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by arunansu
Wed Jan 27, 2010 4:10 am
Forum: Post-a-Poem (Beginners)
Topic: Victims Cherita
Replies: 14
Views: 1629

Re: Victims Cherita

... Dear Elphin, Thank you so much for the help. As regards your question, I can say you have asked the wrong person! Smiles. I personally feel Tanka, Cherita etc. they are still evolving. English Tanka are a lot different from the Japanese ones. There's no strict syllable order as 5-7-5-7-7, as it ...
by David
Mon Jan 25, 2010 7:38 pm
Forum: Post-a-Poem (Beginners)
Topic: Victims Cherita
Replies: 14
Views: 1629

Re: Victims Cherita

If I have one comment about many of these forms - cherita, tanka etc - it is that they seem to dispense with pronouns or prepositions. Do you think this is to do with differences of syntax in the languages in which they were originated? It's the ...
by Arian
Mon Jan 25, 2010 7:35 pm
Forum: Post-a-Poem (Beginners)
Topic: Victims Cherita
Replies: 14
Views: 1629

Re: Victims Cherita

Hi aru like David, I needed to be educated on the form, so I read your notes. Interesting, thanks. And it seems that your piece fits the theoretical bill very well - certainly in terms of points (1) and (2). I think I had to persuade myself a bit of its suggestive qualities. Putting the demands of t...
by Elphin
Mon Jan 25, 2010 4:50 pm
Forum: Post-a-Poem (Beginners)
Topic: Victims Cherita
Replies: 14
Views: 1629

Re: Victims Cherita

Arun I took like this, in particular the juxtaposition of the disaster and the playfulness. If I have one comment about many of these forms - cherita, tanka etc - it is that they seem to dispense with articles, pronouns or prepositions. Do you think this is to do with differences of syntax in ...
by arunansu
Mon Jan 25, 2010 2:30 pm
Forum: Post-a-Poem (Beginners)
Topic: Victims Cherita
Replies: 14
Views: 1629

Re: Victims Cherita

Oh, Suzanne and Anniecat, thanks to you people for the "great teacher". Not many thinks the same. Lol.
by anniecat
Sun Jan 24, 2010 5:56 pm
Forum: Post-a-Poem (Beginners)
Topic: Victims Cherita
Replies: 14
Views: 1629

Re: Victims Cherita

Thanks for the details of the form. You have done a good job of following it on this poem.
I think we should all get independent study credits for how much you teach us.



So right Suzanne...Arun is a great teacher.
by Suzanne
Sun Jan 24, 2010 5:41 pm
Forum: Post-a-Poem (Beginners)
Topic: Victims Cherita
Replies: 14
Views: 1629

Re: Victims Cherita

Aru,

Thanks for the details of the form. You have done a good job of following it on this poem.
I think we should all get independent study credits for how much you teach us.

I thought the pup was a great twist to the image. It was playful in the chaotic scene. Nice.

Suzanne
by David
Sun Jan 24, 2010 10:24 am
Forum: Post-a-Poem (Beginners)
Topic: Victims Cherita
Replies: 14
Views: 1629

Re: Victims Cherita

Ta, aru. That's my homework sorted out!
by arunansu
Sun Jan 24, 2010 10:23 am
Forum: Post-a-Poem (Beginners)
Topic: Victims Cherita
Replies: 14
Views: 1629

Re: Victims Cherita

Thanks David, Re Cherita : Cherita is the Malay word for story or tale. A Cherita consists of a single stanza of a one-line verse, followed by a two-line verse, and then finishing with a three-line verse. It can either be written ...
by David
Sun Jan 24, 2010 10:09 am
Forum: Post-a-Poem (Beginners)
Topic: Victims Cherita
Replies: 14
Views: 1629

Re: Victims Cherita

Hi aru,

I don't know much about cheritas. It seems to be a 1-2-3 line rule, but are there any rules about line lengths?

