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by Mic
Sat Aug 08, 2009 9:16 am
Forum: Post-a-Poem (Beginners)
Topic: I'm not writing any poems today!
Replies: 10
Views: 531

Re: I'm not writing any poem today!

Ha! What a delicious feast for the eyes. I'm enjoying this fairy-tale rendering of the quest for the perfect poem. The repetition - of end lines and beginning lines - creates a romping pace through the poem. I do have a quibble of a 'logic' sort with stanza 2. Do you perhaps need 'unable' in that fi...
by Mic
Sat Aug 08, 2009 9:04 am
Forum: Post-a-Poem (Beginners)
Topic: Six dwarfs and a Monster
Replies: 9
Views: 587

Re: Six dwarfs and a Monster

Nice idea aru. The gentle rise of meaning through the poem is pleasurable, and a bit of a quest in itself! It occurred to me that it would have even more energy in the present tense, so I tried it (hope you don't mind). I'm not sure, however, if you have a scheme of some sort going on with this - sy...
by Mic
Fri Aug 07, 2009 7:11 pm
Forum: Post-a-Poem (Beginners)
Topic: I see you walk radiant towards me
Replies: 8
Views: 624

I see you walk radiant towards me

I turn, I see you walk radiant towards me through all our yesterdays; through hillsides bruised with purple heather under a quiet evening sky more blue because of you, because of you I turn, I turn, and I turn again but you are gone! You are gone. No! Today has turned away from you, but not I; I wil...
by Mic
Thu Jul 30, 2009 8:07 am
Forum: Music and Song Lyric Discussion
Topic: June Tabor - The Cloud Factory
Replies: 4
Views: 11463

Re: June Tabor - The Cloud Factory

Made me cry.
*Sniffle*

Mic
by Mic
Thu Jul 30, 2009 6:07 am
Forum: Post-a-Poem (Beginners)
Topic: Tessa - revised
Replies: 9
Views: 704

Re: Tessa - revised

Many thanks for your comments Jsabian and PcfJ.

Mic
by Mic
Thu Jul 30, 2009 5:49 am
Forum: Post-a-Poem (Beginners)
Topic: How I Know You
Replies: 6
Views: 1561

Re: How I Know You

Thanks aru, Ros and David. David - I wish I could take credit for the irregular sequencing of the dates; but no (*sigh*), it came from a workshop exercise based on a poem by Deborah Harding called How I knew Harold, which itself got its inspiration from a poem by Terence Winch that plays with time i...
by Mic
Tue Jul 28, 2009 8:38 am
Forum: Post-a-Poem (Beginners)
Topic: How I Know You
Replies: 6
Views: 1561

How I Know You

Around 1987 our one-eyed cat Blackie walks out. Two years later she purrs and purrs her way between Mum’s ankles; peers up through her green eye for all the world as though nothing has happened. Around 2008 we gather in Dad’s small flat to decorate my grandmother’s white cardboard coffin. Her great-...
by Mic
Mon Jul 27, 2009 9:17 pm
Forum: Post-a-Poem (Experienced)
Topic: Window writes short poem about a girl
Replies: 10
Views: 831

Re: Window writes short poem about a girl

This made me look twice first time around and made me smile.
Then I saw Ray's poem about stairs.

Here's my variation on the theme, it's called:

Ground writes v. short lament about feet

You walk
all over me

Liked it. Yes. Neat idea.

Mic
by Mic
Mon Jul 27, 2009 4:25 pm
Forum: Post-a-Poem (Experienced)
Topic: Spice Cabinet
Replies: 10
Views: 1064

Re: Spice Cabinet

This spoke with poignant anger to me about the distress of witnessing the ravages of age on a loved one. I liked it.

Mic
by Mic
Sun Jul 26, 2009 10:21 pm
Forum: Post-a-Poem (Beginners)
Topic: Tessa - revised
Replies: 9
Views: 704

Re: Tessa - revised

Thanks Rich. That sounds like a plan. Revised accordingly.

Mic
by Mic
Sun Jul 26, 2009 1:49 pm
Forum: Post-a-Poem (Beginners)
Topic: Don't forget to nom!
Replies: 4
Views: 283

Re: Don't forget to nom!

I'd like to nominate Aru's Oh Kolkata! My Kolkata!
by Mic
Sun Jul 26, 2009 12:07 pm
Forum: Post-a-Poem (Beginners)
Topic: Tessa - revised
Replies: 9
Views: 704

Re: Tessa

Thanks aru, thanks Rich - Basnik

And Rich, you probably won't be surprised to learn that I am in ongoing agony over those last two lines; you know, to keep them or ditch them... dunno, immobilised by indecision.

