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by JohnLott
Tue Nov 22, 2011 11:48 am
Forum: Post-a-Poem (Experienced)
Topic: Bus Driver in Rear-view Mirror
Replies: 23
Views: 1353

Re: Bus Driver in Rear-view Mirror

Where will imagination take us? Poor bus driver. The first two good stanzas are in some way let down by the next two and I’m not sure why – maybe fewer lines which upsets the pace and maybe a stutter in the beat in that half. ‘..its bleak kernel of possibilities,...’ Surely N could reach deep to pul...
by JohnLott
Tue Nov 22, 2011 11:45 am
Forum: Post-a-Poem (Experienced)
Topic: Beautiful Ball [V2]
Replies: 17
Views: 1119

Re: Beautiful Ball [V2]

Fingers probe with hurried bluster.
Perhaps slightly less bullish?

8)

J.
by JohnLott
Tue Nov 22, 2011 12:27 am
Forum: Post-a-Poem (Experienced)
Topic: Evergreen
Replies: 2
Views: 329

Re: Evergreen

Hi Vincent. I can't pretend that I understand or like the analogy of S1 tongues = tongue's days = day's free's = frees mesaure = typo measure and I don't get the last line. However, some good phrases in amongst but it didn't rock my sweaty, crusty socks off. How did yours get under the clock :shock:...
by JohnLott
Mon Nov 21, 2011 12:49 pm
Forum: Post-a-Poem (Experienced)
Topic: First Words
Replies: 14
Views: 860

Re: First Words

1st with 3rd (needs small edit) and no 2nd, work for me.
Good stuff

:)

J.
by JohnLott
Mon Nov 21, 2011 11:11 am
Forum: Post Visual Art
Topic: Apple Truck
Replies: 4
Views: 778

Re: Apple Truck

I do like the quality and composition of the first pix.
However, where does pm stop: how do we know the most expensive pix (previously featured) isn't a six cut and paste compilation?

J.
by JohnLott
Mon Nov 21, 2011 10:51 am
Forum: Post-a-Poem (Experienced)
Topic: Red Umbrella
Replies: 3
Views: 397

Re: Red Umbrella

Thanks Kris
Sensible advice in there so I'll look to making a few adjustments.
:)

J.
by JohnLott
Mon Nov 21, 2011 1:03 am
Forum: Post-a-Poem (Experienced)
Topic: Red Umbrella
Replies: 3
Views: 397

Red Umbrella

The red umbrella was rolled, tightly, neatly and stood leaning in the stand in the hall. Rain threatened but the really black clouds were still on their way. I turned around and left, back through the front door, back down the crazed concrete steps circa 1882; April 14th, if the deeds could be belie...
by JohnLott
Sun Nov 20, 2011 4:12 pm
Forum: Any Other Business
Topic: Microsoft trying to take over the world
Replies: 5
Views: 753

Re: Microsoft trying to take over the world

Hi Geoff,
How do you get on with running MS versions of packages like Corel, Adobe Pro, MS Office Pro, Quicktime etc ?
I am tempted to switch to Linux because I've heard it's good - but not at the expense of purchasing new packages.

J.
by JohnLott
Sun Nov 20, 2011 3:57 pm
Forum: Poetry Discussion
Topic: Small stones
Replies: 12
Views: 1645

Re: Small stones

I have my notebook and I do it all the time (started three months ago).
WOWH obviously do it because it is a web-wide (world-wide) commercial opportunity.
If I joined in, it would be on some 'home-grown' venture.

:P

J.
by JohnLott
Sun Nov 20, 2011 3:46 pm
Forum: Post-a-Poem (Experienced)
Topic: Objective
Replies: 14
Views: 844

Re: Objective

Hi Ros, The title, the quote and Proust’s book, together are misleading The title by itself could be better. The poem is good stuff down to the end of ‘Umoored’, although in ‘Memoir’ I come to a halt on ‘..scattered blue by distance..’ ‘Abstract’ is out of mood - a distraction - so it is good that y...
by JohnLott
Sat Nov 19, 2011 10:54 pm
Forum: Post-a-Poem (Experienced)
Topic: Beautiful Ball [V2]
Replies: 17
Views: 1119

Re: Beautiful Ball [V2]

Finally I got around to dealing with this.
Hope it works

J.
by JohnLott
Sat Nov 19, 2011 12:45 pm
Forum: Post-a-Poem (Experienced)
Topic: icon
Replies: 15
Views: 1039

Re: iconography (was icon)

I do agree strange words in strange places but I do get the story.
How can you say:
'....My role is clearly defined, as gilt signifies goddess, and foal...'
when you are a mother?

J.
by JohnLott
Sat Nov 19, 2011 11:29 am
Forum: Any Other Business
Topic: Microsoft trying to take over the world
Replies: 5
Views: 753

Re: Microsoft trying to take over the world

No.
The web designer we used was 100% Mac and got me interested, even though, (or because?), he was an MS developer. Company policy meant we went the MS route. I always admired Jobs and Mac technology, and had little time for Gates. MS OS drove me demented - byte hungry, slow and crashing.

