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by Mic
Mon Jan 20, 2014 5:51 am
Forum: Post-a-Poem (Experienced)
Topic: This year
Replies: 22
Views: 1636

Re: This year

Thanks David. I'm glad I took the advice to work on this a little more.

Mic
by Mic
Thu Jan 16, 2014 12:52 pm
Forum: Ezines, Magazines and Publications
Topic: Message in a Bottle
Replies: 9
Views: 872

Re: Message in a Bottle

Well done!
by Mic
Thu Jan 16, 2014 12:52 pm
Forum: Ezines, Magazines and Publications
Topic: Another Message in a Bottle.
Replies: 12
Views: 1241

Re: Another Message in a Bottle.

Hurrah!
by Mic
Thu Jan 16, 2014 12:51 pm
Forum: Ezines, Magazines and Publications
Topic: And me! in MIB!
Replies: 11
Views: 1299

Re: And me! in MIB!

Great news!
by Mic
Wed Jan 15, 2014 11:39 am
Forum: Post-a-Poem (Experienced)
Topic: Sidestep (edited)
Replies: 13
Views: 893

Re: Sidestep (edited)

I'm liking this 'different' Ros too! There is something more 'personal' and immediate.

(which doesn't mean to say don't like some of your more sciency poems)

Mic
by Mic
Wed Jan 15, 2014 11:37 am
Forum: Post-a-Poem (Experienced)
Topic: This year
Replies: 22
Views: 1636

Re: This year

Thanks Ros.

Ending on 'dragons' was a suggestion from someone over at 52.

Mic
by Mic
Wed Jan 15, 2014 9:30 am
Forum: Post-a-Poem (Experienced)
Topic: In Tandem (was a dad who pedals)
Replies: 8
Views: 541

Re: In Tandem (was a dad who pedals)

Hi Luke, I liked the mood of this. I have a couple of reservations though. I find myself not sure about 'precipitous'. I'm not sure if it's because it makes that line a bit of a mouthful or because it is just superfluous. I think your piece might read better without, though I like the idea of steepn...
by Mic
Tue Jan 14, 2014 11:22 pm
Forum: Ezines, Magazines and Publications
Topic: Poetry Bus1/Burning Bush1...Irish Campaign
Replies: 22
Views: 1336

Re: Poetry Bus1/Burning Bush1...Irish Campaign

Yes, I got a note from him saying he'd have published something I'd sent it, if it weren't for the fact that he wasn't going to be doing it anymore! Shame, they had a good reputation I think, and had been publishing for some years.

edit: Smiths Knoll, I mean
by Mic
Tue Jan 14, 2014 9:43 pm
Forum: Ezines, Magazines and Publications
Topic: Poetry Bus1/Burning Bush1...Irish Campaign
Replies: 22
Views: 1336

Re: Poetry Bus1/Burning Bush1...Irish Campaign

Smith's Knoll has gone under :-(
by Mic
Tue Jan 14, 2014 6:43 pm
Forum: Post-a-Poem (Experienced)
Topic: This year
Replies: 22
Views: 1636

Re: This year

Thanks Ros and David.

I've posted a revised version - with work on the weakest couplets.

Cheers

Mic
by Mic
Sun Jan 12, 2014 4:05 pm
Forum: Ezines, Magazines and Publications
Topic: Interpreters House
Replies: 8
Views: 921

Re: Interpreters House

Thanks everyone!

Mic
by Mic
Sat Jan 11, 2014 12:24 am
Forum: Ezines, Magazines and Publications
Topic: Interpreters House
Replies: 8
Views: 921

Interpreters House

by Mic
Fri Jan 10, 2014 5:46 pm
Forum: Post-a-Poem (Experienced)
Topic: Bus Stop Arbitration
Replies: 6
Views: 751

Re: Bus Stop Arbitration

I wasn't really sure what this was on about - but I enjoyed the tidy writing nevertheless, and those rhymes. Yup.

Mic
by Mic
Fri Jan 10, 2014 5:43 pm
Forum: Post-a-Poem (Experienced)
Topic: This year
Replies: 22
Views: 1636

Re: This year

Thanks Seth.

