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by calico
Sat Nov 05, 2011 12:27 pm
Forum: Poetry Discussion
Topic: Vahni Capildeo
Replies: 10
Views: 1120

Re: Vahni Capildeo

It could have been written by my cat about me.
by calico
Sat Nov 05, 2011 9:58 am
Forum: Poetry Discussion
Topic: Vahni Capildeo
Replies: 10
Views: 1120

Vahni Capildeo

Enjoying this this morning, from Vahni Capildeo's 'Undraining Sea': The animal who kisses persistently is much to be avoided. The more it is avoided, the more it comes back. It will seek out its prey in the middle of dreams about castles in nowhere, and make its catch before the staircase in the upp...
by calico
Sat Nov 05, 2011 9:09 am
Forum: Post-a-Poem (Experienced)
Topic: This is a word event
Replies: 17
Views: 1200

Re: This is a word event

Lovely, Mic. It's communicating something profound towards the end where the sexual context is clearer, I mean particularly the last 4 lines. These lines are far more powerful in my opinion than the "fire in the fireplace" line that precedes it, if that's a metaphor it's a bit of a tired one, could ...
by calico
Fri Nov 04, 2011 4:07 pm
Forum: Post-a-Poem (Experienced)
Topic: Scenes from a Cemetery
Replies: 6
Views: 502

Re: Scenes from a Cemetery

I wouldn't like to lose rain-doubled unless it was for something better and I can't think of anything better. It's immediate visual description. Like "tea-cup arm". I would even use doubled again in the end line, something like "the teddy doubles over again" or alternatively put slumps in the presen...
by calico
Fri Nov 04, 2011 3:58 pm
Forum: Post-a-Poem (Experienced)
Topic: Pica(edit)
Replies: 14
Views: 1059

Re: Pica(edit)

Thanks BJ, Peter, John. Peter I stole the moon idea from something I read about one of the gnostic heresies in which the moon is associated with the idea of imprisonment both as prisoner and prison guard - confirming all my worst suspicions. John, the sensation of craving petrol etc without going so...
by calico
Fri Nov 04, 2011 8:46 am
Forum: Ezines, Magazines and Publications
Topic: British poetry mags
Replies: 44
Views: 7962

Re: British poetry mags

An ambitious list...I went to the launch of Salt Best British Poetry, which is a complilation of poems published in mags last year, and many of these popped up, ones I hadn't heard of like Seam and Staple. Also a really nice sounding one, 'Tears in the Fence' who have an elusive web presence. Anyone...
by calico
Thu Nov 03, 2011 12:23 pm
Forum: Post-a-Poem (Experienced)
Topic: Pica(edit)
Replies: 14
Views: 1059

Re: Pica

Thanks a lot for that commentary Ben, v. useful responses. I would respond to each but will restrain myself just to say, about the horse, if you can't see it you don't know what it's doing and I wanted to be not omniscient, I agree it didn't work but I like the idea of making it clear the poet doesn...
by calico
Wed Nov 02, 2011 7:47 pm
Forum: Post-a-Poem (Experienced)
Topic: Pica(edit)
Replies: 14
Views: 1059

Re: Pica

John, I don't know, I was about to say there is nothing coded or cryptic going on but I guess I am using symbolism. I think I'm not quite sure what I'm doing. Intentionally obtuse may be giving me too much credit.
Editing in process.
Thanks.....
by calico
Tue Nov 01, 2011 8:15 pm
Forum: Post-a-Poem (Experienced)
Topic: The Eternal Love of Women
Replies: 12
Views: 997

Re: The Eternal Love of Women

I'm going to speak for the excellent Myselxia (OK - some of the articles are shit) and say that they would not object to it because it's a rant about women but because practically 100% of the poetry they publish in practically every issue is excoriating, insightful, challenging and original.
by calico
Tue Nov 01, 2011 7:58 pm
Forum: Post-a-Poem (Experienced)
Topic: Heart-to-heart
Replies: 6
Views: 398

Re: Heart-to-heart

Enjoying this - the ending is oddly conversational, as a heart to heart would be I suppose, the ellipsis especially is so emaily. Have you noticed that, in emails? It's the 'retort' isn't it, ending the 14 lines, still, the voice is a little too strident there for me. Two women, a man and a steamer ...
by calico
Tue Nov 01, 2011 7:51 pm
Forum: Post-a-Poem (Experienced)
Topic: Pica(edit)
Replies: 14
Views: 1059

Re: Pica

Thanks Ian, not really on the bridge but round about there. Is it important? Not a remarkable stack of bricks at all just a wall. And yes Pica when you eat coal or soil when pregnant - but if there is another word that is more straightforward I'd like to know it. Doctors call it Pica.
by calico
Tue Nov 01, 2011 7:29 pm
Forum: Post-a-Poem (Experienced)
Topic: Once Loved
Replies: 2
Views: 347

