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by twoleftfeet
Wed Jun 19, 2019 11:06 am
Forum: Post-a-Poem (Experienced)
Topic: Arousing Variations
Replies: 16
Views: 1779

Re: Arousing Variations

Perry wrote:
Wed Jun 19, 2019 9:41 am
In fact, some of the language is so obviously sexist that it strikes me as nauseating (e.g., "languorously, all limb lovely"). What you are describing in the poem is a vane woman who behaves self-consciously.
I strongly suspect that you are the only person on this forum who thinks this,Perry.
by twoleftfeet
Tue Jun 18, 2019 2:34 pm
Forum: Post-a-Poem (Experienced)
Topic: Retirement
Replies: 15
Views: 1140

Re: Retirement

Reading the various critiques from Forum members I do tend to side with Pauline and Perry. There just is not enough in this poem to reward the reader and the three images given - mother and pram, homeless man, and the pigeons plucking - seem a bit "hackneyed" with no interesting detail about them. ...
by twoleftfeet
Mon Jun 17, 2019 7:27 pm
Forum: Forum News and Support
Topic: link
Replies: 2
Views: 4663

Re: link

Mac,
Change "https" to "http" and you should be good to go.

(Well it works for YOUTUBE, anyway, but not on other url's I've tried)

Geoff
by twoleftfeet
Mon Jun 17, 2019 7:03 pm
Forum: Post-a-Poem (Beginners)
Topic: Swirls (version 2)
Replies: 26
Views: 2039

Re: Swirls

^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^
Cracking tune,that (with a cheeky switch to the minor)! I've just been having a strumalong. :)

Great to strumalong to. :)
by twoleftfeet
Mon Jun 17, 2019 9:59 am
Forum: Post-a-Poem (Experienced)
Topic: Wreckage (was Full Wallop)
Replies: 9
Views: 844

Re: Full Wallop

I agree with ton321,RC. Tbh,I struggled with this poem to begin with - the image of a relationship as a dysfunctional building site destroying itself (or perhaps simply the dismantling of a relationship?) seemed bizarre;but after a few reads it began to make some kind of sense. The ending is explosi...
by twoleftfeet
Sun Jun 16, 2019 9:34 am
Forum: Audio Feature
Topic: Arousing Variations
Replies: 6
Views: 1921

Re: Arousing Variations

Hello,RC

I really like your voice.
The bass drone sounds a bit wooly in places where (I'm guessing) the strings are not heavy enough.
What tuning are you using?

Geoff (TLF)
by twoleftfeet
Sat Jun 15, 2019 10:14 pm
Forum: Post-a-Poem (Experienced)
Topic: Strand Street
Replies: 18
Views: 1722

Re: Strand Street

David, What a nostalgia-fest for people of a certain age! L2 - I love "little tributary streets". L6 - "here" or "hear"? Unless in L5 - "Let" is being used in the sense of "permit/allow/grant"? A stumble from me too,I'm afraid. And this is a perfect description of those aerial contraptions - the pul...
by twoleftfeet
Sat Jun 15, 2019 12:47 pm
Forum: Post-a-Poem (Beginners)
Topic: Wounded knees
Replies: 8
Views: 969

Re: Wounded knees

I like it - both violent and wry and beautifully paced - so kind of appropriate. Jules Thanks, bj It started with the idea of "what is the plural of WOUNDED KNEE?" (as in the book "Bury My Heart at Wounded Knee") The answer sounds so silly I couldn't resist an attempt at impersonating Spike Milliga...
by twoleftfeet
Sat Jun 15, 2019 10:58 am
Forum: Post-a-Poem (Experienced)
Topic: Arousing Variations
Replies: 16
Views: 1779

Re: Arousing Variations

I did a musical version of this, but doesn't seem that the site allows audio - shame - poetry is half in the sound of the words. - RC I'd really like to hear that,RC (Could you not stick it on Google Drive and share the link?) EDIT: OOPS! as you were - I see it has now been posted in the AUDIO FEAT...
by twoleftfeet
Fri Jun 14, 2019 8:18 pm
Forum: Music and Song Lyric Discussion
Topic: SANDY DENNY - The Lady (solo version,live)
Replies: 0
Views: 2389

