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by David
Sat Aug 03, 2019 11:07 am
Forum: Post-a-Poem (Experienced)
Topic: Contrary Head revisited
Replies: 10
Views: 1144

Re: Contrary Head revisited

I thought I'd revisit this to see if I could get something a bit different out of it. The original is here: http://www.poetsgraves.co.uk/forum/viewtopic.php?f=3&t=22869

(Does anyone know how to do hyperlinks here now?)
by David
Sat Aug 03, 2019 11:05 am
Forum: Post-a-Poem (Experienced)
Topic: Contrary Head revisited
Replies: 10
Views: 1144

Contrary Head revisited

When I am on my last legs, if it is not too much trouble, carry me out to Contrary Head and prop me up, so that I can look south to the Calf, island rich in abandoned lighthouses and jaunty bird life, and I will try to slip away, quietly, without any fuss, as the tide ebbs. I could do worse than be ...
by David
Thu Aug 01, 2019 7:07 pm
Forum: Poetry Discussion
Topic: Elphs Echoes
Replies: 5
Views: 2525

Re: Elphs Echoes

Yes, very good. I think I'd like it better without the Dylan interludes, though.

Cheers

David
by David
Thu Aug 01, 2019 6:49 pm
Forum: Poetry Discussion
Topic: Leaf's wreaths
Replies: 22
Views: 5237

Re: Leaf's wreaths

However, between work tasks today I managed to look at 'Summer Farm' again, trying to work out the meter. It seems that the first, second, and fourth lines of each stanza have five beats, while the third has... four? :? (not sure) Any guidance on meter will be gratefully received! Leaf Yes, exactly...
by David
Thu Aug 01, 2019 3:28 pm
Forum: Poetry Discussion
Topic: Leaf's wreaths
Replies: 22
Views: 5237

Re: Leaf's wreaths

In the meantime, today an American friend introduced me to NM's 'By Achmelvich Bridge'. I enjoyed reading that too. It includes 'A floating owl' :>) Best wishes, Leaf Yes! Another excellent one, which I have just discovered too, as I make my way slowly - and haphazardly - through the Collected Poem...
by David
Wed Jul 31, 2019 6:25 pm
Forum: Post-a-Poem (Beginners)
Topic: 15 Years On (V3)
Replies: 8
Views: 975

Re: Returning after 15 Years to Lydgate Park

I was puzzled by the first two lines at first, but now I think you are saying that you moved away from the area, so that your local park wasn't Lydgate any more (and by doing so met the future mother of your three-year-old). It does seem a slightly confusing way of putting it. And even more so if I ...
by David
Wed Jul 31, 2019 4:57 pm
Forum: Post-a-Poem (Experienced)
Topic: (SHA 5) The Stretcher Bearers Wore Grey (v2)
Replies: 24
Views: 2715

Re: (SHA 5) The Stretcher Bearers Wore Grey (v2)

Okay, feldgrau , so literally field-grey ... battlefield-grey? One of those interesting words - or terms - for which we have no equivalent in English. (We do say battleship-grey, of course - but not really the same thing.) I think you're better off with simply wearing grey - Casablanca or not. You s...
by David
Tue Jul 30, 2019 6:53 pm
Forum: Poetry Discussion
Topic: Leaf's wreaths
Replies: 22
Views: 5237

Re: Leaf's wreaths

In the meantime, today an American friend introduced me to NM's 'By Achmelvich Bridge'. I enjoyed reading that too. It includes 'A floating owl' :>) Best wishes, Leaf Yes! Another excellent one, which I have just discovered too, as I make my way slowly - and haphazardly - through the Collected Poems.
by David
Tue Jul 30, 2019 6:51 pm
Forum: Post-a-Poem (Experienced)
Topic: When Happy He Would Drool (v1b)
Replies: 31
Views: 2685

Re: When Happy He Would Drool

I haven't engaged with this poem until now, having been seriously deterred by the title, but now ... I get it. I think the poem's very good. Very touching, and just right, really. The title itself, now I understand it, seems just about perfect. The last three lines, in particular, are excellent, alt...
by David
Tue Jul 30, 2019 6:07 pm
Forum: Post-a-Poem (Experienced)
Topic: (SHA 5) The Stretcher Bearers Wore Grey (v2)
Replies: 24
Views: 2715

Re: (SHA 5) The Stretcher Bearers Wore Grey (v2)

. Hi David, well that's a big spanner thrown in the works! Seems there's a distinction to be made between 'Stretcher Bearers' (medical/trained) and 'Carrying Parties' (non-medical) - so I think this should be 'The Carrying Party Wore Grey'. Thanks. . News to me too! I think you're right about the c...
by David
Tue Jul 30, 2019 5:17 pm
Forum: Post-a-Poem (Experienced)
Topic: (SHA 6) Move Along Now (v2)
Replies: 27
Views: 2255

Re: (SHA 6) Move Along Now (v2)

NotQuiteSure wrote:
Tue Jul 30, 2019 5:09 pm
David wrote:
Tue Jul 30, 2019 4:47 pm
ill manners
No, not you, me. I'd totally forgotten to thank Eira, hence unrelated.