Re: Once Loved

OK my partner-to-be, I don't think I've ever commented on your work though I have read lots. I like this probably more than Abandoned and less than Terrabytes. In the last stanza, rhyme and repetition is used to good effect to create pace, whereas for me the rhymes elsewhere are distracting especial...
by calico
Tue Nov 01, 2011 7:16 pm
Forum: Post-a-Poem (Experienced)
Topic: Pica(edit)
Replies: 14
Views: 1059

Pica(edit)

version 4 There is a wall behind me, brick as unlike the brick of my flat as limekiln is to firelighter, white and sweating on tinder. As half Mars bar is to half term, as my feet are to yours in a puddle of drizzle that started at dawn. You don’t look down or to the side and mostly you don’t cry a...
by calico
Tue Nov 01, 2011 10:07 am
Forum: Post-a-Poem (Experienced)
Topic: Climb the East
Replies: 19
Views: 996

Re: Climb the East

It does read like the opening to a longer poem. It nearly works but for something more of the ending, where you've built up with your layout and punctuation to the two final sentences which are too abrupt somehow and need to be opening up more, which you are doing with your space around them, but th...
by calico
Tue Nov 01, 2011 9:52 am
Forum: Post-a-Poem (Experienced)
Topic: Daughters and Doughnuts
Replies: 20
Views: 1726

Re: Daughters and Doughnuts

Suzanne wrote:Is the message

"experience is all"

What everyone read/thought/understood?
Me, yes.
by calico
Tue Nov 01, 2011 9:50 am
Forum: Post-a-Poem (Experienced)
Topic: September's Features
Replies: 5
Views: 413

Re: September's Features

Great. Missed some of these the first time round, 'specially Geoff's. Well done everyone.
by calico
Mon Oct 24, 2011 9:12 pm
Forum: Post-a-Poem (Experienced)
Topic: Wants
Replies: 10
Views: 647

Re: Wants

Foyers. I agree that it makes me think of somewhere institutional. This didn't detract from the poem for me, I think envisioning an institutional rather than a domestic setting intensified the atmosphere of that significant, pregnant space, full of waiting - perhaps it universalises that sensation a...
by calico
Mon Oct 24, 2011 8:59 pm
Forum: Post-a-Poem (Experienced)
Topic: The Joy of Creation
Replies: 10
Views: 740

Re: The Joy of Creation

ray miller wrote:I liked the last verse as well - I imagine that the subject is farting.
you nutcase!
by calico
Sun Oct 23, 2011 9:20 am
Forum: Post-a-Poem (Experienced)
Topic: The Joy of Creation
Replies: 10
Views: 740

Re: The Joy of Creation

Brilliant and confusing in equal measure. I don't know what's going on and there are a few nits like 'windows' twice but I love love love that final stanza. So it's Jesus as charlatan, poet, artist, general boho celebrity? Consistently unpredictable this one. For some reason I'd like to read the fin...
by calico
Fri Oct 21, 2011 7:11 pm
Forum: Post-a-Poem (Experienced)
Topic: The New Mathematics
Replies: 5
Views: 494

Re: The New Mathematics

I wouldn't, personally, want to put a subtitle to locate this - I think the disorientation is fine. circus/numeric images I can see the circus but where's the numeric images? Also circus and its imagery works against repetitive/samey to my mind. People do use the word circus like that though I suppo...
by calico
Wed Oct 19, 2011 8:38 am
Forum: Post-a-Poem (Beginners)
Topic: New forum - Finishing Touch
Replies: 7
Views: 1040

Re: New forum - Finishing Touch

How do we move things - from there - to here? It feels like hubris!
by calico
Wed Oct 19, 2011 8:34 am
Forum: Post-a-Poem (Experienced)
Topic: The New Mathematics
Replies: 5
Views: 494

Re: The New Mathematics

Something still reminds me of Quentin going to Harvard. The first stanza sounds like we are in I don't know, Mississipi, and not Hertfordshire. In fact as a sweeping statement, everyone in this poem sounds much older than they are, in a bigger and grander place, about 50 years ago. You use metaphors...
by calico
Tue Oct 18, 2011 5:47 pm
Forum: Post-a-Poem (Experienced)
Topic: The New Mathematics
Replies: 5
Views: 494

Re: The New Mathematics

That ending is stupendous. I am zooming in to say that, and will be back to comment further, at the moment I'm thinking of when Quentin goes to Harvard in 'The Sound and the Fury' and I look forward to further readings.
by calico
Sun Oct 16, 2011 2:44 pm
Forum: Post-a-Poem (Experienced)
Topic: Fiji
Replies: 8
Views: 520

Re: Fiji

Suzanne! so many great poems. The first whatever is good, because it's surprising, but not the second. According to my arbitrary rule book that is. Ending on Always sunny? I would really like. You could probably lose some words but if you tell me you've tried that and prefer this, I concur. Great Ti...
by calico
Sat Oct 15, 2011 8:58 am
Forum: Post-a-Poem (Experienced)
Topic: Transitions
Replies: 10
Views: 698

Re: The Silica Years- Edit

I don't know. I don't think it needs it, and the original begins more lightly and flows better. I may have to have a closer look later when not so full of caffeine.