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by dedalus
Sun Nov 30, 2014 10:53 pm
Forum: Post-a-Poem (Experienced)
Topic: Wirra
Replies: 21
Views: 1779

Re: Wirra

Chipping back in, I should think! Interesting sort of theme.
by dedalus
Sun Nov 30, 2014 2:17 am
Forum: Post-a-Poem (Experienced)
Topic: Boola boola
Replies: 4
Views: 498

Re: Boola boola

OK, bynteothr! Glad you liked it, or at least most of it. I'm thinking of scrapping the ending to finish with the Purgatory line, but it seems abrupt. You are the second person urging me to get rid of the last stanza, so obviously it rather jangles. Thanks for the comments.
by dedalus
Sat Nov 29, 2014 8:26 am
Forum: Post-a-Poem (Experienced)
Topic: Wirra
Replies: 21
Views: 1779

Re: Wirra

You're veering off the tracks with this one. Bit like me, in fact.
by dedalus
Sat Nov 29, 2014 8:21 am
Forum: Post-a-Poem (Experienced)
Topic: Drone - another revision
Replies: 20
Views: 1402

Re: Drone - another revision

root(s) ... ?
by dedalus
Sat Nov 29, 2014 12:13 am
Forum: Post-a-Poem (Experienced)
Topic: Boola boola
Replies: 4
Views: 498

Re: Boola boola

Thanks, Ben. Typos cleaned.
by dedalus
Fri Nov 28, 2014 7:51 am
Forum: Post-a-Poem (Experienced)
Topic: Boola boola
Replies: 4
Views: 498

Boola boola

Womble wingle, plural single, Halloo, halla, hello! When I talk to The Hollybocks among the rocks, They chorus “Dinga, dingle”. Such upright poise and cheerful noise! Then I walk along (as I know you do) and burst into a sudden song Concerning the wake of Dublin Fingal. Ballyboo, ballyram. And thank...
by dedalus
Fri Nov 28, 2014 7:42 am
Forum: Post-a-Poem (Experienced)
Topic: The Propositions Expressible As Follows Are As Follows (73*)
Replies: 7
Views: 819

Re: The Propositions Expressible As Follows Are As Follows (

Loved it! Flat earth forever. Shake your tassels.
by dedalus
Fri Nov 28, 2014 7:39 am
Forum: Post-a-Poem (Experienced)
Topic: Elements
Replies: 14
Views: 1602

Re: Elements

Excellent flow, except (maybe) for "Air". You might need to look at that again..
by dedalus
Fri Nov 28, 2014 7:33 am
Forum: Post-a-Poem (Experienced)
Topic: Drone - another revision
Replies: 20
Views: 1402

Re: Drone - a revision

Too much boom. Try "camouflaging the roof(s)". It doesn't really help, though.
by dedalus
Fri Nov 28, 2014 7:24 am
Forum: Post-a-Poem (Experienced)
Topic: Leaving Kansas- please listen
Replies: 19
Views: 1472

Re: Leaving Kansas

Pitch, unhitch ... I liked that!
I'd leave Kansas as soon as I could, not that I ever lived there.
by dedalus
Wed Nov 19, 2014 6:16 am
Forum: Post-a-Poem (Experienced)
Topic: Intimations of Mortality
Replies: 8
Views: 840

Re: Intimations of Mortality

Dear Ros, I have been often charged with writing "telly" poems, little better than snippets of prose artfully spaced across the breadth of the page in easily readable lines. I love the comparative brevity of the form, which allows one to move on to a completely different theme in a matter of days, i...
by dedalus
Tue Nov 18, 2014 12:57 am
Forum: Post-a-Poem (Experienced)
Topic: Intimations of Mortality
Replies: 8
Views: 840

Re: Intimations of Mortality

Thanks for the comment, Ray. The lack of precision is entirely deliberate. I was thinking of Mr. Campbell-Bannerman and the Liberals of 1907!
by dedalus
Mon Nov 17, 2014 2:47 am
Forum: Post-a-Poem (Experienced)
Topic: Intimations of Mortality
Replies: 8
Views: 840

Intimations of Mortality

I step out the door of 17 Warburton Crescent and I see the Indian restaaurant before me, and the gates of hell at once on a slope below. “Velcome, sa’ab, ve expect you soon”, sys Amidullah Khan, otherwise known as the late-night corner grocer, and I remember thinking, “Well, naturally, “the devil’s ...
by dedalus
Thu Nov 13, 2014 1:35 am
Forum: Poetry Discussion
Topic: Poems on the theme of the Great War
Replies: 1
Views: 1284