Mic
by Mic
Sat Jul 25, 2009 2:52 pm
Forum: Post-a-Poem (Beginners)
Topic: Tessa - revised
Replies: 9
Views: 704

Tessa - revised

You tied a crystal to the window with a cotton thread so sunshine through each turn can choreograph a new dance of iridescent light across my bed. original:- You tied a crystal to the window with a cotton thread so sunshine through each turn can choreograph a new dance of iridescent light across my ...
by Mic
Fri Jul 24, 2009 1:31 pm
Forum: Post-a-Poem (Beginners)
Topic: The choir -edit
Replies: 7
Views: 488

Re: The choir -edit

What a fantastically unfluffy love poem. I really, really liked this.

With much envy,

Mic
by Mic
Fri Jul 24, 2009 6:17 am
Forum: Post-a-Poem (Beginners)
Topic: Rubber cheques
Replies: 7
Views: 477

Re: Rubber cheques

The worst thing is I have, not often, but I have, issued a few dud cheques myself.

Mic
by Mic
Thu Jul 23, 2009 12:22 pm
Forum: Post-a-Poem (Beginners)
Topic: The Poets' Graves Annual Ball
Replies: 7
Views: 479

Re: The Poets' Graves Annual Ball

yes yes yes! wonderful. I'll be back x
by Mic
Thu Jul 23, 2009 6:52 am
Forum: Post-a-Poem (Beginners)
Topic: Rubber cheques
Replies: 7
Views: 477

Re: Rubber cheque

Thanks Lovely! My coffers overfloweth in other ways xxx

Gaz - cheers. Monied/moneyed - both are valid currency. But maybe 'monied' would look beter on the page...

Mic
by Mic
Wed Jul 22, 2009 7:09 pm
Forum: Post-a-Poem (Beginners)
Topic: Rubber cheques
Replies: 7
Views: 477

Rubber cheques

How freely you dispense praise and compliments. What a moneybags you are! Natty you, in your sartorial rags, loose change clanging in loose pockets; in your wallet wads of new-minted cash to splash. Writing blank cheques at breakneck speed; there you go-- at it again, like there's no tomorrow. Feeli...
by Mic
Wed Jul 22, 2009 4:03 pm
Forum: Post-a-Poem (Experienced)
Topic: ↑EXPRESS LANE↓
Replies: 3
Views: 258

Re: ↑EXPRESS LANE↓

:lol: :lol: enjoyed the (joy)ride. I like the visual stuff - the symbols etc -. How should + be read out loud (or in your head)? Is it 'and' or 'plus'?

Mic
by Mic
Wed Jul 22, 2009 3:49 pm
Forum: Post-a-Poem (Experienced)
Topic: Landing Natal
Replies: 6
Views: 444

Re: Landing Natal

G. Natal? South Africa? Or is this, like, a Latin word for birth or something? Anyway, don't get the title. I didn't like this at all I'm afraid. It was, well, just too 'preachy' I s'pose for my tastes. I don't even know if it's preachy, it's more that it doesn't seem to say very much, and (you're n...
by Mic
Wed Jul 22, 2009 3:27 pm
Forum: Post-a-Poem (Experienced)
Topic: Appetite
Replies: 14
Views: 769

Re: Appetite

G. Ooooo! Love the voice in this. Good concrete details and images paint a vivid picture and appeal to more than one sense. I can really picture the scene. You've got some nicely subtle internal ryhme. You take this poem to another dimension in II - for me this is the heart of the poem. You've captu...
by Mic
Wed Jul 22, 2009 6:53 am
Forum: Post-a-Poem (Beginners)
Topic: Don't forget to nom!
Replies: 4
Views: 283

Re: Don't forget to nom!

How many can I nominate?
by Mic
Tue Jul 21, 2009 8:45 pm
Forum: Poetry Exercises
Topic: Cloud watching...
Replies: 21
Views: 3648

Re: Cloud watching...

Can we have another cloud?

Pretty please :D

Mic
by Mic
Tue Jul 21, 2009 8:38 pm
Forum: Poetry Exercises
Topic: Cloud watching...
Replies: 21
Views: 3648

Re: Cloud watching...

:lol: :lol: :lol: Good one bod. Wish I'd thought of doing that.

hmmmm. putting thinking cap on for the next one

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by Mic
Tue Jul 21, 2009 4:59 pm
Forum: Poetry Discussion
Topic: TS Eliot - Marlon
Replies: 7
Views: 853

Re: TS Eliot - Marlon

That voice is just much too irritating.