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by Mic
Tue Jul 21, 2009 4:54 pm
Forum: Post-a-Poem (Experienced)
Topic: Sumptuary laws -or- Who may wear the weasel-fur?
Replies: 19
Views: 1295

Re: Sumptuary laws -or- Who may wear the weasel-fur?

I found it kind of hypnotic. I know but little about poetic forms, this has elements of a rondeau, no? I know but little..

Yours, edified and mesmerised,

Mic
by Mic
Tue Jul 21, 2009 4:34 pm
Forum: Poetry Exercises
Topic: Cloud watching...
Replies: 21
Views: 3649

Re: Cloud watching...

It's fab. Manufacturing weird lines and wacky metaphors in the Cloud 9 Poetry Factory.
Ha ha. I like it.
by Mic
Tue Jul 21, 2009 3:20 pm
Forum: Poetry Exercises
Topic: Cloud watching...
Replies: 21
Views: 3649

Re: Cloud watching...

While gatecrashers boiled barley in the aubergine;
unable to retort the Thong's education
(that a you can crank a haul-sized
accelerator in a dust-up), a bowel of
bollards bubbled-up through the debris in
the basket.

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ha ha ha! that first line is quite funny, no?
by Mic
Tue Jul 21, 2009 3:16 pm
Forum: Poetry Exercises
Topic: Cloud watching...
Replies: 21
Views: 3649

Re: Cloud watching...

While gasmen boiled barley in the attic,
unable to rethink the Thinker's edict
(that you can cram a hatchet-sized
abyss in a dustcart), a bouquet of
boils bubbled-up through the debris in
the basement.
by Mic
Tue Jul 21, 2009 2:24 pm
Forum: Poetry Exercises
Topic: Cloud watching...
Replies: 21
Views: 3649

Re: Cloud watching...

I like this game Ian. It delivers some sweet surprises. Thanks for posting it.

Yaar!

Mic
by Mic
Sun Jul 19, 2009 5:56 pm
Forum: Post-a-Poem (Beginners)
Topic: Trapped in thought
Replies: 5
Views: 390

Trapped in thought

I stand heavily in the wilderness of this thought while weary hours ache in passing while weary days pool at my clodden feet. I search for the edge or a gap in this thought but the closer I look the harder it is to see. small breaths, half the size of a full-stop small breaths, half the size of a f...
by Mic
Sun Jul 19, 2009 10:10 am
Forum: Post-a-Poem (Beginners)
Topic: The things we don't say - revised
Replies: 4
Views: 322

Re: The things we don't say - revised

Hi David. Too much chilli.
*sigh*

Mic
by Mic
Sat Jul 18, 2009 1:43 pm
Forum: Post-a-Poem (Beginners)
Topic: The things we don't say - revised
Replies: 4
Views: 322

Re: The things we don't say

Thanks aru. I've (quite radically) re-written the ending!

Mic
by Mic
Fri Jul 17, 2009 8:57 pm
Forum: Post-a-Poem (Beginners)
Topic: Hard conversations
Replies: 8
Views: 605

Re: Hard conversations

Yes, it was meant as a metaphor for getting lost in difficult conversations. And because of this interlocutor's (understandable) frustration, the topic has been - is still! - on extended pause.

Mic
by Mic
Fri Jul 17, 2009 5:37 pm
Forum: Poetry Exercises
Topic: Cloud watching...
Replies: 21
Views: 3649

Re: Cloud watching...

A singular drug,
fondly formed
in a broken intestine;
ornamental now,
preserved in formaldehyde;
before though, it orbited
a hatchet-sized spangle
with glider boils, chiming,
furnished with
infinite lightness.
by Mic
Fri Jul 17, 2009 5:20 pm
Forum: Poetry Exercises
Topic: Cloud watching...
Replies: 21
Views: 3649

Re: Cloud watching...

A singular droplet,
fondly formed
in a broken interval;
ornamental now,
preserved in formaldehyde;
before though, it orbited
a hat-sized space
with glass bodies, chiming,
furnished with
infinite lightness.

http://www.wordle.net/gallery/wrdl/995071/Grave_Poets
by Mic
Fri Jul 17, 2009 1:31 pm
Forum: Post-a-Poem (Beginners)
Topic: And God Said
Replies: 6
Views: 410

Re: And God Said

Peter -

aru's suggested title is a good idea!

This is like a highly-spun release from God's press office, written by Angel Peter Mandelson.

Liked.

Mich
by Mic
Fri Jul 17, 2009 12:43 pm
Forum: Post-a-Poem (Beginners)
Topic: swansong
Replies: 8
Views: 510

Re: swansong

Ahhh, but I seee! Is this an angel in the form of a swan....?

