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by calico
Wed Oct 05, 2011 9:17 am
Forum: Post-a-Poem (Experienced)
Topic: High Beech
Replies: 16
Views: 1194

Re: High Beech

Oh and here it is:
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by calico
Wed Oct 05, 2011 8:18 am
Forum: Post-a-Poem (Experienced)
Topic: High Beech
Replies: 16
Views: 1194

Re: High Beech

BenJohnson wrote:This isn't a forum for personal problems
Damn.

Thanks for your comments here, all.
by calico
Tue Oct 04, 2011 6:44 pm
Forum: Post-a-Poem (Experienced)
Topic: High Beech
Replies: 16
Views: 1194

Re: High Beech

That's fine, I should have said, but was embarrassed to, that it's the High Beech where John Clare escaped from in Epping Forest. Which isn't to say that makes it any better, but I was hoping to use fleet as an adjective, as in fleet of foot, and the Conflagration is imagined.
by calico
Tue Oct 04, 2011 5:42 pm
Forum: Post-a-Poem (Experienced)
Topic: High Beech
Replies: 16
Views: 1194

Re: High Beech

Really no brambles? Then presumably no mistletoe or belladonna either. Maybe some yarrow. I hadn't noticed the line break at the somehow, escaped me, and was hoping for the best with the burly hedge - think you're right.
by calico
Tue Oct 04, 2011 1:11 pm
Forum: Post-a-Poem (Experienced)
Topic: High Beech
Replies: 16
Views: 1194

High Beech

For the book, slight revision: Leaving High Beach John cleared the hedge, though it reared up and waved its burly arms at him, then he looked back at gables shaking through the trees, at windows blue as the fleet stream behind bars, at the gate, smoke-blacked by the last Conflagration, at eaves jamm...
by calico
Tue Oct 04, 2011 1:06 pm
Forum: Post-a-Poem (Experienced)
Topic: Selkie
Replies: 19
Views: 1199

Re: Selkie

Nearly, kind of, ' cycles ' though? What with tides and crying in the kitchen. Perhaps that is fine, but mighten you consider 'phases' or something else tidal or lunar// And it sounds a bit pedantic ' when she refuses to wear the ones she owns ', why not,' when she won't wear the ones she owns ' All...
by calico
Tue Oct 04, 2011 9:23 am
Forum: Post-a-Poem (Experienced)
Topic: In Praise of Green
Replies: 12
Views: 819

Re: In Praise of Green

I'm following up to S3, then I can see the green light but not the phone, the escalator - Tokyo Green could be a nice title?
Tokyo Green could be a different colour to England Green. There are so many words dedicated to England Green.
by calico
Tue Oct 04, 2011 8:45 am
Forum: Post-a-Poem (Experienced)
Topic: Selkie
Replies: 19
Views: 1199

Re: Selkie

I did try to imagine shark both ways, dried and umm, wet, maybe if you say sharkskin it doesn't bring to mind the actual shark so clearly. A grammar ghost, eh, that's handy.
by calico
Mon Oct 03, 2011 7:38 pm
Forum: Post-a-Poem (Experienced)
Topic: Yoked-edit 2
Replies: 18
Views: 977

Re: Yoked

I don't find a mystery in this, my problem was the opposite that it too closely follows the metaphor of walking on eggshells. This is just my problem, as it's well thought out, from the 'Yoked' of the title - two creatures tied together- and throughout. It could be more refined - broken shell like s...
by calico
Mon Oct 03, 2011 7:09 pm
Forum: Post-a-Poem (Experienced)
Topic: Selkie
Replies: 19
Views: 1199

Re: Selkie

Very nice, everything held together by the sea imagery and strong beginning and end. The sea presence taking over the domestic scene works so well, perhaps weaker in S2 than elsewhere where the language sounds somehow biblical like the mortification of flesh (RS Thomas like!) S3 is perfectly express...
by calico
Mon Oct 03, 2011 6:55 pm
Forum: Post-a-Poem (Experienced)
Topic: Version 2: Fleeing John (was The Lily-white Boy)
Replies: 12
Views: 693

Re: Version 2: Fleeing John (was The Lily-white Boy)

Interesting diversity of feedback here, and definitely I ended up writing a different poem which will be a new post, and may carry on trying to edit the original at some point.
by calico
Mon Oct 03, 2011 7:01 am
Forum: Poetry Discussion
Topic: Poetry for squildren
Replies: 9
Views: 864

Re: Poetry for squildren

So good...they must love it in school when poets go in. We had Michael Rosen as Poet in Residence and they bought out a CD about rain. More poets in schools!
by calico
Mon Oct 03, 2011 6:58 am
Forum: Post-a-Poem (Experienced)
Topic: Llanbwchllyn Lake
Replies: 13
Views: 765

