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by dedalus
Mon Jun 01, 2015 10:36 pm
Forum: Post-a-Poem (Experienced)
Topic: memories in half tone
Replies: 3
Views: 552

Re: memories in half tone

Thanks. It's the best I've done for a while.
by dedalus
Sat May 30, 2015 1:28 am
Forum: Post-a-Poem (Experienced)
Topic: memories in half tone
Replies: 3
Views: 552

memories in half tone

I love to bound around the countries of Southeast Asia, which are so perfectly, weirdly, idiotically designed for chase and concealment. Maugham gets it exactly right when he follows one of his colonial types from harbour to harbour along the coast, in the knowledge there is no ecape, not now, not t...
by dedalus
Fri May 29, 2015 8:29 am
Forum: Post-a-Poem (Experienced)
Topic: Electric Light Behind Closed Doors
Replies: 2
Views: 389

Re: Electric Light Behind Closed Doors

Not so difficult, dear fellow. If the phone is held in his right hand it will more than likely be on his right side between right hand and right knee unless mentioned again. The 'other side' refers to the opposite of this which would be his left-hand side.
by dedalus
Fri May 29, 2015 12:40 am
Forum: Post-a-Poem (Experienced)
Topic: Electric Light Behind Closed Doors
Replies: 2
Views: 389

Electric Light Behind Closed Doors

He sits in a pool of lamplight by the door
with telephone gripped between hand and knee,
waiting for the damned thing to ring.

On a table at his other side
lies the crumpled telegram:
"It is with deep regret I write to inform you ...."
by dedalus
Wed May 27, 2015 5:30 am
Forum: Post-a-Poem (Experienced)
Topic: Turn-of-the-year-melodies
Replies: 4
Views: 665

Re: Turn-of-the-year-melodies

I decided to write something rather musical with attention to rhythms which you picked up on immediately. As to the meaning, it's still rather vague ....
by dedalus
Tue May 26, 2015 5:22 am
Forum: Post-a-Poem (Experienced)
Topic: Elegy to Rab ( Jan 1958-July 2004)[reversion 1]
Replies: 30
Views: 3093

Re: Elegy to Rab (1958-2004)

A woderful piece even without/ but made better by the attention to craft.
- Brendan
by dedalus
Mon May 25, 2015 9:36 am
Forum: Post-a-Poem (Experienced)
Topic: Turn-of-the-year-melodies
Replies: 4
Views: 665

Turn-of-the-year-melodies

When the air is cold and the seas are rough, we spend more time, as a rule, more time than with any other stuff, on Fingerspitzgefuehl. At an abrupt break in the land (where the young ragge´d trees now stand) a rising, falling moan can be heard, an echo to every sound and word. And it was there I ca...
by dedalus
Mon May 25, 2015 9:20 am
Forum: Post-a-Poem (Experienced)
Topic: Kaiser Wilhelm in Doorn
Replies: 10
Views: 1093

Re: Kaiser Wilhelm in Doorn

The Kaiser in Doorn
is like the Bard of Man:
adrift on the summer morn,
detain him if you can.

-- Ah, go on !
Bren
by dedalus
Sun May 24, 2015 8:18 am
Forum: Post-a-Poem (Experienced)
Topic: Not now
Replies: 11
Views: 1236

Re: Not now

I like parts of this very much. Here is a list of certain things -apparently random - that set the stage for things that haven't happened yet, that may happen, or seem more likely to happen. It's revising for exams that open doors to more (dredful prospect. I still have the occasional nightmare dati...
by dedalus
Mon Jan 19, 2015 2:14 am
Forum: Post-a-Poem (Experienced)
Topic: Palin
Replies: 3
Views: 472

Re: Palin

Kind words, David. This one was rather fun to write but is disappearing, I fear, without trace. Hope all goes well with you. I am coming to terms with my new head rug but find I couldn't be bothered wearing it every day. I can't really put any blame on my wife as she was no doubt sick and tired at g...
by dedalus
Tue Jan 13, 2015 3:11 am
Forum: Post-a-Poem (Experienced)
Topic: Palin
Replies: 3
Views: 472

Palin

Lovely is the love that runs over shallow, gurgling fast-flowing streams, and forever I see you in my dreams from this lonely prison cell. This prison is warm and comfortable with a fire and many books on shelves. Like others, I think upon many things, but mostly we think upon ourselves. I am so sor...
by dedalus
Tue Dec 16, 2014 6:40 am
Forum: Post-a-Poem (Beginners)
Topic: In the Beginning
Replies: 0
Views: 1046

In the Beginning

I n the Beginning was the Word, But this Bible claim is clearly absurd, Since it cannot ever hope to explain The pulse of the previous generations. Our prayers, nonsense, and venerations arise in a subsequent world of make-believe in which all that we can ever conceive is based on the foreplay of th...
by dedalus
Wed Dec 10, 2014 11:21 pm
Forum: Post-a-Poem (Experienced)
Topic: Mr. Pauncey-Jones
Replies: 10
Views: 917