Poems on the theme of the Great War

Note to the Reader: The War of 1914-18 has been something of an obsession with me since I was a child in Dublin and would come across some of the veterans, often in barber shops for some reason, and frequently missing an arm or a leg. They would never talk about it. This collection of older poems fr...
by dedalus
Tue Oct 28, 2014 1:03 am
Forum: Post-a-Poem (Experienced)
Topic: Matsuri
Replies: 2
Views: 561

Re: Matsuri

Where is the 'inn' in? I have been searching but with an obvious lack of Fingerspitzgefuell l for prepositions. There seem to be quite a lot of them! Incidentally, Japanese matsuri have a religious base, generally in the native creed of Shinto, but in my experience they are exuberant noisy affairs w...
by dedalus
Mon Oct 27, 2014 3:13 am
Forum: Post-a-Poem (Experienced)
Topic: Matsuri
Replies: 2
Views: 561

Matsuri

Matsuri, festival, matsuri! Sipping sake by the side of the road, 25-30 years ago, with a Japanese friend, who is earnestly teaching me rude words such as Ba-ka (horse, deer), meaning Fool, and all this long ago but just as yesterday, with a gritty sluggish taste in our cups, and the long grasses wa...
by dedalus
Fri Oct 17, 2014 5:13 am
Forum: Post-a-Poem (Experienced)
Topic: Tonkin
Replies: 3
Views: 658

Re: Tonkin

You are right.

"Feel real free
as life continues to be ..."

All the very best,
dedalus (Brendan)
by dedalus
Wed Oct 15, 2014 6:35 am
Forum: Post-a-Poem (Experienced)
Topic: Cochin
Replies: 3
Views: 581

Re: Cochin

Thanks for the comment. Well, I'm a great believer in clichés since this seems to be the way most people speak to one another. I recognise the need for poetry to be fresh and even alarming in its expression but I rarely stray too far from the vernacular.
by dedalus
Sun Oct 12, 2014 11:52 pm
Forum: Post-a-Poem (Experienced)
Topic: Cochin
Replies: 3
Views: 581

Cochin

You live in my heart, you live in my mind, and when last night, with wine taken, I called to you, you turned away. The sun by day is king, and the moon by evening draws young lovers together, healing the wounds of the passing hours. They say if you pray at this shrine three times, all will be well; ...
by dedalus
Sat Oct 11, 2014 7:16 am
Forum: Hello, Good Evening and Welcome
Topic: Cochin
Replies: 3
Views: 1848

Re: Cochin

Not a translation, David, just an archaic sort of poem! In any case it's always good manners to indicate if one is translating or not,

Cheers, Bren
by dedalus
Fri Oct 10, 2014 5:58 am
Forum: Hello, Good Evening and Welcome
Topic: Cochin
Replies: 3
Views: 1848

Cochin

wrong place
by dedalus
Mon Oct 06, 2014 7:19 am
Forum: Post-a-Poem (Experienced)
Topic: Annam
Replies: 3
Views: 645

Annam

There is no life and moving along, there is no laughter, no happy song. Let me look at you. Over the skies of our city fly Japanese bombers who are trying to kill us. Below we sit with our Singapore Slings at the bar in the Raffles Hotel: never mind, my darling, all is well! These slant-eyed people,...
by dedalus
Fri Oct 03, 2014 2:04 am
Forum: Post-a-Poem (Experienced)
Topic: Tonkin
Replies: 3
Views: 658

Tonkin

Feel real free
as life continues to be,
jolts and stops and starts,
pounding at our hearts.
And in the end you’ll see
pleasure mingle with apathy
as the globe turns round and round.
The sun rises up in the morning,
and every truth and belief we’ve found
dissolves with each day's dawning.
by dedalus
Thu Oct 02, 2014 3:40 am
Forum: Post-a-Poem (Experienced)
Topic: On the Hill of Howth
Replies: 4
Views: 644

Re: On the Hill of Howth

Thanks, David. I'll reconsider the basket weaving.
Cheers, Bren
by dedalus
Sat Sep 27, 2014 5:23 am
Forum: Post-a-Poem (Experienced)
Topic: The Books We Read (Part One)
Replies: 3
Views: 564

Re: The Books We Read (Part One)

Never mind the books, I should write a poem about the lunch!!