Regards, Not

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I didn't think it was me! Heavens, that would be ... unthinkable. As I've just proved.
by David
Tue Jul 30, 2019 5:09 pm
Forum: Post-a-Poem (Experienced)
Topic: (SHA 5) The Stretcher Bearers Wore Grey (v2)
Replies: 24
Views: 2715

Re: (SHA 5) The Stretcher Bearers Wore Grey (v2)

Okay, I like this one. But the problem I think you have here is of getting the information about the German stretcher bearers into the poem (or the title), because - and maybe this is just me - I took the revised poem to mean that somehow it was conchies' blood that was being wiped off the bayonets,...
by David
Tue Jul 30, 2019 4:47 pm
Forum: Post-a-Poem (Experienced)
Topic: (SHA 6) Move Along Now (v2)
Replies: 27
Views: 2255

Re: (SHA 6) Move Along Now (v2)

NotQuiteSure wrote:
Tue Jul 30, 2019 11:00 am
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David wrote:
Mon Jul 29, 2019 6:25 pm
So if I search for SHA 4 and SHA 5 I will find them?
Yep,
though you have commented on SHA4 :)
(recently bumped due to unrelated ill-manners)
So I have! But I don't remember the ill manners at all.

Okay, will have a look at SHA 5.
by David
Mon Jul 29, 2019 7:07 pm
Forum: Poetry Discussion
Topic: Leaf's wreaths
Replies: 22
Views: 5237

Re: Leaf's wreaths

This is a nice idea, Leaf. I thought you might have followed the form of MacCaig's poem, but you haven't. In form, and tone, it is a very different thing. You - or, I suppose, I - put down his poem thinking "Wow, what just happened there?" With your poem I think "Aah. A little yellow chick. Cute." H...
by David
Mon Jul 29, 2019 6:25 pm
Forum: Post-a-Poem (Experienced)
Topic: (SHA 6) Move Along Now (v2)
Replies: 27
Views: 2255

Re: (SHA 6) Move Along Now

What is SHA 6? I expect I should probably know. Been a while, but I refer you back to https://www.poetsgraves.co.uk/forum/viewtopic.php?f=3&t=23761 Ah yes. I remember now. I liked them. I don't like this one as much, but I think it could work well in a series. (So if I search for SHA 4 and SHA 5 I ...
by David
Sat Jul 27, 2019 9:46 pm
Forum: Post-a-Poem (Experienced)
Topic: The Activist
Replies: 11
Views: 1078

Re: The Activist

I can only repeat my previous comment.
by David
Sat Jul 27, 2019 6:48 pm
Forum: Post-a-Poem (Experienced)
Topic: The Activist
Replies: 11
Views: 1078

Re: The Activist

Sometimes a poem just doesn't engender as much interest as we expect, Perry - or as much as we think it deserves. We've all experienced that. You just have to let it go, gracefully. Or do I mean graciously? I'm not sure.

David
by David
Sat Jul 27, 2019 5:01 pm
Forum: Post-a-Poem (Experienced)
Topic: (SHA 6) Move Along Now (v2)
Replies: 27
Views: 2255

Re: (SHA 6) Move Along Now

What is SHA 6? I expect I should probably know.
by David
Fri Jul 26, 2019 7:34 pm
Forum: Post-a-Poem (Beginners)
Topic: Epistle to Ms Austen
Replies: 22
Views: 1806

Re: Epistle to Ms Austen

Macavity wrote:
Fri Jul 26, 2019 6:33 pm
The power of google! :lol: Actually, any food referencing is very Austen...dining is always in the plot...as are misunderstandings...but I agree the expression is more Mac than Austen :)
And I'm a fan of both.
by David
Fri Jul 26, 2019 5:23 pm
Forum: Post-a-Poem (Experienced)
Topic: Serendipity-doodah
Replies: 21
Views: 1903

Re: Serendipity-doodah

Thanks Tristan. Some stuff to think about there.

Cheers

David
by David
Fri Jul 26, 2019 5:00 pm
Forum: Post-a-Poem (Beginners)
Topic: Epistle to Ms Austen
Replies: 22
Views: 1806

Re: Epistle to Ms Austen

I don't want to be too down on "muddles marinate in solitude" - it is, in itself, a likeable turn of phrase - but I would still maintain that it's positively un-Jane-like. Quick online search of the texts: muddles = 0 results, marinate = 0 results, solitude = 55 results (unsurprisingly). Which makes...
by David
Thu Jul 25, 2019 11:38 am
Forum: Post-a-Poem (Experienced)
Topic: Serendipity-doodah
Replies: 21
Views: 1903

Re: Serendipity-doodah

RC, Luke - thank you!

David
by David
Thu Jul 25, 2019 11:18 am
Forum: Poetry Discussion
Topic: Dave's faves
Replies: 15
Views: 3770

Re: Dave's faves

I don't remember that one, Elph. (I assume you still prefer "Elph" here.) But I think it's great.

Perhaps we should all write NM tribute poems.

David
by David
Tue Jul 23, 2019 5:17 pm
Forum: Post-a-Poem (Beginners)
Topic: Sincerly, Your Ex-Boyfriend (Some Swearing,)
Replies: 16
Views: 1626

Re: Sincerly, Your Ex-Boyfriend (Some Swearing,)

I'm going to let this thread have a nice lie-down in a quiet room.