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by calico
Thu Sep 29, 2011 12:24 pm
Forum: Post-a-Poem (Experienced)
Topic: A First Attempt
Replies: 7
Views: 633

Re: A First Attempt

Hi Owen Edwards. I love sea-skied furzey heaths, the doggy, the bootbrush snout all of S1 actually, I really don't think "Those days remain oneiric" works, because it's a bit thesaurus, or possibly just because you don't have to state it, and because a poem is a dream, or possibly not - to continue ...
by calico
Thu Sep 29, 2011 12:00 pm
Forum: Post-a-Poem (Experienced)
Topic: Not caught early enough- Edit
Replies: 12
Views: 720

Re: Not caught early enough- Edit

Hi Suzanne. I think I've just gone from 'persistent' to 'prolific' poster, which sounds more positive. Re, your poem, just commenting on the edit version. It took me a while to realise stage 3 is cancer, and I enjoyed not knowing - the ominous reference to something dreadful, which could be coded or...
by calico
Sat Jan 08, 2011 11:28 am
Forum: Post-a-Poem (Experienced)
Topic: Stalks
Replies: 11
Views: 1184

Re: Stalks

Thanks, it's good to be back and I know I shouldn't but I quite like this quietness, it's a change of pace and I read things more thoroughly. I have heard of Blatvasky, yes, and also something in Foucault's Pendulum about the belief that snakes lie coiled at the base of our spine - totems of wisdom ...
by calico
Tue Jan 04, 2011 11:51 am
Forum: Post-a-Poem (Experienced)
Topic: Stalks
Replies: 11
Views: 1184

Stalks

She stands in the kitchen behind me, describing amazing long grass up to her waist and the water snakes she saw floating stretched and loose as tights. I'm washing-up, after biscuits and juice, and this will be the last site of her most-repeated motifs: her cup with its botched flowers, her heart-do...
by calico
Tue Jan 04, 2011 10:31 am
Forum: Post-a-Poem (Beginners)
Topic: Hurling Nonnative Species into London for Breeding Purposes
Replies: 15
Views: 1013

Re: Hurling Nonnative Species into London for Breeding Purpo

Hello Raincoat, goodness what a title. Nonnative without a hyphen is a good word, a hyphen would help though. I've seen In the Mood for Love, Wong Kar Wei film isn't it, and I can actually picture a buffalo cowering like a lantern, or quivering in the shadow of a lantern, something like that. The pi...
by calico
Tue Jan 04, 2011 10:17 am
Forum: Post-a-Poem (Experienced)
Topic: Inferno
Replies: 6
Views: 610

Re: Inferno

Hello Benjamin, I've read this a few times now, and enjoyed the story. In S1 I would agree with Nash about 'Armani' being an easy catch, but there is that sense through the whole piece, I thought - this isn't negative, it is something about the voice of the narrator who is having a dream, but that s...
by calico
Thu Dec 30, 2010 11:12 pm
Forum: Post-a-Poem (Beginners)
Topic: And the winner is...
Replies: 6
Views: 774

Re: And the winner is...

Hi people, well December and Christmas came and went for me, back now doing some reading. Love this poem, well done.
by calico
Sun Oct 24, 2010 10:25 am
Forum: Post-a-Poem (Experienced)
Topic: new sister
Replies: 10
Views: 680

Re: new sister

It was an experiment, and I wondered if the way children repeat words would work with the form. I think Mic's sestina worked almost against the form - with those difficult end words and sprawling imagery, it felt like something bursting out of its constraints. And something like Elizabeth Bishop's S...
by calico
Sun Oct 24, 2010 12:24 am
Forum: Post-a-Poem (Experienced)
Topic: new sister
Replies: 10
Views: 680

Re: new sister

Ha Har, well, thanks everbody - I think everyone should attempt a sestina at least once to truly appreciate the joys of free verse, what a nightmare, honestly. Having tried one makes me appreciate Mic's Spiny Urchins and Starfish one even more....
by calico
Fri Oct 22, 2010 3:47 pm
Forum: Post-a-Poem (Experienced)
Topic: new sister
Replies: 10
Views: 680

new sister

Like those that stand close to their mother, with brown coats, matching hair- bands, same sounding names. When I woke up it was late this morning cold in my room my breath made clouds Under the tangle of sun and clouds I called to my mother, asleep in her room next to the baby with fluffy blonde hai...
by calico
Fri Oct 22, 2010 1:36 pm
Forum: Post-a-Poem (Experienced)
Topic: The Worm
Replies: 7
Views: 451

Re: The Worm

Interesting! I love the descriptions of Claude and Marie so much that the worm is not really registering - not sure how you feel about that, when the worm should presumably be the star of the show. But honestly, I really just like the way they are smoking in tandem and wearing the wrong hats, and it...
by calico
Wed Oct 20, 2010 10:06 am
Forum: Post-a-Poem (Experienced)
Topic: A bucket full of fillings
Replies: 10
Views: 755