Re: Mr. Pauncey-Jones

Hi Ben, Thanks for the lengthy comments which are much appreciated even when critical. I don't believe in originality at every turn, i.e. the fresh and original approach at all costs, because often the life or personality the narrator is attempting to depict has its repetitive and somewhat shabby si...
by dedalus
Wed Dec 10, 2014 4:59 am
Forum: Post-a-Poem (Experienced)
Topic: Mr. Pauncey-Jones
Replies: 10
Views: 917

Re: Mr. Pauncey-Jones

Thanks, Ray. I hadn't noticed the plethora of "I's" before, but they sprang out at me after reading your comment.
by dedalus
Mon Dec 08, 2014 2:11 am
Forum: Post-a-Poem (Experienced)
Topic: Mr. Pauncey-Jones
Replies: 10
Views: 917

Re: Mr. Pauncey-Jones

I tend to agree with the latest comments and perhaps should have had Mr. PJ prancing before the mirror in ladies' clothing or potting young children from his bedroom window with a pellet rifle. Nevertheless, I decided to play it straight to underline the apathy and relative alienation. I found the b...
by dedalus
Sun Dec 07, 2014 8:37 am
Forum: Post-a-Poem (Experienced)
Topic: Mr. Pauncey-Jones
Replies: 10
Views: 917

Re: Mr. Pauncey-Jones

I don't really worry, but I can't help thinking what a pox these stand-aside people really are in the public life of any society. I don't think it makes very much difference overall , but one is drawn to wonder why they choose to step aside ... although Oxford graduates in the 1930s might probably h...
by dedalus
Sun Dec 07, 2014 7:39 am
Forum: Post-a-Poem (Experienced)
Topic: Mr. Pauncey-Jones
Replies: 10
Views: 917

Mr. Pauncey-Jones

You would not believe the lack of love received when I was a lonely kid. Now I have a proper job and wear a tailored suit: but cannot forget what people did. I never married, as I could not discover love for others. Hence I live alone with my roses.. In addition, I dislike children. They are frequen...
by dedalus
Sat Dec 06, 2014 1:09 am
Forum: Post-a-Poem (Experienced)
Topic: Intimations of Mortality
Replies: 8
Views: 840

Re: Intimations of Mortality

Steve ... Sorry for the delay in replying. The "gates of hell" phrase had no intentional reference to Rodin, but was literally meant as the real entrance to a real hell. I've seen Rodin's work, btw, and was rather bowled over by it, as I'm sure HE intended! Ben ... The opening of the "child" lines w...
by dedalus
Fri Dec 05, 2014 12:00 am
Forum: Post-a-Poem (Experienced)
Topic: A Day Forever England
Replies: 5
Views: 646

Re: A Day Forever England

Helpful comments. I'm going to have to think about this a little more.
by dedalus
Tue Dec 02, 2014 11:29 pm
Forum: Post-a-Poem (Experienced)
Topic: A Day Forever England
Replies: 5
Views: 646

Re: A Day Forever England

I agree that the puny/ uni rhyme is weak but I don't seem able to tweak the lines to keep the sequence alive. In consequence I have dropped the stanza entirely which now seems to give the piece a truncated appearance.Perhaps I should come up with a completely new stanza as a replacement: any ideas?
by dedalus
Tue Dec 02, 2014 2:20 am
Forum: Post-a-Poem (Experienced)
Topic: Oh Lord, Please Let Me Be Misunderstood (76/101*)
Replies: 4
Views: 626

Re: Oh Lord, Please Let Me Be Misunderstood (76/101*)

pennies fell from trousers
into the ripe and rotting ground.
Eye-opening! Maybe you should rewrite the poem around these brilliant lines.
by dedalus
Tue Dec 02, 2014 2:16 am
Forum: Post-a-Poem (Experienced)
Topic: Second stage
Replies: 12
Views: 999

Re: Second stage

Increbibly flexible jumps of somewhat related language images, but what is the connection with fatherhood? Also. Satsuma is an old name for a district in southern Kyushu, Japan. now Kagoshima. It's also a kind of sweet potato.
by dedalus
Tue Dec 02, 2014 2:07 am
Forum: Post-a-Poem (Experienced)
Topic: A Cartography of Indigo
Replies: 6
Views: 719

Re: A Cartography of Indigo

Wonderful language, but where are we going? Where, I should say, are you taking us? To a place where we hold our breath under water? How long can that last ....
by dedalus
Tue Dec 02, 2014 2:02 am
Forum: Post-a-Poem (Experienced)
Topic: Size Eight Still / revision 4
Replies: 39
Views: 3543

Re: Size Eight Still

I think 'churlish' fits well, since it was then not now. A very evocative rather memory-laden piece which I thought was very finely done. Kudos, LUKE!!

Cheers, Bren
by dedalus
Tue Dec 02, 2014 1:43 am
Forum: Post-a-Poem (Experienced)
Topic: A Day Forever England
Replies: 5
Views: 646

A Day Forever England

A little rill runs by this hidden hill And we stretch ourselves under summer sun; We lazily joke and talk our fill, Young men whose lives have just begun. The news is bad yet we don’t feel sad, For what difference can it make to us? The wasps and midges drive us mad, But shortly we’ll go home by bus...