Re: Llanbwchllyn Lake

Last 5 lines?! Last 5 words rather.
by calico
Sat Oct 01, 2011 7:22 pm
Forum: Post-a-Poem (Experienced)
Topic: Llanbwchllyn Lake
Replies: 13
Views: 765

Re: Llanbwchllyn Lake

I have read this before, I think, has it changed? I remember disagreeing with the "manfully". Could you not end on the speech? Everything leads up to the speech, you have the 'mute' swans, the sound of the children (imagined), the screech of the owl. Also it is possible to imagine that the owl is ta...
by calico
Sat Oct 01, 2011 7:14 pm
Forum: Post-a-Poem (Experienced)
Topic: Selective Amnesia
Replies: 13
Views: 785

Re: Selective Amnesia

I agree - very nice! Starts off behind the wheel and freewheels along, good flow. Shouldn't it be 'a few errors of judgement.' ?
by calico
Sat Oct 01, 2011 7:15 am
Forum: Post-a-Poem (Experienced)
Topic: Version 2: Fleeing John (was The Lily-white Boy)
Replies: 12
Views: 693

Re: The Lily-white Boy

Yes. Yes I'm failing to communicate. I'll spare you the edit, but I've removed the telephone because it set up a scene that didn't follow through and what I wanted was to get at a folk tale, ghost story feeling of the reservoir as cannibal, purity as the undead - ummm- happy to let it sink glug glug...
by calico
Sat Oct 01, 2011 7:09 am
Forum: Poetry Discussion
Topic: Poetry for squildren
Replies: 9
Views: 864

Re: Poetry for squildren

Lots of recommendations to have a look at - thanks!
by calico
Sat Oct 01, 2011 6:46 am
Forum: Poetry Discussion
Topic: Poetry for squildren
Replies: 9
Views: 864

Re: Poetry for squildren

Ah I love that Old Man one.
by calico
Fri Sep 30, 2011 11:12 am
Forum: Poetry Discussion
Topic: Jo Shapcott
Replies: 11
Views: 1756

Re: Jo Shapcott

Really?
by calico
Fri Sep 30, 2011 11:10 am
Forum: Poetry Discussion
Topic: Poetry for squildren
Replies: 9
Views: 864

Re: Poetry for squildren

Looks great. And were you writing for children on purpose, God what a question, do you know what I mean? I suppose I'm thinking can some poetry be not specifically for children but still appeal to them.
by calico
Fri Sep 30, 2011 10:56 am
Forum: Poetry Discussion
Topic: Poetry for squildren
Replies: 9
Views: 864

Poetry for squildren

I remember having a volume of Poetry for 8 year olds, or whatever, but there is some adult poetry that must be amazing for kids - I came across this, you can open the files up to hear him read: http://www.johnsiddique.co.uk/kids/pages/index.htm and the middle poem about making up your life out of pa...
by calico
Fri Sep 30, 2011 10:52 am
Forum: Poetry Discussion
Topic: Jo Shapcott
Replies: 11
Views: 1756

Re: Jo Shapcott

My favourite is one about elastic blue pools that replicate themselves on mountain tops around the world, I think she says they xerox themselves. I think of it often. A man on the tube was reading On Mutability! This is a very rare sighting. He was sitting next to me, with the book open and I recogn...
by calico
Thu Sep 29, 2011 12:42 pm
Forum: Post-a-Poem (Experienced)
Topic: Version 2: Fleeing John (was The Lily-white Boy)
Replies: 12
Views: 693

Version 2: Fleeing John (was The Lily-white Boy)

I can't edit without rewriting . Version 2 - now called 'Fleeing John' When they tried to touch his finger, raw where he had gnawed it clean, he degloved himself, ring and all, and, amazed!, harmed but free, he legged it Down by the rushes, left at the sundial thick footed through the thicket. He t...
by calico
Thu Sep 29, 2011 12:34 pm
Forum: Ezines, Magazines and Publications
Topic: Another in Other
Replies: 13
Views: 1753

Re: Another in Other

Yes, well done! I like Other. I don't do very well at all with Other.
by calico
Thu Sep 29, 2011 12:27 pm
Forum: Ezines, Magazines and Publications
Topic: Brittle Star
Replies: 6
Views: 1042

Brittle Star

This poem 'Stalks'

viewtopic.php?f=3&t=14583&p=115779#p115779

been accepted here:

http://www.brittlestar.org.uk/

Thanks to many of you for comments and suggestions!
Anyone know the magazine?