Re: A bucket full of fillings

I didn't really know what it was about - something specific I gather from the other comments, but none the wiser and I'm not going to google, so will just go ahead and make an idiot of myself - is it about a motorbike gang of sorts, in Wild West style, there's a lot of bravado going on, and a sadist...
by calico
Wed Oct 20, 2010 9:59 am
Forum: Post-a-Poem (Experienced)
Topic: Loose change
Replies: 30
Views: 5705

Re: Loose change

geek.
by calico
Sun Oct 17, 2010 12:08 pm
Forum: Post-a-Poem (Experienced)
Topic: Loose change
Replies: 30
Views: 5705

Re: Loose change

Wowee.I think I read it all. This becomes more like hearing a poem than reading it which I think is often to the poet's advantage. I love it, it's like a slide show.
by calico
Sat Oct 16, 2010 7:47 am
Forum: Post-a-Poem (Experienced)
Topic: The balcony
Replies: 25
Views: 1391

Re: The balcony

There is definitely something in this, I think. The 'science bits' are a distraction for me, I'm not sure how much these interpretations are drawn from the original Italian, but the image of the figure on the balcony commands the poem and then the particles and the quantum read like abstractions, th...
by calico
Sat Oct 16, 2010 7:28 am
Forum: Post-a-Poem (Experienced)
Topic: letting the light in
Replies: 13
Views: 883

Re: letting the light in

James,do you mean barley-white is too obvious? It is a paint colour name, of course, so maybe should be capitalised, I also like the way barley looks like barely. But. Could be naff.
I know what you mean about the last S. This is such a simple poem I felt it could stand being cluttered.
by calico
Sat Oct 16, 2010 7:25 am
Forum: Post-a-Poem (Experienced)
Topic: toadstool
Replies: 16
Views: 820

Re: toadstool

I like the idea that is it a female conspiracy but did not read it that way. More of a mixed collectivity. If delph so wished she could indicate colours of feathers to distinguish goose gender. Regarding the one word lines, this has the effect of slowing the read down, which is good, but does over-e...
by calico
Thu Oct 14, 2010 7:11 pm
Forum: Post-a-Poem (Experienced)
Topic: letting the light in
Replies: 13
Views: 883

Re: letting the light in

Chocolate Biscuit Therapy?
by calico
Thu Oct 14, 2010 7:09 pm
Forum: Post-a-Poem (Experienced)
Topic: toadstool
Replies: 16
Views: 820

Re: toadstool

They don't kill him, but they disliked his haughty ways and exploited his goosey curiosity by urging him towards the toadstool. A fly agaric most probably.
Am I on a different planet?
by calico
Thu Oct 14, 2010 5:34 pm
Forum: Post-a-Poem (Experienced)
Topic: letting the light in
Replies: 13
Views: 883

Re: letting the light in

Ben Johnson, thanks for the read, if you don't mind I am going to make those changes you suggest now -
going to keep the hyphens for now though will probably change my mind about that eventually. Thankyou!
by calico
Thu Oct 14, 2010 12:48 pm
Forum: Post-a-Poem (Experienced)
Topic: letting the light in
Replies: 13
Views: 883

letting the light in

Can I do a goat in the forest, can I do a deer? What about a hunter, a kind one? After-school before-bed in a room painted barley- white, he draws with a brown pen, writes 'brown' on the cardboard door of an improvised scene felt tip works at the furrowed ground, splayed point dapples a dark-lashed ...
by calico
Thu Oct 14, 2010 12:35 pm
Forum: Post-a-Poem (Experienced)
Topic: What Am I Knitting?
Replies: 15
Views: 821

Re: What Am I Knitting?

Hello, I enjoyed this - it's got a good mixture of the more generic memory / nostalgia - bingo, air-raids for example, with the specific which give a good jolt into someone's world - (they used to call me the open door) - for example, someone's very personal memory. I think it is brilliantly ventril...
by calico
Thu Oct 14, 2010 12:22 pm
Forum: Post-a-Poem (Experienced)
Topic: toadstool
Replies: 16
Views: 820

Re: toadstool

Hello - yes, I liked this. It is surprising and also quite plausible to me that geese might plot the untoward death of another - I think the plotting bit is very strong, the nicely understated allusions that the geese have made, for their own motives. Some of the goose descriptions felt erring a lit...
by calico
Tue Oct 12, 2010 9:10 am
Forum: Ezines, Magazines and Publications
Topic: Call for submissions
Replies: 22
Views: 3439

Re: Call for submissions

Hi Nicky - I don't think I've been there, not that I remember anyway - just staying in a B and B is a huge excitement. Let alone an evocative one. It looks nice Canterbury - river, University, medieval stuff.
by calico
Mon Oct 11, 2010 9:21 am
Forum: Ezines, Magazines and Publications
Topic: Call for submissions
Replies: 22
Views: 3439

Re: Call for submissions

Have booked my b & b for the 16th November! It has "evocative rooms" that "bespeak its medieval construction". Exciting! It also says that although it is located in the "semi-pedestrianised city centre, you can park outside the hotel and the pedestrians slowly scatter".
Anyway, looking forward to it.