Tradition

Postby Firebird » Fri Jul 13, 2018 6:53 pm

JJ, glad you liked the title.

Title reinstated Seth.

Thanks both!

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Re: From the Pomposity to the Dogends of Tradition

Postby churinga » Fri Jul 13, 2018 9:17 pm

From the
pomposity
to the
dogerends of tradition.

Now it rhymes. :roll:
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Re: From the Pomposity to the Dogends of Tradition

Postby the stranger » Fri Jul 13, 2018 11:17 pm

The beauty of PG is that you can post a poem like this, of quite obvious self-indulgence and have lovely polite replies.

We've all done it, everyone.

A pound title, backed-up by a child's introspection

Nice.
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Re: From the Pomposity to the Dogends of Tradition

Postby Firebird » Sat Jul 14, 2018 9:16 am

Hi Stranger,

I think that's probably a fair enough view on this poem.

Thanks for popping by.

Cheers,

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