Mic
by Mic
Fri Jul 17, 2009 12:41 pm
Forum: Post-a-Poem (Beginners)
Topic: swansong
Replies: 8
Views: 510

Re: swansong

Hi there WMT, I enjoyed the juxtaposition of form and content - the matter-of-fact delivery that is somehow at odds with the wistful content. A couple of things didn't work for me - the angel you describe - with a beak - sounds more like a swan to me (and this impression is underlined by the title, ...
by Mic
Fri Jul 17, 2009 12:08 pm
Forum: Post-a-Poem (Experienced)
Topic: The Perfection of Duty
Replies: 7
Views: 562

Re: The Perfection of Duty

There is so much to appreciate in this. The title for starters. I do like the idea of 'perfecting' rather than 'executing' a duty. But I like too the ambiguity - that 'Perfection' could be read as a verb or an adjective. The voice is charmingly understated. The gentle rhythm is like the back and for...
by Mic
Fri Jul 17, 2009 11:43 am
Forum: Post-a-Poem (Beginners)
Topic: And God Said
Replies: 6
Views: 410

Re: And God Said

Gosh! There's something hypnotically captivating about this. It reminds me a little of:

“All shall be well, and all shall be well, and all manner of things shall be well.” -- Julian of Norwich
by Mic
Thu Jul 16, 2009 11:20 pm
Forum: Post-a-Poem (Beginners)
Topic: The things we don't say - revised
Replies: 4
Views: 322

The things we don't say - revised

A thousand conversations pressed against hard lips. Eclipsed before they’ve even begun, this injured swarm of unsaid words has spurs that snag on heart and tongue; and in the wild meadows of our minds, where meaning blossoms, flowers and fruits, we find the seeds of unsaid things have taken root, sp...
by Mic
Tue Jul 14, 2009 11:55 am
Forum: Post-a-Poem (Beginners)
Topic: Hard conversations
Replies: 8
Views: 605

Re: Hard conversations

Thanks Lovely! You gotta larf, no? David - I'm just not quick enough for certain of the more cerebral sorts in my close circle of friends. I just keep getting lost and a bit stuck, can't keep up. They have to keep stopping and waiting while I pore over maps, misread signs, head off completely in the...
by Mic
Sun Jul 12, 2009 12:45 am
Forum: Post-a-Poem (Beginners)
Topic: Hard conversations
Replies: 8
Views: 605

Re: Hard conversations

Thanks aru.
I think you might be onto something there Dante...

Mic
by Mic
Sat Jul 11, 2009 2:26 pm
Forum: Post-a-Poem (Beginners)
Topic: Scenery - title changed and revised
Replies: 7
Views: 502

Re: Scenery - title changed and revised

Thanks aru!
by Mic
Sat Jul 11, 2009 2:23 pm
Forum: Post-a-Poem (Beginners)
Topic: Scenery - title changed and revised
Replies: 7
Views: 502

Scenery - title changed and revised

Hi Sharra - funny you should say that. I was originally going to stop after the first three lines. But I was wanting to create a feeling of sadness tinged with humour and I don't think just those three lines achieved that. David - thanks. Pen-y-Fron means top of the hill in Welsh. It doesn't work as...
by Mic
Sat Jul 11, 2009 12:30 pm
Forum: Post-a-Poem (Beginners)
Topic: Hard conversations
Replies: 8
Views: 605

Hard conversations

Look! I’ve got a map,
a knapsack, a compass,
two woolly hats, waterproofs
and sturdy boots.

Let me walk with you again.
by Mic
Sat Jul 11, 2009 12:23 pm
Forum: Post-a-Poem (Beginners)
Topic: Jaisalmer hues
Replies: 4
Views: 251

Re: Jaisalmer hues

Moody. Exotic. [ Jaisalmer - http://en.wikipedia.org/wiki/Jaisalmer ] ** caravan shadows caress sand dune wrinkles ** seated side by side camel and its driver -- (do you need 'its'?) blond sun between them ** nomadic minstrels silhouetted against one large lollipop ('lolliplop' seems out of place in...
by Mic
Wed Jul 08, 2009 12:16 pm
Forum: Post-a-Poem (Beginners)
Topic: Fishing for chips - revised
Replies: 5
Views: 457

Re: Fishing for chips - revised

elph, Ray thanks for your input. Poem amended accordingly.
elph - I suffer terribly from missing articles. Sometimes I find them in the fridge.
Ray - rhythm, aahhh! I can't ever even seem to spell the bloody word properly never mind do it.

More practice (encouraging note to self).

Mic
by Mic
Wed Jul 08, 2009 12:01 pm
Forum: Post-a-Poem (Beginners)
Topic: Dry dock - revised
Replies: 12
Views: 730

Re: Dry dock - revised

Thanks Ray. Such marvellous thoughts. Both of them. Equally.

Mic