SANDY DENNY - The Lady (solo version,live)

just Sandy and a piano. Achingly beautiful. http://www.youtube.com/watch?v=mUMicF4TQWs THE LADY +++++++++++ The lady she had a silver tongue. For to sing she said, And maybe that's all. Wait for the dawn and we will have that song. When it ends it will seem That we hear silence fall. The lady she ha...
by twoleftfeet
Fri Jun 14, 2019 2:32 pm
Forum: Post-a-Poem (Experienced)
Topic: (SHA 5) The Stretcher Bearers Wore Grey (v2)
Replies: 24
Views: 2677

Re: (SHA 5) The Stretcher Bearers Wore Grey

. Hi T, (Mr.?). The soldier on the stretcher isn't German, (see reply to bjlondon above). It could be something like, Four carried our x, shoulder high , but I wonder if all this confusion wouldn't be more easily remedied by cutting the first three lines. Regards ¬ . My mistake, ¬ ! :oops: Yes,"our...
by twoleftfeet
Fri Jun 14, 2019 12:46 pm
Forum: Post-a-Poem (Experienced)
Topic: (SHA 5) The Stretcher Bearers Wore Grey (v2)
Replies: 24
Views: 2677

Re: (SHA 5) The Stretcher Bearers Wore Grey

. Hi James, thanks for the crit. I'm not sure what to do about establishing that the bearers are German (yet), but would cutting the first three lines resolve the other issues? Regards, Not . Hello, ¬ I came to the conclusion that they were Germans eventually;the soldier on the stretcher I assume i...
by twoleftfeet
Fri Jun 14, 2019 11:45 am
Forum: Post-a-Poem (Beginners)
Topic: Frame On This Fair Earth Gainst Foes My Malice (was 'Chagrin')
Replies: 3
Views: 474

Re: Frame on this fair earth gainst foes my malice (was 'Chagrin')

This is going right over my head I'm afraid,Jules. Is N a mathematician? (I assume he is because of "we"..) Are theoretical physics and maths reluctant partners joined at the hip? Is the title a reference to a poem? What is the source of the chagrin? I like - yet more mud and fine crafted faience an...
by twoleftfeet
Fri Jun 14, 2019 10:55 am
Forum: Any Other Business
Topic: Crap joke for the day.
Replies: 93
Views: 52051

Re: Crap joke for the day.

A man walks into a pub and his best mate is sitting there with a sun-tan and with a gold medal round his neck. Man: Where did you get the sun tan? Mate: France Man: and the gold medal? Mate: Do you remember when we were at school we used to stick a ruler in a desk and make a twanging noise? Man: Yea...
by twoleftfeet
Fri Jun 14, 2019 10:14 am
Forum: Post-a-Poem (Experienced)
Topic: Retirement
Replies: 15
Views: 1140

Re: Retirement

I like it 99. I wouldn't change much at all. Just a few suggestions - L3 - " rolling " vs "rolling up ". Is this a case of British vs American usage? L9 onwards - Maybe add some punctuation and indentation,and leave a blank line before the second sentence: watching the quiet street after the morning...
by twoleftfeet
Thu Jun 13, 2019 10:45 pm
Forum: Music and Song Lyric Discussion
Topic: Sandy Denny - The Sea
Replies: 5
Views: 2995

Re: Sandy Denny - The Sea

Check out the live performance of THE LADY - just Sandy and a piano. Achingly beautiful.
by twoleftfeet
Thu Jun 13, 2019 10:01 pm
Forum: Post-a-Poem (Beginners)
Topic: DRAGONBOUGH
Replies: 13
Views: 1166

