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by Magpie Jane
Sun May 01, 2011 11:43 pm
Forum: Post-a-Poem (Experienced)
Topic: Digressions
Replies: 14
Views: 905

Re: Digressions

Thanks a lot, David; I'm glad to be here. You do have a point about that pissy line, and I'm going to consider compacting the downpour. The final line, on the other hand ... well, it's meant as a breaking-off of the digression, to bring the reader back to present time. It was, as a matter of fact, e...
by Magpie Jane
Sat Apr 30, 2011 12:24 am
Forum: Post-a-Poem (Experienced)
Topic: the end of a poem in draft
Replies: 8
Views: 610

Re: the end of a poem in draft

A really good one, I think. Neat, compact, and quite engaging. A wee suggestion to pull S1 & S2 together: all things come to an end and still night is epic frustrating filled with crime dramas and ice hockey I also like Geoff's (vaguely disturbing) idea of leaving the final phrase incomplete. But I ...
by Magpie Jane
Sat Apr 30, 2011 12:15 am
Forum: Post Visual Art
Topic: Burning Love (found poem)
Replies: 8
Views: 1382

Burning Love (found poem)

Image


This is the stoking hatch of a decommissioned lime kiln.

Chalk inscription by Unknown Graffitist,
photo by me.


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by Magpie Jane
Sat Apr 30, 2011 12:02 am
Forum: Post Visual Art
Topic: Land Grapes
Replies: 4
Views: 793

Re: Land Grapes

Terrific colours & geometry!

O, I'm glad I found this art department. (still feeling my way around in here)

Jane
by Magpie Jane
Fri Apr 29, 2011 11:54 pm
Forum: Post Visual Art
Topic: moonlit landscape
Replies: 10
Views: 1427

Re: moonlit landscape

Oh.

WoW!

This is terribly, awfully good.
Gosh, I love it.

Jane
by Magpie Jane
Fri Apr 29, 2011 11:51 pm
Forum: Post Visual Art
Topic: Rainbow
Replies: 4
Views: 829

Re: Rainbow

Yes. Enjoyed.
May I ask ..... what is it?

Jane
by Magpie Jane
Fri Apr 29, 2011 11:49 pm
Forum: Post Visual Art
Topic: BreakfastCafeDove
Replies: 5
Views: 913

Re: BreakfastCafeDove

A great photo of one of my favourite birds!
They live in my garden too, but the wood pigeons tend to chase them away.

Jane
by Magpie Jane
Fri Apr 29, 2011 11:07 pm
Forum: Post-a-Poem (Experienced)
Topic: Digressions
Replies: 14
Views: 905

Re: Digressions

Stu (were you the one who screamed, then?), Brian, Ben, Richard, Elphin, Suzanne, Nash, Peter, Geoff -- thank you so much, for all your helpful comments as well as the welcomes! Here's material for me to ponder, and I will; I love good suggestions. For starters, I'll change "gigantic" to "monstrous"...
by Magpie Jane
Thu Apr 28, 2011 12:21 am
Forum: Hello, Good Evening and Welcome
Topic: The magpie says hello
Replies: 13
Views: 2988

Re: The magpie says hello

Gavin, I looked up the Australian magpie, and I'm seriously impressed. European magpies are a tad different.

Jane
by Magpie Jane
Thu Apr 28, 2011 12:16 am
Forum: Post-a-Poem (Experienced)
Topic: Digressions
Replies: 14
Views: 905

Digressions

Digressions It's one of those moonless nights when your attention roams off the page and on to some long-forgotten seaside resort, and the title of your latest poem reminds you of a song you once heard played on the jukebox in that soon-to-be-boarded-up pool hall with the monstrous wasp nest under ...
by Magpie Jane
Wed Apr 27, 2011 11:56 pm
Forum: Post-a-Poem (Experienced)
Topic: Coppicing
Replies: 7
Views: 508

Re: Coppicing

Very nice, and more thought-provoking than I had expected at first. Reminds me (sinisterly) of various education systems. My only suggestion concerns the final line, which - as I see it - is not suited for Capitalism. If you want extra emphasis in addition to giving the word "timber" a line of its o...
by Magpie Jane
Wed Apr 27, 2011 11:46 pm
Forum: Post-a-Poem (Experienced)
Topic: Cleansing with Lavender (Preparing the soil)
Replies: 15
Views: 917

Re: Cleansing with Lavender (Preparing the soil)

I think your edited version is greatly improved in clarity and coherence as well as narrative flow.
No fun spoiled. (heaven forbid!)

Jane
by Magpie Jane
Wed Apr 27, 2011 12:00 am
Forum: Post-a-Poem (Experienced)
Topic: Childhood Home
Replies: 9
Views: 615

Re: Childhood Home

Ah, this one really sent hot & cold little feet up & down my spine. I was wondering about your first couplet: the two lines are too similar, I think, both referring to geographical facts. May I suggest ..... The Voronya Cave would not be deep enough for this, The Trench of Oblivion would not be deep...
by Magpie Jane
Tue Apr 26, 2011 11:44 pm
Forum: Post-a-Poem (Experienced)
Topic: Cleansing with Lavender (Preparing the soil)
Replies: 15
Views: 917

Re: Preparing the soil

This is a very engaging piece. Funny thing is, it's quite easy to follow the mood, the feeling you're showing here; but - to quote your poem - What is this? I mean, what is "it"? - One can't help feeling curious. My guess is that it's something you remove from the attic and bury in the garden. Unple...
by Magpie Jane
Tue Apr 26, 2011 12:17 am
Forum: Hello, Good Evening and Welcome
Topic: The magpie says hello
Replies: 13
Views: 2988

Re: The magpie says hello

Gavin, Magpies find discarded things and use them in their own way. I'm no thieving kind of magpie; but if you drop a toffee-wrapping by the roadside, I may pick it up because I like the colours, or because the print looks funny when the paper is crumpled up. Ben, Thank you! Yes, you'll soon be seei...
by Magpie Jane
Sun Apr 24, 2011 10:15 pm
Forum: Hello, Good Evening and Welcome
Topic: The magpie says hello
Replies: 13
Views: 2988

Re: The magpie says hello

Ros,
Thank you! I should've guessed you would be here too; I'm glad to meet you again. Yes, there is some weird stuff going on in the Bio department occasionally. *grin*

I'll be around.

Jane
by Magpie Jane
Thu Apr 21, 2011 11:43 pm
Forum: Hello, Good Evening and Welcome
Topic: The magpie says hello
Replies: 13
Views: 2988

Re: The magpie says hello

Nash, Thanks for the information! Your link didn't work, but never mind; from what you told me, I was able to find the gravesite. Now I'm a lot wiser. David, O, the unbridled joy of being remembered! Yes indeed, I'm Jane from the Wild site. And I remember you too, now. I still frequent those groves,...
by Magpie Jane
Tue Apr 19, 2011 11:56 pm
Forum: Hello, Good Evening and Welcome
Topic: The magpie says hello
Replies: 13
Views: 2988

The magpie says hello

Hello there – You don't know me (I think), but have no fear; I'm relatively harmless. Not particularly good at cover letters & self-intros, I'll try to be brief about it. I'm an oldish, rural kind of bird, Norwegian, living in Denmark. I've been lurking about in this place for the last few days, and...