J.
by JohnLott
Sat Nov 19, 2011 11:14 am
Forum: Poetry Discussion
Topic: poetry courses
Replies: 2
Views: 473

Re: poetry courses

I found the Poetry School to be good. They do a whole range to suit you and your budget. Courses can also be found through the Poetry Society. The Arvon Foundation do residential workshops etc but are expensive relative to time; a couple of days or a week are too short-term when learning can take mo...
by JohnLott
Sat Nov 19, 2011 10:57 am
Forum: Post-a-Poem (Beginners)
Topic: Things we lost. (previously Abandoning a friend)
Replies: 40
Views: 2860

Re: Things we lost. (previously Abandoning a friend)

I know Pauline has other views, but I feel you have achieved a concise and poignant poem. I like its pace and mood. And its development is a measure how a person can develop as a poet. If you feel you need a little more sense of loss you could end it something like: 'and friend, do you remember the ...
by JohnLott
Fri Nov 18, 2011 10:58 pm
Forum: Any Other Business
Topic: Microsoft trying to take over the world
Replies: 5
Views: 753

Re: Microsoft trying to take over the world

Jobs Goodbye good guy Steve Jobs you didn’t but should have worn your robes of purple or perhaps they should have been a wicked apple green you told kids right out straight don’t be trapped by dogma get a life now, don’t wait. Freedom you knew was there with iPhone, iPad and super thin MacBook Air
by JohnLott
Fri Nov 18, 2011 10:52 pm
Forum: Post-a-Poem (Beginners)
Topic: An unexpected inheritance - V3
Replies: 25
Views: 2469

Re: An Unexpected Inheritance

Hi Nicky,

I like what you have written and it (the re-write) is good up to the last stanza.
If you can't revise that along the lines that emptiness doesn't flow (forget 'spill'), I would look to finish the poem at the previous stanza and avoid creaking into an anti-climax.

:)

J.
by JohnLott
Fri Nov 18, 2011 10:40 pm
Forum: Post-a-Poem (Experienced)
Topic: From a Train Window
Replies: 12
Views: 869

Re: From a Train Window

'...in its dream like gloom:'

I feel it needs something more metaphysically profound than this.

8)

J.
by JohnLott
Thu Nov 17, 2011 10:39 pm
Forum: Post-a-Poem (Beginners)
Topic: Rotten
Replies: 11
Views: 980

Re: Rotten

Perhaps people misuse the word 'prerogative'?
That said I like the way it is narrated. I could imagine hearing most of this on radio station interview.

:)

J.
by JohnLott
Thu Nov 17, 2011 10:23 pm
Forum: Post-a-Poem (Experienced)
Topic: The Father of American Psychiatry
Replies: 9
Views: 693

Re: The Father of American Psychiatry

Hi Ray, well crafted and well balanced. A well told tale. '...sighing night winds with the rhythm of waves; as familiar as The King of Babylon....' Don't understand this in this context. imo 'Nestles' is the wrong word here when things generally float or swim or something in blood. Dormice or hamste...
by JohnLott
Tue Nov 15, 2011 10:58 pm
Forum: Post-a-Poem (Experienced)
Topic: Red
Replies: 21
Views: 1355

Re: Red

ray miller wrote: Why the semi-colon after hesitation?
I thought to emphasise the word 'hesitation' by making the reader pause at that point in real time. Seemed a good idea at the time, and I still think it works.

:)

J.
by JohnLott
Tue Nov 15, 2011 10:34 pm
Forum: Post-a-Poem (Experienced)
Topic: Red
Replies: 21
Views: 1355

Re: Red

So much activity! Isn't poetry supposed to engender thought, provoke a reaction and leave a question or two? I have taken on board that the style of the last couple or three poems hasn't gone down well and that I need to put more skill into my work. (Mic, Ros, Suzanne, Megan). I need to learn to rea...
by JohnLott
Tue Nov 15, 2011 8:27 am
Forum: Post-a-Poem (Experienced)
Topic: Red
Replies: 21
Views: 1355

Re: Red

Spot on Geoff - so the question is: Are we allowed to be observantly cynical and a tad obtuse?
The girls obviously say 'No!'
Imprudent, coming along on the heels of Miss Andry 'n all.

Punctuation in place Suzanne.

8)

J.
by JohnLott
Mon Nov 14, 2011 10:46 pm
Forum: Post-a-Poem (Experienced)
Topic: Red
Replies: 21
Views: 1355

Re: Red

OK guys - I'll write this down to experience and move on, accepting Kris' view that wobbling extremities are not worth pursuing.

8)

J.
by JohnLott
Mon Nov 14, 2011 7:55 pm
Forum: Post-a-Poem (Experienced)
Topic: Red
Replies: 21
Views: 1355

Re: Red

Hi Ros, I wanted a word that meant 'trembling in anticipation'; I thought 'tremulous' would fit that requirement. Do you have any ideas? Hi Suzanne, I have written five poems in a series recently where I have been experimentimg with minimal punctuation - if any - (I've noticed that seems to be a tre...