"...reminds me a bit of a line from your Dr Zhivago poem. :D Like snow it accumulates? " - I'm plagiarising myself a little. Cool that you remembered the line though!

Mic
by Mic
Thu Jan 09, 2014 10:19 am
Forum: Post-a-Poem (Experienced)
Topic: This year
Replies: 22
Views: 1636

Re: This year

Thanks Mac and Beautifulloser. I have perhaps fallen by accident into the cliché trap along the way with this one. I do like something about it though. I plan to do some work on the weak points that have been highlighted - perhaps introduce something less expected, and maybe some more food as well! ...
by Mic
Thu Jan 09, 2014 9:42 am
Forum: Post-a-Poem (Experienced)
Topic: At Souda Bay
Replies: 22
Views: 1830

Re: At Souda Bay

Hi David,

I don't know the historical event - but it doesn't matter really. I like it. Especially the first two verses.

Mic
by Mic
Wed Jan 08, 2014 2:14 pm
Forum: Post-a-Poem (Experienced)
Topic: This year
Replies: 22
Views: 1636

Re: This year

Thanks Luke. I must admit that as I was writing it I had a similar thought - I knew it was a potential problem - the predictability of it amongst other things - about naming all the months. I will look again at how I might indicate a month without giving it's name, or using folkloric names instead. ...
by Mic
Wed Jan 08, 2014 2:12 pm
Forum: Post-a-Poem (Experienced)
Topic: This year
Replies: 22
Views: 1636

Re: This year

Thanks for this Ray. I think there is a general feeling that the the middle section is weaker than the rest. I'm going to rework these sections.

Mic
by Mic
Wed Jan 08, 2014 11:00 am
Forum: Post-a-Poem (Experienced)
Topic: This year
Replies: 22
Views: 1636

Re: This year

I love the idea as a poem for someone - I think some parts are working better than others. Like the first 4 verses - could you keep the idea of precious stones throughout? Think it loses its way a bit then - daffodils are a bit ordinary after clutching garnets. November is lovely - that's another i...
by Mic
Tue Jan 07, 2014 7:00 pm
Forum: Post-a-Poem (Experienced)
Topic: This year
Replies: 22
Views: 1636

Re: This year

Thanks Og, negative responses are as useful to hear as positive ones - and you've raised some good points. I'll see whether there are some fixes.

Cheers

Mic
by Mic
Tue Jan 07, 2014 2:35 pm
Forum: Post-a-Poem (Experienced)
Topic: Spoiled
Replies: 20
Views: 1179

Re: Spoiled

Hi Suzanne, Words like fireflies drift soundlessly - ------------ not keen on this first sentence, I'd cut it and start with "And suddenly I recall behind my eyes. And I suddenly recall last summer's strawberries riding -------------------- I'm not sure about the grammar here... strawberries riding?...
by Mic
Tue Jan 07, 2014 2:29 pm
Forum: Post-a-Poem (Beginners)
Topic: Green Tomatoes
Replies: 12
Views: 822

Re: Green Tomatoes

I loved it!

Mic
by Mic
Tue Jan 07, 2014 2:25 pm
Forum: Post-a-Poem (Experienced)
Topic: Redemption
Replies: 3
Views: 318

Re: Redemption

Hi Stuart, I always find your work compelling somehow - even though I often am not sure quite what is going on. I find this similarly interesting - though I do think it is too sprawling as it is at the moment. I've cut out the bits I'm not keen on, just so you know. These are the lines I like. And I...
by Mic
Tue Jan 07, 2014 2:16 pm
Forum: Post-a-Poem (Experienced)
Topic: Big Bad Wind (REVISED - again)
Replies: 31
Views: 2530

Re: Big Bad Wind (REVISED - again)

Hi Geoff, I think this might be a nice one for kids. I like how the 1st stanza gets thinner as it runs out of puff. The poem did make me thing about farting! But then kids would love that. Rachel Rooney's collection of poetry for children (and just as appealing to adults) 'The Language of Cat' is wo...