And what poetic tradition do they come out of? It's obviously a form that appeals to you.
by arunansu
Sun Jan 24, 2010 8:27 am
Forum: Post-a-Poem (Beginners)
Topic: Victims Cherita
Replies: 14
Views: 1629

Re: Victims Cherita

Thanks Firefly for your reply and time. Smiles.
by firefly
Sun Jan 24, 2010 1:25 am
Forum: Post-a-Poem (Beginners)
Topic: Victims Cherita
Replies: 14
Views: 1629

Re: Victims Cherita

Hello arunansu, once again you have painted a lovely scene with your words. You have captured a moment beautifully and conveyed it to the reader really well. (I like the 'juggles with them' line too!) The simple language you've used works well for me. Why complicate a simple scene with 'heavy' words...
by arunansu
Sat Jan 23, 2010 4:59 am
Forum: Post-a-Poem (Beginners)
Topic: Victims Cherita
Replies: 14
Views: 1629

Re: Victims Cherita

Here's the link for banyan leaves:

http://www.nepalvista.com/features/natu ... l-leaf.jpg

Thanks for being here, Anniecat. Smiles.
by anniecat
Sat Jan 23, 2010 4:48 am
Forum: Post-a-Poem (Beginners)
Topic: Victims Cherita
Replies: 14
Views: 1629

Re: Victims Cherita

I do not know what banyan leaves are but what a fun vision and i like the juggling...nice AC
by arunansu
Sat Jan 23, 2010 4:38 am
Forum: Post-a-Poem (Beginners)
Topic: Victims Cherita
Replies: 14
Views: 1629

Victims Cherita

wind grabs banyan leaves

juggles then tosses them
along the pavement

a curious pup
scurries after
the new playthings
by arunansu
Fri Jan 22, 2010 4:27 am
Forum: Post-a-Poem (Beginners)
Topic: Departure Cherita
Replies: 6
Views: 631

Re: Departure Cherita

Mesmie, I like your "slug-like" train! The poem would read much better with that. However, at this moment I've made just one change. Thanks for penning down your thoughts on this one.
by mesmie
Thu Jan 21, 2010 5:15 pm
Forum: Post-a-Poem (Beginners)
Topic: Departure Cherita
Replies: 6
Views: 631

Re: Departure Cherita

hello Aru :) sip the morning..how lovely to do that. I enjoyed your shared vision except for the word sluggishly..my tongue couldn't come to terms with it :lol: especially with the 'sets off' before. Perhaps 'My train is sluggish'? But all the same you have again captured the moment and I do like th...
by arunansu
Thu Jan 21, 2010 3:30 pm
Forum: Post-a-Poem (Beginners)
Topic: Departure Cherita
Replies: 6
Views: 631

Re: Departure Cherita

Thanks for being here and replying, Anniecat.
by anniecat
Thu Jan 21, 2010 12:17 pm
Forum: Post-a-Poem (Beginners)
Topic: Departure Cherita
Replies: 6
Views: 631

Re: Departure Cherita

Again those beautiful warming visions Arunansu, thank you :D
by arunansu
Thu Jan 21, 2010 11:53 am
Forum: Post-a-Poem (Beginners)
Topic: Departure Cherita
Replies: 6
Views: 631

Re: Departure Cherita

Thank you, Lovely, you are most welcome! Smiles.
by Lovely
Thu Jan 21, 2010 8:30 am
Forum: Post-a-Poem (Beginners)
Topic: Departure Cherita
Replies: 6
Views: 631

Re: Departure Cherita

This is deep. Aru, may I come wiith you.
by arunansu
Thu Jan 21, 2010 4:46 am
Forum: Post-a-Poem (Beginners)
Topic: Departure Cherita
Replies: 6
Views: 631

Departure Cherita

my train sets off

the platform moves backward
i flip through a guidebook

sun follows me
behind a mangrove wall
i sip the morning
by arunansu
Sun Jan 17, 2010 7:01 am
Forum: Post-a-Poem (Beginners)
Topic: Temple Cherita
Replies: 9
Views: 988

Re: Temple Cherita

Thanks for visiting here, Mesmie. Smiles.
by mesmie
Sat Jan 16, 2010 3:11 pm
Forum: Post-a-Poem (Beginners)
Topic: Temple Cherita
Replies: 9
Views: 988

Re: Temple Cherita

hello Aru :)

Oh I could see her!
What a pleasure to be reading you again.
Lovely metaphor and an interesting format too..

mes..
by arunansu
Sat Jan 16, 2010 2:56 pm
Forum: Post-a-Poem (Beginners)
Topic: Temple Cherita
Replies: 9
Views: 988

Re: Temple Cherita

Thank you AnnieCat. Thanks Gypsy Cake.