Re: DRAGONBOUGH

Geoff! Good grief, I heard you got killed down in that shoot out in Ecuador along with Butch and Sundance. So it turns out you were in a different gang and in Nutwood. Seth, That shootout was in Bolivia. :) The only shoot-outs in Nutwood are of the penalty-shoot-out type. Rupert's team always wins ...
by twoleftfeet
Thu Jun 13, 2019 2:45 pm
Forum: Post-a-Poem (Beginners)
Topic: DRAGONBOUGH
Replies: 13
Views: 1166

Re: DRAGONBOUGH

I wonder if you could take this further : next frame shows Rupert Bear himself behind the camera (I'm sure you've got the outfit somewhere :) ) Jules Sure,Jules - I can see the headline now: MAN WEARING "RUPERT BEAR" COSTUME WHILE IN POSSESSION OF A CAMERA ARRESTED IN THE PARK When the suspect expl...
by twoleftfeet
Thu Jun 13, 2019 2:37 pm
Forum: Post-a-Poem (Beginners)
Topic: DRAGONBOUGH
Replies: 13
Views: 1166

Re: DRAGONBOUGH

Poet wrote:
Thu Jun 13, 2019 3:36 am
I like the poem, Interesting take on the dragon itself. Keep it up!
Glad you liked it,Poet.
by twoleftfeet
Thu Jun 13, 2019 2:37 pm
Forum: Post-a-Poem (Beginners)
Topic: DRAGONBOUGH
Replies: 13
Views: 1166

Re: DRAGONBOUGH

I can't say I was ever a fan of Rupert but this is perfect, wouldn't change a thing. "...patient, cloaked in spiky-­branch disguise, waiting to be seen through Nutwood eyes." That's a fine couplet and says a lot more than its seeming simplicity suggests! Thanks for that, barrett . I was a huge fan ...
by twoleftfeet
Thu Jun 13, 2019 2:16 pm
Forum: Post-a-Poem (Beginners)
Topic: Wounded knees
Replies: 8
Views: 969

Wounded knees

This is an oldie that I've tinkered with,just for fun. I needed a body part to rhyme with "pass" - I could only think of one -and you need to pronounce both words like a cowboy. :) In fact, read it in your best Johm Wayne voice. I'm not sure if I should misspell "pawnee" as "pawknee".. Apologies to...
by twoleftfeet
Wed Jun 12, 2019 12:42 pm
Forum: Post-a-Poem (Beginners)
Topic: DRAGONBOUGH
Replies: 13
Views: 1166

Re: DRAGONBOUGH

Thank you,folks! Mac I hope you were wearing your "Nutwood specs" in the woodland to avoid accidents.. Yes that "she" at the end of the line is a bit cheeky (OK then,desperate) but it's the sort of liberty that's regularly taken by the story-writers of Rupert. David As you may recall, there were usu...
by twoleftfeet
Wed Jun 12, 2019 11:42 am
Forum: Music and Song Lyric Discussion
Topic: Fairport Convention 1982 LIVE
Replies: 0
Views: 2369

Fairport Convention 1982 LIVE

An incredibly fast instrumental written by guitarist Jerry Donohue - TOKYO

by twoleftfeet
Mon Jun 10, 2019 3:57 pm
Forum: Post-a-Poem (Beginners)
Topic: DRAGONBOUGH
Replies: 13
Views: 1166

DRAGONBOUGH

This poem was kicked off by a couple of pictures taken in the park,so I've created a PDF on my Goooogle Drive. Here's a link (sorry,you'll have to paste it yourself,as the "url" feature doesn't seem to be working): https://drive.google.com/file/d/1lz_T9cI5IyQSmEI12ZgCk1pqAbnD7ljv/view?usp=sharing Yo...
by twoleftfeet
Sun Jun 09, 2019 10:33 pm
Forum: Post-a-Poem (Beginners)
Topic: Brent Aubade
Replies: 19
Views: 1949

Re: Aubade (was The First Day / Broken)

I really liked the first line,BJ

- and,not "getting" that you were using "extraordinary" as a noun, I concluded that you'd left off the final noun
to "break" the poem.

It works for me.. :)

TLF

PS - maybe change the title to "Aubade (with apologies to Eleanor)"?